SUPA Exhibition: Ludicross (469 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryLabels: SUPA_07
Rating: 1.87 on 22 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by CaptainThorns (View user info) at 2007-04-26 09:52:40 EDT
Wanted to place on exhibition the other piece that I considered using for round three.
And yes, I mean "ludicross", not "ludicrous"...should be obvious why as you read onward.
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Tempting as it is to sin for gain or shove the blame
It's fallen on your shoulders in the end
Consequences saturate your soul with justice
Time can't be bought if you don't know who owns it
You say it's for the better of society
Remove it from this world
Maybe they'll forget about it
I say that you're ludicross
There's always one who will remember
The way it was
Time reveals the Truth
Don't force me down
It only puts splinters in my back
Which grain goes the wrong way anyhow?
Don't make excuses
You choose to live or die
With every decision that you make
You say it's for the better of society
Remove it from this world
Maybe they'll forget about it
I say that you're ludicross
There's always one who will remember
The way it was
Time reveals the Truth
I love...you hate
I give...you take
I teach...you cheat
I heal...you steal
I bleed...you open all my wounds again
You say you're sorry and repeat
But it's gone sour yet again
I'll give you all another chance
But Father makes the judgment in the end
Suspended from this ludicross
My mind's gone mad
I can't remember why I'm hanging here
Was it something that I said
Was it something that you did
Eloi, Eloi, lama sabachthani
I did it for the better of society
But not of this weak world
No, for worlds apart from earthly hands
You thought that I was ludicross
Perhaps I'll be remembered
After years go by
Time reveals the Truth
User Reviews
Submitted by messmind (user info) at 2007-04-27 05:49:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Truth is a temporary condition...
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-04-26 13:58:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-04-26 11:29:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:46:11 EDT (#)
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Funny you should mention Metallica, Drogo...the musical version of this is in a similar style (hard rock).
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I shall look forward to hopefully hearing it
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-26 11:12:16 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-26 11:10:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
But needs more big words.
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Ahahahaha. Old egg, you do make me laugh.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-26 11:10:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
But needs more big words.
1.5
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-04-26 11:09:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:50:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is why it should be you in the next round of SUPA.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:53:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by lungfish (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:45:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
ludacris
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Most definitely NOT that, either, chap.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:52:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:47:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I tend to blaze through poetry, fast and hard, to get the rawest impression of it I can. Then I go back and savour it. Thinking through each line, letting the heft of each word, each accent, each punctuation, weigh in my mind so as to enjoy the nuances, the subtleties that the author was trying to put across.
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Gay.
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The way I read poetry means I like to fuck men?
I had no idea...
I suppose I should go buy some more stylish clothes and practice that cute little lisp that they (well, I guess its actually WE now isn't it?) use.
My wife will be heartbroken of course, but who am I to deny what nature (and a method of reading poetry) dictates?
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:52:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
actually dude, i have a teensy eensy weensy dick.
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:50:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is why it should be you in the next round of SUPA.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:47:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I will email you at lunch sir. :)
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:47:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I tend to blaze through poetry, fast and hard, to get the rawest impression of it I can. Then I go back and savour it. Thinking through each line, letting the heft of each word, each accent, each punctuation, weigh in my mind so as to enjoy the nuances, the subtleties that the author was trying to put across.
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Gay.
Cool post though.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:46:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Funny you should mention Metallica, Drogo...the musical version of this is in a similar style (hard rock).
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:45:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Hmmm, I need to read this again to really get the best feel for it...
I tend to blaze through poetry, fast and hard, to get the rawest impression of it I can. Then I go back and savour it. Thinking through each line, letting the heft of each word, each accent, each punctuation, weigh in my mind so as to enjoy the nuances, the subtleties that the author was trying to put across.
I haven't given this its second read yet, but I have a feeling that I'll enjoy it more as this raw vision that I am seeing right now. Maybe I won't even give it that second read?
I liked this Captain T.
Submitted by lungfish (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:45:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
ludacris
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:43:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:36:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
are you good with accentual verse? i'm having trouble figuring out what words are stressed and which ones aren't. i have to write an accentual poem for class. glugglugglug.
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Yeah, I feel that I'm fairly decent with it. E-mail me if you like: captainthorns.at.gmail.com and I'll do what I can to help.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:41:55 EDT (#)
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Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:27:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"I love...you hate
I give...you take
I teach...you cheat
I heal...you steal "
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That made me think of Sad but True by Metallica; I don't really know why, but now I have to dig out my cd's and listen to it.
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Unfortunately I've no live recordings of the song version of this, otherwise I'd have posted it. Someday I'll get around to recording in my studio, hopefully...
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:36:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
are you good with accentual verse? i'm having trouble figuring out what words are stressed and which ones aren't. i have to write an accentual poem for class. glugglugglug.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:31:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:27:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"I love...you hate
I give...you take
I teach...you cheat
I heal...you steal "
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That made me think of Sad but True by Metallica; I don't really know why, but now I have to dig out my cd's and listen to it.
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2007-04-26 10:22:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"Which grain goes the wrong way anyhow? "
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-04-26 09:53:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Incidentally, this is another poem-song work of mine, only much more recent than "Armageddon."