APW: How I Found God (834 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: 1.21 on 21 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Orgasmatron (View user info) at 2007-05-02 18:24:10 EDT
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Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-05-11 15:56:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Sheesh. Everyone's a critic.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-05-10 19:42:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Overall, I think this is really good, and I like the shape, as well.
A couple of your word choices bothered me a tiny bit. I don't like "drouth," I prefer drought, though I suppose you needed it for the rhyme. Is that an olde or southern thing, drouth? Also, for some reason, the "full" before fields seemed unnecessary, especially in regards to an echo.
While I like "as my skin his curved fangs embraced," the "When I the simple song surrounded" sounded a little bit awkward. But I like what you did with the rhyme there.
There are some lines in here I really love but since it's a jpg I'm not going to type them out and you'll just have to guess.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-05-07 14:24:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
... he was behind the couch the whole time.
>ba-doom-chick<
G'nite everybody! Tip yer bar staff.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-05-03 09:24:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice work, O.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-05-03 01:24:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
*on the rebound*
Submitted by whiskey_jack (user info) at 2007-05-03 00:41:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fuck I'm laughing my ass of. Of course you write a poem for a bandwagon. I mean...just fuck!
+2 cause I'm laughing a bunches
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-05-02 23:59:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
*low five*
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-05-02 23:22:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
*high five*
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-05-02 23:04:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Permit him his underwhelming and predictable reviews.
They're as much a part as this place as anything else.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-05-02 22:55:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2007-05-02 20:09:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
By spreading your ass cheeks?
This blew.
****
The only reason Shlongy -2ed this is because he didn't understand it. Like everything else.
-2ing is not as cool as it once was, Shlong, you retarded dipshit. STFU.
Submitted by beeltea (user info) at 2007-05-02 20:29:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
*Best of the Bandwagon*
Who wants to carry the prize? It's a bucket of my own vomit.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2007-05-02 20:09:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
By spreading your ass cheeks?
This blew.
Submitted by DCWoody (user info) at 2007-05-02 18:57:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2007-05-02 18:47:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-05-02 18:39:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
looks like a cutter
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-05-02 18:35:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i like that picture. for ONCE. blarg.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-05-02 18:29:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
'sides, you're first in my Book of Man anyway...
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-05-02 18:29:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by ahumblefool (user info) at 2007-05-02 18:26:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
dam it second again :(
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At least you didn't knock me for bandwagoning.
I hate coming up with titles. I figured this one was easy since it was already made up for me.
Weeeeeeeee.
Submitted by ahumblefool (user info) at 2007-05-02 18:26:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
dam it second again :(
Submitted by ahumblefool (user info) at 2007-05-02 18:25:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
First
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-05-02 18:25:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
I'm tired of this fucking bandwagon.
But you actually put in some work so it saved you 1 point.