How long? (391 hits)
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Submitted by sword (View user info) at 2007-07-27 18:28:04 EDT
How long would it take?
for me to cross this space
and leave you a bloody lake?
Rip out your tongue, your jaw; break
And smash in your fucking face
How long would it take?
On the ground your blood is thick, opaque
perfectly still, the ground a perfect place
and you, left a bloody lake.
Crushed, shattered, torn all for my sake
beaten barbarically; I'm a medieval mace
How long would it take?
Your temple of a body ruined by my earthquake
taken you, broken you, all for my sake
and left you, a sticky, sweet lake.
Crying, my lust you can't take
hurting you; caress your face
How long would it take
to make you my fucking lake.
User Reviews
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-07-29 16:51:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-07-29 06:16:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I kinda liked this
Submitted by marginwalker (user info) at 2007-07-28 12:29:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
the emoz
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2007-07-28 09:42:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Yyou forgot this verse:
So if you don't break,
just over compensate
At least you know you can always go on Ricki Lake
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2007-07-28 08:25:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by SunnyG (user info) at 2007-07-28 02:27:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
just because we can't understand you....doesn't make it art.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2007-07-27 20:39:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2007-07-27 19:42:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This plus two is given soley because Shlongy's comment below made me chirp like a bird.
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Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2007-07-27 19:39:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
This is almost like a poem, only suckier.
Yeah...that was a pretty solid review.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-07-27 20:37:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The recipient of a toast last evening below.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-07-27 20:34:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by pen_name (user info) at 2007-07-27 19:52:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
With so much drama in the l-b-c
Its kinda hard bein snoop d-o-double-g
But i, somehow, some way
Keep comin up with funky ass shit like every single day
May i, kick a little something for the gs (yeah)
And, make a few ends as (yeah!) I breeze, through
Two in the mornin and the partys still jumpin
Cause my momma aint home
I got bitches in the living room gettin it on
And, they aint leavin til six in the mornin (six in the mornin)
So what you wanna do, sheeeit
I got a pocket full of rubbers and my homeboys do too
So turn off the lights and close the doors
But (but what) we dont love them hoes, yeah!
So we gonna smoke a ounce to this
Gs up, hoes down, while you motherfuckers bounce to this
Rollin down the street, smokin indo, sippin on gin and juice
Laid back [with my mind on my money and my money on my mind]
Now, that, I got me some seagrams gin
Everybody got they cups, but they aint chipped in
Now this types of shit, happens all the time
You got to get yours but fool I gotta get mine
Everything is fine when you listenin to the d-o-g
I got the cultivating music that be captivating he
Who listens, to the words that I speak
As I take me a drink to the middle of the street
And get to mackin to this bitch named sadie (sadie? )
She used to be the homeboys lady (oh, that bitch)
Eighty degrees, when I tell that bitch please
Raise up off these n-u-ts, cause you gets none of these
At ease, as I mob with the dogg pound, feel the breeze
Beeeitch, Im just
Later on that day
My homey dr. dre came through with a gang of tanqueray
And a fat ass j, of some bubonic chronic that made me choke
Shit, this aint no joke
I had to back up off of it and sit my cup down
Tanqueray and chronic, yeah Im fucked up now
But it aint no stoppin, Im still poppin
Dre got some bitches from the city of compton
To serve me, not with a cherry on top
Cause when I bust my nut, Im raisin up off the cot
Dont get upset girl, thats just how it goes
I dont love you hoes, Im out the do
And Ill be
Rollin down the street, smokin indo, sippin on gin and juice (beeotch!!)
Laid back [with my mind on my money and my money on my mind]
Rollin down the street, smokin indo, sippin on gin and juice (beeotch!!)
Laid back [with my mind on my money and my money on my mind]
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-07-27 19:49:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
No Comment
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2007-07-27 19:42:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This plus two is given soley because Shlongy's comment below made me chirp like a bird.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2007-07-27 19:39:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
This is almost like a poem, only suckier.
Submitted by The_taste_of_Monkeys (user info) at 2007-07-27 18:56:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
"It shtartsh with a bloosy sh!"
Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-07-27 18:51:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Have another
Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-07-27 18:42:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by ChaosJester (user info) at 2007-07-27 18:40:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Y'know, I normaly despise poetry, but this was pretty good.
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Short, descriptive, and intense all come to mind. I liked it, but to say it is good... I dunno.
Submitted by ChaosJester (user info) at 2007-07-27 18:40:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Y'know, I normaly despise poetry, but this was pretty good.
Then again, that could just be my mysoginistic side talking.
Whatever.
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2007-07-27 18:31:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
nice..