SUPA: "Tuesdays with Worry" (713 hits)
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Submitted by Circe <fickle.muse.at.gmail.com> (View user info) at 2007-04-09 10:29:44 EDT
"I suck the fluid from the spinal cords of my lovers," she beams.
"It keeps me young," and she has no teeth
And her hair is as grey as the scum on top of my coffee.
I can drink it if I don't think about it.
And her cat in one moment arches its back
And bares its teeth at me smiling
And in the next is asleep and I'd tell her
But I think she knows and I think
It knows too.
There is a knitted afghan over her lap
But her kitchen smells of piss and I
Am too polite to say anything
But I think it might be my coffee that smells that way.
I'd ask the cat but he already knows too much.
Yes, she says, and I see her greypink tiny gums
She'd like me to comb her hair because
Lovers are few and far between
And the fluid from transients isn't the same
She pushes the cat off her lap and
I grab the afghan before it can fall
And allow whatever lives underneath to escape
And she smiles knowingly
And so does the cat
Her hair is soft like wisps of nothing
She can't reach to wash it anymore
So it's yellow with the cigarettes she smokes
And eats.
I'm not going to finish my coffee.
User Reviews
Submitted by Alter (user info) at 2007-09-26 22:12:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No, Comment.
Submitted by MouthSore (user info) at 2007-04-15 00:27:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-04-11 23:51:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Yes, she says, and I see her greypink tiny gums
She'd like me to comb her hair because
Lovers are few and far between
And the fluid from transients isn't the same
I hate you, Warrior Poetess.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-04-11 12:07:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Classic Circe.
One of the trifecta this round.
This is what I'm talkin' about.
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-04-11 02:54:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I can see why you won last time.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-04-10 21:47:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
A nice story and really off the wall, but it isn't poetry. Sorry.
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-04-10 18:29:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good luck to all contestants.
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2007-04-10 13:07:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I dug the line-breaks.
Submitted by iddqd (user info) at 2007-04-10 09:29:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
nice. needs more punctuation.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-04-10 04:04:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by firefly (user info) at 2007-04-09 23:25:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by ahumblefool (user info) at 2007-04-09 17:35:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good work
Submitted by loki (user info) at 2007-04-09 15:55:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
nice uh imagery
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2007-04-09 14:06:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Circe rules. i miss talking with you Circe. do you have Gmail?
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2007-04-09 12:41:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You should try writing crap. Just give it a go.
Submitted by Blinkish (user info) at 2007-04-09 12:33:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-04-09 12:15:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
cool!
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-04-09 12:10:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i like this
Submitted by Zampano (user info) at 2007-04-09 12:01:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'd be hard pressed to never finish a cup of coffee.
Submitted by Barnymeinhoff (user info) at 2007-04-09 11:50:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Void_Where_Prohibited (user info) at 2007-04-09 11:03:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Only because of this...
I'd ask the cat but he already knows too much.
The rest made me gag.
Good job!!
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-09 10:49:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Very nice.
Albom should jump up and kiss your ass.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-09 10:43:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I've been enduring two weeks of feeding my cat medicine for a urinary tract infection...Chinese towel tortute at its best.
Damn cats.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2007-04-09 10:40:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I like a poem with a central image that it is built around.
Submitted by Coyote (user info) at 2007-04-09 10:38:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I don't know much about poetry, but this made it very difficult to finish my cup of coffee, so +2 for strength of imagery!
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-04-09 10:34:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by The_taste_of_Monkeys (user info) at 2007-04-09 10:34:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
And Ive just realised that, shit, I may have to face you.
Submitted by The_taste_of_Monkeys (user info) at 2007-04-09 10:33:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This was coolio
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-04-09 10:33:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
http://www.ubersite.com/m/100431
Just so you know....+2's are a great way of saying thanks.
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-04-09 10:32:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Neato. It's uhh.....Well if I knew anything about poetry, I could give you a proper analysis.
Seeing as how I don't, I won't. +2
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2007-04-09 10:30:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
She had that Camarillo Brillo....