the marriage of heaven and hell - SUPA (969 hits)
Category: RomanceLabels: poetry
Rating: 1.54 on 32 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by scourge (View user info) at 2007-04-10 17:47:33 EDT
the great human comedy
This, the punchline to the human comedy
(Most certainly known to the light dispositioned
(Fallacious, absurd claims to the contrary))
Perpretrated 'pon all without an omission
Naked arrive; soon in search, ON A MISSION!
Questions and answers and answers and questions,
Never conjoin to reveal our condition,
Though those 'in the know' offer empty expressions.
Come! Seek...and Query! Please, do ask your questions!
Knowledge, ALL KNOWLEDGE, we have, keep and contain!
(Born green - like you - this is quite the suggestion
We're born green indeed, and that green we'll remain.)
So...to this it comes; the knowers know nothing?
But God damn it all, we surely need something!
the marriage of heaven and hell
But, God damn it all, we surely need something?
So what prompts this striving? 'HELP!' our mute plea.
Duality, desire and necessity
Clarity, found knowledge to answer our yearning
What is it I do? How to justify 'me'?
When desire is heaven, necessity, hell.
Reconciliation to same and to self,
Is the path to take, but not the way to be
With a mind clear as mud, the answer does tell
Through face burning bright, and your cheeks stained deep red
Is it now hammered through your thick, dumb, dense head?
Sad marriage (by own choice!) at days end befell
Does debasement of self describe self as fool?
We're chained to the world and we all have to pull
the cold, cold ground
We're chained to the world and we all have to pull
Constantly against all that falls in our way
From the first man to last, emperor to fool
The yoke placed upon us is placed there to stay
Is it preconceived, done and known, our pathway?
If so, ask the question; could this fight be won
(Even given all that we do, think and say)
When before we begin, we're already done?
If our selves aren't real, or a true 'someone',
The question needs asked: Where's our self to be found?
From black back to black we'll return, all and one
To the loving embrace of the cold, cold ground
Each choice to the last, self contained travesty
This, the punchline to the human comedy
User Reviews
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-05-18 12:48:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by Coleslaw_Murphy (user info) at 2007-04-11 23:59:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Great.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-04-11 17:36:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Great use of structure and rhyme. You let yourself go wide and roll, which is something I find I have a hard time doing, but you did it all inside a cage of beats and matched syllables so hats off for that.
You do realize you're going to force people to work to really get this, right?
And you do realize that doesn't fly here?
On some lines you were on and some you were off, but once I got to this
(Born green - like you - this is quite the suggestion
We're born green indeed, and that green we'll remain.)
and heard the words fall down to make a strict beat I knew I was really into this thing. And you were really into this thing. And here we are together...nowhere.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2007-04-11 17:02:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2007-04-11 15:04:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
If you liked this one, you'd LOVE: http://www.ubersite.com/m/100534
You'll have to trust me on this.
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2007-04-11 14:45:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
One of my favorites so far.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-04-11 11:46:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Top 3, no question.
Made me pay attention. Specifics later, but I simply loved it.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-11 09:40:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"Oh, what a tangled web we weave
When first we practice to deceive."
I don't know why, but your sonnetata made me think of that line.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-04-11 07:47:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
scourge
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-04-11 04:23:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-04-11 03:16:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2007-04-11 02:05:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I thought this might have been about nodes and mushrooms.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-04-10 22:59:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good good.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-10 20:39:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Hookhand (user info) at 2007-04-10 20:25:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
This is better than mine
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-04-10 19:54:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
yes indeedy.
nice work fella.
Submitted by UberSavedMyLife (user info) at 2007-04-10 19:32:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i owe you another +2 for a retaliatory +2 i gave earlier...this was definately better
Submitted by UberSavedMyLife (user info) at 2007-04-10 19:30:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
yep
Submitted by Sinistral (user info) at 2007-04-10 18:56:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Sounds a bit like T.S. Eliot.
Submitted by messmind (user info) at 2007-04-10 18:53:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
1.5, i liked part 1 & 2...
Submitted by messmind (user info) at 2007-04-10 18:52:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Zampano (user info) at 2007-04-10 18:36:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Montucky
Ranking: 1
Just finish reading Dante's Divine Comedy?
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+2 for being slightly more well-read. Blake kicks ass any day.
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-04-10 18:26:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm plus 2-ing all of the SUPA's before I leave for the day.
Good luck to all contestants.
Submitted by The_taste_of_Monkeys (user info) at 2007-04-10 18:15:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2007-04-10 18:04:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You owe me a couple of +2's for taking the time to be interviewed, Johnny...so get your ass over to my SUPA entry, stat.
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Dont listen to Yosemite Sam here. Hes just sore cos Im still winning despite his cheating as hard as he can.
This was pretty coolio, I really liked the first two but not the last one as much, dont know why.
Submitted by Montucky (user info) at 2007-04-10 18:06:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Just finish reading Dante's Divine Comedy?
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2007-04-10 18:04:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You owe me a couple of +2's for taking the time to be interviewed, Johnny...so get your ass over to my SUPA entry, stat.
Submitted by Foolproof (user info) at 2007-04-10 17:59:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Dance.With.The.Devil. (user info) at 2007-04-10 17:51:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I didn't read it. Just cancelling out fucktard here.
Submitted by Dance.With.The.Devil. (user info) at 2007-04-10 17:51:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
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Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-04-10 17:51:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn.....that's fuckin' good.
Now +2 me. It's the only decent thing to do.
http://www.ubersite.com/m/100431
Help me beat O-man.
You'll feel great about it in the morning.
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2007-04-10 17:50:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I like you
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2007-04-10 17:49:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
heh
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-04-10 17:48:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
This is a crown of sonnets (more or less); what is presented is a group of sonnets that tie together through theme with the last line of each sonnet used as the opening line of the next.
These were done in a hendecasyllable form (for the most part); eleven syllable lines, with the emphasis usually placed on the ending syllable. (I ignored this last part whenever I felt like it)
The first and third were done in the Spenserian style (for most intents and purposes) which has a rhyme scheme like this: abab, bcbc, cdcd, ee
The second is done in a sort of bastard-child blend of a Petrarchan and Spenserian format.
I was drunk and listening to Tom Waits when I wrote most of it and have lately been reading William Blake and Chuck Rosenthal. Two night ago I watched the 'Big Lebowski'. You can blame all of those people and things for this if you wish. Or pin it on me. I like attention.
I am quite proud of the fact that I spent less than a half hour composing the entire thing.
Will someone kindly email me when I need to go on to the next round? Who do I face next...is it Shlongy?
*crosses fingers*
I'm thinking 'haiku' for round two.