A Piece of My Own Heaven (575 hits)
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Submitted by Alasdair (View user info) at 2007-04-22 23:24:06 EDT
I find myself in the middle of a step forward.
I don't think about how I got here because it feels too good, and I don't want to wake up from this if it's a dream. All I see around me is sand. Although the sun is bearing down hard and everything should be scorching hot, nothing is. My bare feet move forward with ease and I feel the sand comfortably squirt through my toes as I walk. There is a slight breeze and my linen pants play with it.
I don't know if I'm wearing a shirt or not. I don't care.
Aside from the yellow-white of the sand there are dashes of green nearby, where lush shrubs with flowers are growing. The smell is oddly pleasing and reminds me of release.
I'd say I'm about 22 years of age. My hair is dirty blonde, I have a few days worth of beard growth on my face and for whatever reason, I am alone here in this beautiful, ethereal desert. Judging from the position of the sun I'd guess that it's about 2pm.
I look to my right and a long, thin pool of crystal clear water is stretched out before me. The surface of the water barely pulses with the passing winds and I make my way to the shore. The sand feels moist as I approach this oasis. The quiet is so calming that I barely notice the soothing greeting my feet get from the waiting water. I kneel.
My hands meet each other just beneath the waters surface and I make a cup with them. I bring my hands up and douse my warm, tanned face, letting each vein of water trickle wherever it may along my neck and shoulders. With my eyes closed, I lean my head back and offer my face to the sun. I take the time to appreciate the coolness of my newly wet hair.
There are no sounds but those being made by the last few drops of water as they fall back down to earth. I stand up and survey this landscape once again.
Where am I?
It doesn't bother me, strangely, that I am lost. I am not thirsty and I do not hunger for anything, food or otherwise. I am not sweating and my body is fit and limber. All I can think about is the unending glory of this awesome surrounding. I also notice that time isn't progressing as normal. My movements are slowed and it's as if I am being given even more opportunity to truly enjoy every passing moment.
I long for nothing and feel relieved of all pain. I am not worried by work, women, death, responsibility, self, or anything else. It's like I don't have the faculty to worry.
A compelling urge to sit down moves over me. I crouch to my haunches and lay back, and a perfectly formed cradle of dry, grainy earth welcomes me. I relax completely and let the sand blow freely over my exposed skin. My feet sway left to right in the standing water and I recline into a perfect position.
I smile.
I am where I've always dreamed I'd be and I will be here forever, happily.
User Reviews
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-04-25 15:25:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
time for you to mentally toughen up, this should help.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2007-04-24 13:57:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-04-23 15:20:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by ChaosJester (user info) at 2007-04-23 06:45:39 PDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Amazing visual description + zero plot = cotton candy story
i.e. tasty, but unfullfilling
+2 'cause it was really well written cotton candy.
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You are in your happy place. This place is yours and no one can hurt you there. 1000000 psychiatrists agree.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2007-04-23 15:39:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice.
Submitted by snag (user info) at 2007-04-23 15:21:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
my new best friend below (sorry BLT)
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-04-23 15:20:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by ChaosJester (user info) at 2007-04-23 06:45:39 PDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Amazing visual description + zero plot = cotton candy story
i.e. tasty, but unfullfilling
+2 'cause it was really well written cotton candy.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2007-04-23 13:17:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by ChaosJester (user info) at 2007-04-23 09:45:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Amazing visual description + zero plot = cotton candy story
i.e. tasty, but unfullfilling
+1 'cause it was really well written cotton candy.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-23 09:34:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by sexualchocolate1984 (user info) at 2007-04-23 06:59:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Kicker of all ass = Soother of all Monday stress.
Thanks.
Submitted by ICO (user info) at 2007-04-23 06:35:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good to read when you're trying to calm down.
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2007-04-23 06:03:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I think I felt what you wanted to portray.
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-04-23 04:27:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
"There is a slight breeze and my linen pants play with it."
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Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-04-23 04:22:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
oh dear.
Submitted by ih8u2man (user info) at 2007-04-23 02:24:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
On the topic of dreams.
http://www.ubersite.com/m/100931
I liked this. We all need to find that place in our lives. It defines us.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-04-23 02:12:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Now this was indeed kick ass.
Very nice work.
Submitted by particle_man58 (user info) at 2007-04-23 01:19:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Ok that was cool.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-04-22 23:38:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You came out of the ozone after three years. Cool.
Submitted by MidnightToSix (user info) at 2007-04-22 23:37:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Looks like a stock Windows wallpaper.
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-04-22 23:28:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1