Hell's Rebellion(Hell Part 4) (421 hits)
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Submitted by QuinnTheEskimo (View user info) at 2007-08-14 20:43:49 EDT
Previous Parts can be found here: http://www.ubersite.com/m/110394
Speak of the Devil
"Anywhere is better than here?" Penelope asked me, raising her voice. "No. When those bird things got me, I was wandering around. When we saw those..." She paused, choosing her next word carefully. "Demons, when we saw those demons fighting, we were walking. I'm staying here, where there aren't any monsters."
Norman's shoulder's slumped. "We need to stay together. If we split up, we're easier to capture. If we get captured, we're tortured."
"Penelope," I said, "Come with us."
She put her hands on her hips and narrowed her eyes, her brow wrinkled in thought. Then her face cleared. "Lets go back to the gate! Let's get out of here!"
"No, there isn't anything out there." Norman said.
She sat on the ground cross-legged, staring at both Norman and me angrily. "I feel like I'm not getting any say."
I couldn't listen to her anymore. "You know why you're not getting any say? Because it's already been decided. We've got to keep moving. We don't know what's going on, we don't have any idea where we are, we have no weapons, and to top it all off there is no hope of us ever getting out of here. The only chance we have to stay free is to keep moving."
She stood, and started walking. After a moment, Norman and I followed.
We had only come around the second corner when a voice called out. "Hey! Hey, stop!"
Of course, we didn't. We broke into a blind run, not wanting to see whatever it was that calling out to us. However, instead of escaping, we bumped into a group of about six people, most of them armed with black spears and oversized swords.
Norman's jaw dropped. "People?"
"Are you human?" I asked, them, my voice soft with wonder.
"Yes," Said a dark-haired man. "My name is Christian Freeman," He continued. He glanced around at the group behind him, then said, "We got away from the demons that tortured us, and have started a resistance."
Norman's eyes were full of wonder. "How long have you been here?" He asked.
"Since the rebellion. A bunch of demons and monsters have decided that their evil king wasn't doing a good job anymore, and that they could do better. We have all helped each other escape when the demons were too busy fighting to bother keeping track of us."
"But," Norman said, "Why is there a rebellion?"
"Well, from what we know, it seems that the evil king hasn't actually been around much anymore. No one has seen him or heard from him for who knows how long."
"Where is he?" Norman asked.
"That's just it. No one knows. So those big horned guys started fighting and killing those bird things, right?" Christian continued. "Well, that has been going on for a long time, the fighting, maybe since before mankind even."
Norman shook his head. "Wow. So how long have you guys been free?"
Christian considered the question for a few seconds. "I don't know. We can't really keep track of time here."
I nodded, and glanced at my bare wrist. "Yeah, we're having that problem too. What happened at the gate?"
"The gate?" Christian glanced around at his group. "What do you mean? you guys haven't escaped?"
"We were waiting at the gate, to be sorted, and the whole thing exploded." Norman explained. "Penelope," He nodded to her, "Got captured, but we found and freed her."
Again, Christian searched the faces of his companions. "I don't know what you're talking about."
"Can we come with you guys?" I asked.
"We were going to ask you is you wanted to." Christian told me with a smile.
Norman and Christian shook hands, then Norman asked. "Where are we going?"
"To the gates of Hell." Christian answered. "I want to see if we can figure out what happened, okay?"
Penelope looked smug. "That sounds like a good idea!" She said.
"Hey, Penelope?" I said.
"Yes, Irwin?" She asked with exagerated sweetness.
"Fuck you." I told her, and began following Christian.
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Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2007-08-28 10:00:44 EDT (#)
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Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2007-08-15 14:56:18 EDT (#)
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I should have given a solid +2 to celebrate the revival of the series...
Too late now.
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2007-08-15 10:47:56 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2007-08-15 09:39:44 EDT (#)
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""To the gates of Hell." Christian answered. "I want to see if we can figure out what happened, okay?"
Somehow I feel you're thinking the same thing. "
the writing I've enjoyed most has happened this way.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-08-15 03:58:38 EDT (#)
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Submitted by orph (user info) at 2007-08-15 03:54:56 EDT (#)
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I like this story - typos aren't so bad...
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2007-08-14 21:16:26 EDT (#)
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Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2007-08-14 18:13:43 PDT (#)
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+1.5 because of your trademark typos.
The story felt rushed (probably because you're at your sister's house, and had your niece and nephew hanging off you while you wrote it), but I still enjoyed it.
"To the gates of Hell." Christian answered. "I want to see if we can figure out what happened, okay?"
Somehow I feel you're thinking the same thing.
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2007-08-14 21:13:43 EDT (#)
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Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-08-14 20:44:49 EDT (#)
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Alright, I fucked up the title. Fuck, I re-read this one, and there are still mistakes. Who wants to be my editor?