SUPA: Maleficarum (424 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: 2 on 16 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by goferforhire <goferforhire.at.yahoo.com> (View user info) at 2007-04-05 22:07:16 EDT
Speak.
Rachael, Madeleine;
are these names,
are they worthy of you?
Is this, the smoke we breathe,
is this you that is burning?
Speak,
Mary, Alexis,
of the fire lit
in the draping of your hair.
Speak to your freckled skin
crackling, splitting, and weeping
in the wash of blistering heat,
to the pieces of burning
fabric, floating like embers
in the ashen air.
Speak of this,
your death, in the sweetest manner.
Speak of the smoke-light,
the fire's halo hovering
at your hairline.
Speak before the last
dust-cloud disappates
and you have faded
to the circle of stones
at your feet.
Speak, little witch;
it'll all be over soon.
User Reviews
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-04-11 21:31:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
righteous, little brother
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-04-11 18:15:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
the fire's halo hovering
at your hairline
Purifying fire turning the sinners into saints. I love it.
Was the circle of stones an intentional gesture to practices of binding, or was it just relating the natural arrangement of rocks around open flame?
Picking up the Malleus Maleficarum was perhaps the most interesting purchase of my college years.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2007-04-11 17:07:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-04-10 18:30:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good luck to all contestants.
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-04-10 04:00:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-04-07 16:57:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-04-06 13:34:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm not rating SUPA in general yet, and I try to wait for pairs, but I'm making an exception for this.
It's really good. Good imagery, the language is simple and the tone is creepy. Well done.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-04-06 13:21:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
good
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-04-06 10:33:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn.
Good shtuff
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-04-06 10:00:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Only girl i loved is called Alexis :(
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2007-04-06 09:49:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Excellent.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-06 09:10:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
What Zebra said.
You write very well for a young'un.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-06 00:02:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-04-05 23:34:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-05 22:18:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this very much.
Only ctiticism would be to take out the contraction in the last line and spellcheck.
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Oh, the ironies.
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ahahahaha
cRiticism.
Submitted by strwbryfanatic (user info) at 2007-04-05 23:36:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
My name's in this! Correct spelling, even!
PLUS TWO FOR MOTHERFUCKING YOU!
Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-04-05 23:34:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-05 22:18:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this very much.
Only ctiticism would be to take out the contraction in the last line and spellcheck.
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Oh, the ironies.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-05 22:18:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this very much.
Only ctiticism would be to take out the contraction in the last line and spellcheck.
Really good.