Yours Eternally (887 hits)
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Submitted by kaos-king (antius777) (View user info) at 2007-07-23 11:41:32 EDT
To: "Jonathan"<jvh001.at.gmail.com>
Subject: Request of your confidence
Dear Jonathan,
It's been some time since we've last communicated. I regret, this is entirely my fault. A number of things have enveloped my time as of late, and I find less and less freedom to indulge my pleasures with this wonderful machine you gave me. Yes, I did follow that link you sent me and read of the news report out of Brazil. It was troubling, to say the least. However, I have not had a chance to investigate it further, as another development has arisen; one that has demanded my utmost attention.
My friend, you have kept my secret from your guild now for many years and I can not thank you enough for that kindness. You thought that due to my methods, you were in fact helping your own cause although it broke many an ancient law. I now must admit, that while I was indeed aiding you and your people, I was doing it for my own purposes... but of course you knew that. What you never knew was the reason behind the betrayal of my kind, something I feel it's time you understood.
What I'm about to tell you, I've not shared with another creature in longer than you could fathom. There is a reason I've always been purposely vague about my age to you, my friend, and that was born out of the respect I hold for you and a desire not to dress you in lies. Honestly, I'm not sure how to proceed with this and I, of all individuals, find myself nervous as I type these words.
You could turn to many a holy text to find mention of me, although none of them have it entirely accurate. I suppose the Hebrews came the closest. So let it be their Bible that spells out my beginning, let my origin flow from words that were being scribbled down when I was already starting to forget. Flip to your KIng James or your Gideon and go to 'Genesis 4:13' and read, my friend. Read and tell me you understand, and then I'll explain more.
Yours eternally,
Dumas
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To: "Jonathan"<jvh001.at.gmail.com>
Subject: RE.RE.Request of your confidence
Dear Jonathan,
My friend, your clever and witty response has put a smile upon this old face. I should have known you would have done your own research into my past to seek out exactly who it was that you allow aid your Guild in its cause. I must say, you tracked down some impressive amounts of information. Yes, I can say I was involved in all of those incidents over the centuries, playing the roles that you've named. Of coursed, as you've now guessed, I am far older than your records show as well.
Shall I tell you about the brutal Phoenician named Mot who used to sacrifice his own people for glory on the battlefield? Shall I tell you how I butchered him outright in his own palace and disbanded his kingdom? Perhaps I'll tell you of early Sumerian king Nergal who honestly believed himself to be the incarnation of the evil deity Tiamat. He, too, fell by my hands. Then there was the legendary Set himself, one who I did war with for quite some time. I was naive to think at the time, that his destruction would bring me some measure of forgiveness.
So many, so many, Jonathan. I have slaughtered so many of my kind. And they are not only my kind: they are my children. Yes, they are my progeny, my damned spawn. I have not uttered this statement in over 3000 years, you must understand. It is not because I fear for my safety or anything so petty. No, it is because I am ashamed. This world was never meant to be home to such wretched abominations.
Forgive me, I can write no more at this time...
Yours eternally,
Dumas
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To: "Jonathan"<jvh001.at.gmail.com>
Subject: RE.RE.RE.RE.Request of your confidence
Dear Jonathan,
You must forgive an old man his momentary weaknesses, and I confess I agree with you completely. I find myself often succumbing to bouts of melancholy, something I've been prone to for millennium now. Perhaps it's all the suffering I've been forced to witness. That or simply the heavy burden of guilt that I carry.
I digress. You have asked about the truth regarding my birth, my reason for being. Did you not read the holy text of the Christians? No, that was unkind... my apologizes. However, it does paint a relatively close approximation of the truth. For all argumentative purposes, I AM the fabled Cain who slew his brother Able out of pride and jealousy. And then, once I had realized what I had done, I wept for my loss as I became stricken with "The Mark." I had discovered the act of murder and was duly cursed for it, made to walk about in exile forever. But I was not yet as I am now...
Into my forehead, a marking of Angelic Script appeared, carved into my flesh. This symbol, although unpronounceable by the lips of man, was universally, even primally understood. I was not to be under the eye of the Creator, my death unwanted because my soul so tainted, that I would not be received in the afterlife.
God had turned his back on me, the son of "Adam" now a blind spot in the Creator's vision. So removed from the grace of the Divine, that even The First of the Fallen, Lucifer of the Morning, became unaware of my presence. The Devil, concerned only with the sparkling souls he could blacken, would only perceive me as a vacant thing, a living ghost.
I was to walk the Earth, forced to feel all the pains of mortality, yet never allowed the blessed release of death. For an unknown amount of time, I wandered the primitive world, seeing the beast and lower men that populated the planet. Eventually I made my way back near the land of my birth. I came upon the descendants of my parents, my nieces and nephews. Their numbers had grown, and I sought to join with them. But my mark and the legend of my betrayal was remembered and they drove me from their numbers. Only one lone girl, the great grand daughter of my brother Seth, showed me compassion, and fled with me to be my wife.
We made a home near the Red Sea, and there I built a city in honor and name after my first born son, Enoch. I had grown wise in my time, and as my clan flourished, they were taught many of the great skills and lessons my father Adam had been given in Eden, that Adam had imparted to me. Much of this knowledge had been lost the longer mankind had sat away from the Garden, each generation losing more. Only I, the Accursed One, had retained my memories from the long century of my exile.
Time past, and my children, along with their children's children had spread my wisdom to the other tribes of man. Long had my wife been dead, but still I endured. One day, while I was fishing alone, I screamed out to God, cursing him for his treatment. Was it not I who had brought the wisdom of Eden back to God's children? Were not my children beautiful, wise, and virtuous? If God did not see me, did he not see the good my family had done for humanity?
God did not answer me that day. Or perhaps he did. Long have I wondered about that... well, in any case there is much here you need to digest. I'll send you more tomorrow.
Yours eternally
Dumas
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To: "Jonathan"<jvh001.at.gmail.com>
Subject: RE.RE.RE.RE.RE.RE.Request of your confidence
Dear Jonathan,
First off, I'd like to thank you for the kind words in your last communication. They warm the ice that is at the center of my core. Second, I want you to know that I'm fully aware of what is transpiring in western Russia at the moment and will appraise you on the ramification of these events in due order. My time is limited, and I must return to my tale before I depart shortly.
As I had said, there fishing alone, I had called out to the Lord, cursing and weeping to him. He did not respond directly, but someone did. As I fell to my knees in the sea, uttering my damnation unto God, from the water, a being rose. I beheld a woman more beautiful than any I had seen before. She came to me and spoke of her sympathy for my plight. She too, she told me, had been cast from the presence of God. I asked who she was, and she told me she was the mother I was suppose to of had.
She said her name was Lilith, the first wife of Adam. She had fled Eden then barred from returning when she did not bow to Adam's will. As God is superior to Adam, Adam believed he was superior to me, she spoke, and yet was she not made of the Ether as the first man was? Her request and pleas to God had been rebuked, God preferring his first created over her, hence her exile. Lilith said she felt it was fitting once she realized Adam's second wife had been responsible for their disgrace.
I had never heard such tales before. I was never aware that my father had a mate before my mother. My parents had long since died, how was it she still roamed the earth? Was she as cursed as I? No, she told me, she had been barred from Eden before it's fall. And since she had never eaten an apple from the tree of knowledge, she never became vulnerable to mortality in the manner of Adam and Eve. Yet, she too, had come to know suffering, pain, and evil because being forced to live outside of Eden. What of your children, I asked? Had she not found one of the sons of Adam and Eve and propagated a strong brood?
Lilith raged, a terrifying sight to me. Because she had been exiled before the fall of Eden, she was not able to spawn. She had tried, with all manner of creatures, but nothing made her quick with child. I was disgusted and horrified, and tried to flee from Lilith, but she caught me had held me with unnatural strength. Captured, she told me she had tried other ways to beget a clan, besides carnal intercourse. No creature, as of yet, had proven resilient enough. But I, The Marked One, was like her, shunned from the light of God, unable to find rest in heaven or hell. I would be her mate, and through me, she would have her children.
With this proclamation, she took me and fed from my flesh and my blood. She drained me of life, but since I could not die, I became like a husk animated only with mind. Then, Lilith opened up her own flesh, and allowed me to drink from her, refilling my dried body. But Lilith's blood was different, it was the blood of Eden turned black without the Divine Light. When I awoke I was a new and different being. Sensations and senses never before felt flooded through me. The pain from my forehead, which had accompanied me for centuries was gone, as was the mark. But now, worse than the pain, a hunger welled up in me, consuming my thoughts. Lilith told me to rise, and that we had children to create.
And so it began. At first, I was mad with hunger, insane with the need to feed and my feeding bred more of Lilith's precious clan. Eventually, the hunger grew less but it was too late - Lilith had almost an army of subjects. My refusal to create more "children" for her was met with laughter. Although not as strong or resilient, my spawn could mark others as I had to them. I was no longer even needed. I watched as my entire clan of Enoch was turned over to Lilith's damnable offspring. I watched until I decided it was time to slay my kin once again.
Now Jonathan, I must go. I'm leaving for Kosovo in a few hours. I will attempt to contact you again, at least one last time. You need to know the rest, you need to know what you and your Guild face.
Yours eternally,
Dumas
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To: "Jonathan"<jvh001.at.gmail.com>
Subject: Final message
Dear Jonathan,
I am currently in a small military barracks outside of the Russian border. I have tracked my prey here and plan on engaging them shortly. With the use of my considerable abilities, I have gained access to this computer terminal to make one last e-mail to you. It is not that I don't think that'll be successful, but that I think I will not walk away from this encounter the same individual.
As far as I know, I am the only human in existence ever to be cursed in such a way. Many men have tried to duplicate the procedure for their own diabolical ends and have failed. (I will say that Rasputin came close.) In any event, a cadre of humans are attempting through Dark Arts to grant The Mark to a human up in a castle not far from here now. This entire affair is being overseen by Lilith herself.
2000 years, Jonathan. I have not seen Lilith is 2000 years. The last time we did battle, it left me terribly wounded. It took me decades to properly mend, both physically and mentally. I plan to see it through this time, I plan to not only stop this atrocity from occurring, but erase the stain of Lilith from this Earth once and for all.
I am placing the coordinates of the palace at the bottom of the e-mail. You and your Guild will have the distinction of one of two possible duties: Either finishing the job that I failed in, or cleaning up the mess I've left in my wake. You've been present for my so-called "wet work" before. I confess, I'm entirely too skilled in the art of slaughter.
You have been a good friend to me these past few years, Jonathan Van Helsing, and I thank you again for the few small kindnesses you've shown me. May your Guild live on strong and my children die swiftly by your hands...
Yours eternally,
Dumas
User Reviews
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-07-24 20:57:04 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2007-07-24 17:05:36 EST (#)
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Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-07-24 01:22:49 EDT (#)
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Given the rating on this, I was expecting more. I don't feel like breaking your streak though.
*****
Grading on the "Uber curve" is not an effective policy to extract the best out of people.
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This is true.
Submitted by sparkle_pink (user info) at 2007-07-24 17:03:54 EDT (#)
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Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2007-07-24 08:54:49 EDT (#)
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Velvet Elvis - - Jonathan is a regular mortal. There might have been some confusion in that. Dumas is simply telling him to select the most convenient of modern Christian Bibles to find refference to his tale, kinda like saying his story has been passed down through countless years. You totally busted me on the "mellenia" bit, however. Damn.
Sparkle Pink - - I've been waiting for somebody to do that...
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Best commercial in the world. It makes me laugh every single time.
Submitted by messmind (user info) at 2007-07-24 14:30:20 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by zwerg (user info) at 2007-07-24 09:25:11 EDT (#)
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Fucking awesome
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2007-07-24 09:05:14 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Adaman (user info) at 2007-07-24 08:59:50 EDT (#)
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i love vampire stories. +2 for that.
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Vampires???
My good sir, did you not notice? I never ONCE used the word "Vampires" in this story...
Submitted by Adaman (user info) at 2007-07-24 08:59:50 EDT (#)
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i love vampire stories. +2 for that.
i tried making a vampire comic before revolving more around the Belmonts (Castlevania) but I stoppoed. I just layed down some groundwork. pretty good stuff.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2007-07-24 08:54:49 EDT (#)
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Velvet Elvis - - Jonathan is a regular mortal. There might have been some confusion in that. Dumas is simply telling him to select the most convenient of modern Christian Bibles to find refference to his tale, kinda like saying his story has been passed down through countless years. You totally busted me on the "mellenia" bit, however. Damn.
Sparkle Pink - - I've been waiting for somebody to do that...
Submitted by Kre8rix (user info) at 2007-07-24 07:10:19 EDT (#)
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Reminds me of a vampire version of the screwtape letters.
Still better than a stick in the eye...
Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2007-07-24 06:32:34 EDT (#)
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Didn't entertain me
Submitted by sparkle_pink (user info) at 2007-07-24 03:26:59 EDT (#)
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"So am I your man, Mr. Dumbass?"
"THE NAME IS, DOO-MAHS"
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2007-07-24 03:05:36 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-07-24 01:22:49 EDT (#)
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Given the rating on this, I was expecting more. I don't feel like breaking your streak though.
*****
Grading on the "Uber curve" is not an effective policy to extract the best out of people.
Submitted by ilikesteak (user info) at 2007-07-24 02:47:11 EDT (#)
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I liked this. Keep up the good work.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-07-24 01:22:49 EDT (#)
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Given the rating on this, I was expecting more. I don't feel like breaking your streak though.
Submitted by VelvetElvis (user info) at 2007-07-24 00:46:46 EDT (#)
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Look forward to getting back online to read you again. Well done. I recall you being one of the better writers here
Small, arguable point: These aged and enlightened entities wouldn't quote from a slapped-together "version" of a bible sanctioned by King James which was re-translated for is own means, but rather the original Aramaic, Greek and Hebrew from which they were taken and distorted. But not many have those to pull off the shelf, so maybe this was intentional, and I read this very quickly and may have missed something.
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...something I've been prone to for millennium now."
...millennia.
Submitted by Entaran (user info) at 2007-07-23 23:50:05 EDT (#)
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10 parts pure awesome
Submitted by Charlilot (user info) at 2007-07-23 21:13:24 EDT (#)
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Now I have to go check some web comics or something.
I can't read anything else on here straight after this, it'll just seem crap in comparison.
Thanks man, you suck.
In a good way though.
Submitted by Dervish (user info) at 2007-07-23 21:05:12 EDT (#)
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The "status quo" being what, exactly? Are you admitting that some users rank higher in the supposed "pecking order" than others?
Bret, as an example, keeps a lot of ruckus going here, but he's written a few decent things. Is he regarded as "lower" as others? If so, why?
Certainly not trying to start anything, just interested to discuss.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2007-07-23 20:32:42 EDT (#)
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Dervish - - I have nothing against new users... just those who don't understand the status quo or seek to change the way we work here.
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http://www.ubersite.com/m/110255#2480840
Dude, when'd you become elitist? You normally seem so easygoing.
Not every newbie sucks monkey dong.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-07-23 18:32:53 EDT (#)
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VAMPIRE HUNTER
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-07-23 16:09:17 EDT (#)
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This is good in its own right, let alone compared to the dross on Uber.
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My face is currently in a state of being rocked right off.
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2007-07-23 14:54:34 EDT (#)
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have another
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2007-07-23 14:37:53 EDT (#)
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again, you dont dissapoint, good fucking form dude
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Superb.
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kk!
Submitted by Dervish (user info) at 2007-07-23 12:42:38 EDT (#)
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See? SEE? This is what I meant. Quality.
QUALITY, MOTHERFUCKER
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Bad ass.
Submitted by FALLEN (user info) at 2007-07-23 12:21:14 EDT (#)
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like I said.
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oh sure blame the womenz
Submitted by FALLEN (user info) at 2007-07-23 12:14:18 EDT (#)
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pre-emptive strike +2
i didn't read it yet, but you're good for it.
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2007-07-23 12:03:41 EDT (#)
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show off
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2007-07-23 12:02:18 EDT (#)
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Okay, fine... here's your +2 asshole. You're going to make me have to write and give you something comparable to read and that's not as easy for me as it sounds.
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SunnyG - - I have the most ridiculous amount of .JPG's stored in my computer.
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2007-07-23 11:53:35 EDT (#)
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You make want to read the other side of the conversation. +2 for that - well done.
Submitted by ikari_shinji (user info) at 2007-07-23 11:46:15 EDT (#)
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RAWK
Submitted by SunnyG (user info) at 2007-07-23 11:45:12 EDT (#)
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excellent.
how the hell do you find the coolest pictures?