Mirror and Reflection (entry #2) (342 hits)
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Submitted by Epistolary Contest Entry (View user info) at 2007-07-09 02:17:41 EDT
Mirror.............
I remember your tormented and desperate looks to get me to stay, to not leave the thing we called us, to not break that sacred bond we had. The longer I stayed, I became less of who I had been. Who I had wanted to be.......
The depths of your eyes, a mean, angry, selfish lover that I never wanted to become. You made me. No matter how much I forced myself, I could never see your beauty.
When I stare at you now, I know instantly that we will never be apart. The awareness we share is so powerful. I can love you without opening my eyes.
But...
Why is it that you can never capture me? I run and run towards you and yet I slip through your grasp. I'm quite the most delectable vision you're ever likely to chase, and yet you seem to make no effort?!
Call me paranoid, but sometimes I think you try to make me look stupid by running in the opposite direction.
I have missed you so much.......never change again
Love,
Reflection
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Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-07-10 19:27:44 EDT (#)
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Submitted by charminglybeef (user info) at 2007-07-09 22:50:28 EDT (#)
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Too loose and wishy-washy. For something this short I think you need either a good punch or sustained humour.
Submitted by blueboy (user info) at 2007-07-09 15:29:42 EDT (#)
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Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2007-07-09 09:27:53 EDT (#)
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Definitely needs more full stops.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-07-09 08:42:54 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-07-09 08:12:45 EDT (#)
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Submitted by RabiedRooster (user info) at 2007-07-09 06:18:21 EDT (#)
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Submitted by vexx (user info) at 2007-07-09 03:08:28 EDT (#)
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Oh dear... I hope we can do better than this =/
Submitted by TheLightOfSpeed (user info) at 2007-07-09 02:59:06 EDT (#)
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Good, but not great.