APW: The Weight of Water (843 hits)
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Rating: 1.85 on 17 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Orgasmatron (View user info) at 2007-03-28 23:59:29 EDT
The man before the Man,
The word before the Word,
The skybreaker, the forerunner,
Born of mania and water and to water
Consigned, designed and directed by
A right hand red with the stain of
Future sacrifice and victory
To free life,
To prove the first death false
With fervor and the spit of a river.
Ready from the womb, the language thief
Young and aware, significant, drowned
In faith and introspection
To breathe the water of the Lord
And find in the depths a truth,
A peace, a steady head,
A calm before the coming storm,
Something hidden and severe,
Secreted through kings' valleys and
Upon temples' steps revealed,
A melody to please the heart of man
Blanketed in the slow beat of a drum.
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Submitted by experima (user info) at 2007-03-29 21:36:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-03-29 18:15:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-03-28 23:59:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Juuuuuuust made it. Woo.
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holy shit.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-03-29 18:07:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
aha - I'm getting better...I thought to myself, Caravaggio, then checked the filename!
WOO I roxxorz!
Submitted by Dexter-Brown (user info) at 2007-03-29 13:42:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Yeah, I can picture him without a head.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2007-03-29 12:28:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
His erect piece is visitable through his incommensurate togaes.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-03-29 12:22:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
That's one attractive apostle.
The first lines are my favorite.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-03-29 10:17:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
You didn't know JtB only had one leg? He's Tiger's great-great-great-great-great-great-great-
great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-
great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-uncle.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2007-03-29 10:15:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
i was wondering where the other half of his left leg was. then i adjusted my screen brightness.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-03-29 09:55:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Positive Comment
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-03-29 09:21:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Well writ.
Submitted by BranDo (user info) at 2007-03-29 08:10:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
klasse
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-03-29 03:44:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nicely done. I'm not really a critic, I just know when I like something.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-03-29 00:50:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this, but I found some of your imagery inconsistent.
I think this is a result of putting style before substance, Origami-san.
But that is very picky, and this is certainly a +2.
'Born of mania and water and to water consigned' is lovely.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-03-29 00:25:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Score.
Submitted by Progr3ss (user info) at 2007-03-29 00:02:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Something hidden and severe,
Secreted through kings' valleys and
Upon temples' steps revealed
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thats gold
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-03-29 00:02:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
*BUZZ!*
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-03-28 23:59:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Juuuuuuust made it. Woo.