Forever I Remain (714 hits)
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Submitted by ih8u2man (View user info) at 2007-08-08 12:27:35 EDT
Looking out over the grasses, I can still smell the gunpowder.
I can hear the screams of men, and the cry of fear.
Forever I remain.
Saber by my side.
My boots are caked with mud and make no mark behind me.
My footsteps are silent.
I came here to fight.
I came here to die.
You wrote me letters everyday from the bay window where we used to sit.
I keep them bound with a ribbon from your hair,
in a pocket by my side.
I never should have left you.
I never should have come here.
I walk this field of ghosts - searching for myself.
Our love will never die, it keeps me here.
I remember our home.
The way we used to talk, how different we were.
I was never ashamed of you.
We talked about authors, and art and dreams.
Of the a world that was changing before our eyes,
trying to keep up. Being alive.
Your hair on our pillows on mornings past,
your eyes never strayed.
I knew you would love me forever.
I should have never left.
I'm here my love.
Walking these fields of ghosts,
waiting to come home.
Waiting to hear your voice again.
I will wait an eternity to find you again.
I'm sorry.
I should have never left you my love.
Forever I remain.
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User Reviews
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2007-08-25 14:02:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
although i remain
i shall (also) remain
with you
Submitted by Progr3ss (user info) at 2007-08-09 03:04:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Very refreshing.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-08-09 02:20:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
gave me goose bumps
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-08-08 18:25:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i liked it.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-08-08 14:22:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2007-08-08 13:57:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2007-08-08 13:27:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by experima (user info) at 2007-08-08 13:17:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
he had no choice.
+2
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-08-08 12:50:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2007-08-08 12:41:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm conflicted on this. I mean it looks like a poem but it reads like short terse statements. in the end I kind of actaully like the content and don't really care one way or another what you think.