Narcotics 2120 AD (614 hits)
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Submitted by Dalai Queso (View user info) at 2007-08-14 01:11:22 EDT
Try as I might, I couldn't resist it. The appeal was too strong, the choice too easy. I swallowed the pill. Within minutes, a tiny robot would burst from that pill, wait until it detected the chemical structure of brain tissue, and then latch on and do its thing.
The high lasted as long as the nanobot's battery. I don't know how it worked any better than my great grandparents would have known how their drugs worked. But I know it worked. Someone once said something about controlled release of hormones, but it always got way too technical for me beyond that.
All I know is that I enjoyed the delirious euphoria, the inhuman strength, and the precise control over my own body that came with it. Like many drugs, we had the government's military research to thank for "bots". Something about making super humans with hormone control wound up turning into another street drug. It really exploded once nanobot mass production became a simple process.
This trip, however, was different from the rest. Something felt wrong. Something felt... angry. I was at the club, as always when I indulged in this sort of thing. This time the music didn't become part of me, the girls didn't become prettier, and the sights didn't get more spectacular. This time, I found myself leaving the club absent my own volition.
I stepped outside and the shift in odor from acrid smoke to automotive pollutants jarred my senses to the extent that I realized just how strong my smell had been heightened. All around me I could smell myriad odors, easily identifying each. I could feel the faint breeze on the back of my neck and know that the wind speed was a faint 2 mph.
I knew the night to be barely illuminated by a thin crescent moon, yet I could see with remarkable clarity, beyond my typical daylight vision even. A passing car emitted a roar that seemed deafening, but without the pain associated with hearing loss. My head snapped West, and my legs burst into action.
I leapt to the roof of a single story building to stay out of sight. Where was I going? I didn't care. The euphoria overshadowed the fact that I was not in motion by my own willing. The roof beneath me became open air, then after a moment of flight, a new roof was beneath my feet. My body moved, my mind observed.
Lapse.
What happened? I was hopping roof to roof! It was exciting. But what's this? Blood... Lots of it. I'm extremely alert, and I feel no pain. I look over myself and realize; this blood isn't mine. Where am I? Wait, the club I left. I was running west just a moment ago, and now I'm... Oh no... Why is that woman screaming? Wait... They're all looking at me! I want to run, but my muscles refuse to respond! What's going on?
No, no, no, NO, NO!! What did I take? What was that? Whose blood is this? Why am I... Oh no... Those lights... No, move, please, muscles, go, go, go, go, go, go... Oh, s**t, s**t, s**t, s**t.... S**T!!! WHY!!??
--~~Elsewhere~~--
... Yes sir... Affirmative... Without a doubt... They don't remember a thing... They all believed they were taking a party drug, it worked perfectly... Yes, sir... Thank you, sir...
User Reviews
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-08-14 16:07:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Wompom (user info) at 2007-08-14 15:56:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I can't believe how much flack this guy is getting over asterisks. S**t.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-08-14 15:42:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
GETS a 1.5 from me...really, just type in 'shit'...tubgirl won't mind, I'm sure of it
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-08-14 15:41:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by rorrim (user info) at 2007-08-14 15:27:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by zwerg (user info) at 2007-08-14 14:53:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Spam (user info) at 2007-08-14 11:15:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I thought this was ****.
Submitted by ooQueso (user info) at 2007-08-14 10:57:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
oy... you people don't get enough cursing from TV and movies?
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2007-08-14 09:58:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Excellent! BTW, can I get a bag of bots?
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2007-08-14 09:45:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2007-08-14 04:54:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Swearing and self-censorship usually represent the inability, or lazyness of the writer to use more descripitive words.
I don't think that's necessarily true, you certainly can write around swearing without making it weaker or jarring the reader out by "censoring" but there are certainly times when using the whole of the english language allows a stronger conveyance of the energy or emotion in a scene. just my thought on the matter.
if you're going to fucking swear don't fucking do this shit with the fucking asterics. you know what you want your fucking character to fucking say so just come right the fuck out with it. at heart we're all just bastard coated bastards with bastard filling and we can funcking handle a little swearing.
but i did fucking enjoy this.
Submitted by big_spliff_smoker (user info) at 2007-08-14 07:45:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
More Please
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-08-14 07:17:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2007-08-14 07:05:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
What pretty much everyone else said. If you type "s**t" you're thinking "shit" and you want the reader to read "shit". Replacing two letters with symbols is not self-censorship, it's self-delusion. You can write your characters so they don't swear if that's what you're after.
Submitted by CarterPFly (user info) at 2007-08-14 05:56:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
this deserves a better rating then its recieved so far.
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2007-08-14 04:54:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Swearing and self-censorship usually represent the inability, or lazyness of the writer to use more descripitive words.
Submitted by orph (user info) at 2007-08-14 04:00:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This was good, but could have been longer.
And don't censor yourself, it pulls you right out of the story.
Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-08-14 02:14:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by ooQueso (user info) at 2007-08-14 02:03:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I don't like cursing, but it'd sound far more ridiculous if someone was about to be arrested while mysteriously covered in someone elses blood saying "oh, darn, darn, darn". So don't hate for self-censorship, man.
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No, it would sound far more ridiculous if he were saying, "oh ess-asterisk-asterisk-tee! ess-asterisk-asterisk-tee!".
Which is what it looks like. Self-censorship has no place in (serious) writing unless you're fourteen and gosh darn it swearing is bad.
Submitted by Wompom (user info) at 2007-08-14 02:04:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-08-14 01:45:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Uh, why?
Also, you censored yourself?
WTF man?
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Why? Cuz he damn well felt like it.
Fuck off. This was cool. I want more.
Submitted by ooQueso (user info) at 2007-08-14 02:03:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I don't like cursing, but it'd sound far more ridiculous if someone was about to be arrested while mysteriously covered in someone elses blood saying "oh, darn, darn, darn". So don't hate for self-censorship, man.
Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-08-14 01:55:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-08-14 01:45:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Uh, why?
Also, you censored yourself?
WTF man?
Submitted by Chroniclysm (user info) at 2007-08-14 01:28:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm waiting for this to happen.
Submitted by Zeglamancer (user info) at 2007-08-14 01:14:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fuck. I'm hooked.
Submitted by Wompom (user info) at 2007-08-14 01:12:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Hell yes! More creative writing! This was actually pretty cool, too.