The Moment It Hits You (584 hits)
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Submitted by ih8u2man (View user info) at 2007-06-22 13:41:29 EDT
Give me a moment, a splinter in time.
To think of oceans and water, temptation and wine.
Thoughts that are catching, possessing and mine,
Ebb in the tide of the waves in my mind.
Spoken hearts that are parted.
That are pushed far apart.
Because of reason, and intrigue and two beating hearts.
Lady of luck, of passion and crime.
Thinking of words, poems and lines,
Bleeding from pens on the pages of time.
And I sit in my chair and I think of your eyes,
Of your voice and your smile, your hair and your thighs.
Of the moments that follow, that are so lost inside.
And I sit in my chair wasting time after time.
I'm a man with life that is good, that is right.
So I think of the people that need me tonight.
I think I'm a madman, a poet, a lie.
I think of my promises I made till I die.
I think of the moment.
And it's here that I sit.
Waiting.
Wondering.
Curious.
Tempted.
Lustful.
Happy.
I want more of you.
I want to tell you.
That I can't.
That I want to.
That I want more of you.
Then it hits me.
User Reviews
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2007-07-24 01:52:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
this hit me.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-06-23 10:10:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Nice.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-06-22 19:57:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Some wonderful lines here. I found it just a little bit awkward in a few places, but overall I liked it a lot.
Submitted by Off_The_Wagon (user info) at 2007-06-22 16:41:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by shadow (user info) at 2007-06-22 16:36:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
We'll make it a 1.5, clever use of words to create not only imagery but a good... what's the word... it has a feel that creeps up the back of your mind as you're reading it. nice.
Submitted by shadow (user info) at 2007-06-22 16:35:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
not quite the "kicker of all ass" but it absolutely brightened my Friday.
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2007-06-22 15:56:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-06-22 15:55:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
purdy
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2007-06-22 14:04:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2007-06-22 14:01:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by lover101 (user info) at 2007-06-22 13:59:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
damn straight
Submitted by creep_firebombing (user info) at 2007-06-22 13:54:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Werd.
Submitted by ajanssen (user info) at 2007-06-22 13:53:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2007-06-22 13:44:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i'd like to be at that place smoking a spliff right now
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I concur. With a tall boy of Natural Ice and that damn Anna Kournikova
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2007-06-22 13:48:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
beautiful
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2007-06-22 13:44:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i'd like to be at that place smoking a spliff right now