The pursued (uncensored!) (577 hits)
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Submitted by Dalai Queso (View user info) at 2007-08-14 23:08:00 EDT
My pulse is beating so fast I couldn't distinguish individual beats. I have such severe tunnel vision that I can't see my whole hand at once. I'm shaking too much to discern how many fingers I actually can look at. I can't stop, though! I'm still alive, and I know the mirror works! It got me here, so it has to be able to get me back!
I can hear them. The ground shaking rumble of their every step could be partially responsible for the tremors I'm experiencing. They're so hideous; their looks alone could be causing my tunnel vision. The heartbeat? That's all fear.
What did I do before? I remember I was in my bathroom. But what made the mirror start wavering, wobbling... Warping... I can't think of a word for it, but the mirror prompted me to touch it somehow. And I came into this... Place... This hell from the mirror I now see.
SHIT! They're so close; the last stomp knocked the mirror over! Oh thank God it didn't break. Think! Bathroom. Shower. Brushing teeth? No, I don't have a toothbrush on me. Wait... Oh shit; a 10 story doorway, and that monster fills every inch of it.
Picture a 10 story human. Now make it purple with the physique of the Governator in his heyday. Add a veiny bulging eye to the center of the forehead, and take away it's nose. Add two legs, right behind the ones you were picturing before. Then, it's either another arm, or a tail, but it looks a bit like both coming from behind it. On the head, replace hair with tentacles or something. I don't know what's on that things head, but it moves and pulsates like a bunch of fucking tentacles. From the shoulder blades, there are these things that remind me of a scorpion tails, and they alone could make me wet my already soaked pants.
Now make it really angry.
Suddenly I'm overwhelmed with guilt for all the times I chased down a mouse or rat and killed it for getting into my cupboard and eating my oatmeal. That's it! This must be a nightmare! That's all. Breathe deep, and wake up. Wake up. Wake UP. HOLY SHIT IT'S FAST!
Oh, man... Run, run, run, run, run. My legs have never burned this bad in my life. I'm kind of glad my pants are all wet now, with the cooling effect and all. It's right behind me! FUCK! ANOTHER ONE! There's another room to my right, I'll head in there! The mirror! Shit! I need the mirror! I've got to get out of here!
Okay... Breathe. Nice hiding spot. I can see those things looking for me, but they can't see me. I'll sneak out of here, back to the mirror... Deep breath and...
Holy shit, I can't believe I made it out of there alive. They're still looking for me in there. Okay... Umm... Bathroom. Wavy mirror. What happened in between!? How the hell do I get this mirror to work!? AUGH! My EARS! What the fuck! It was that thing, wasn't it? Oh, man, I just shit myself. The piss was handy for the sprints, but the squishy does not help. But shit, that was fucking loud and fucking TERRIFYING! Those things sound like fucking air raid sirens on steroids with some serious guttural droning and livid inflections!
Mirror, mirror, on the floor, get me out of here, be my door! Okay, well, anything's worth a shot right now... It's back in here! How did it know I was here!? RUN! Oh no, oh shit, I can't, it's foot thing, it's, NOOO -
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These humans are so vain. Make them dominant in a dimension, and look what they do with it. What do you say we send one to that lovely dimension with the O'rek'tok? That would be fun, yes? At least a human man could put up a bit more of a fight, there. I'm tired of watching the Ikthiloru stomp men into oblivion.
You approve? Wonderful. I'll go pick out a female this time. Let's see what the O'rek'tok would do with one of those...
User Reviews
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-08-16 01:28:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-08-15 18:58:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
all right...
Submitted by DirtyHarry (user info) at 2007-08-15 11:47:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Yeah, ok.
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2007-08-15 10:28:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Dreams are the best inspiration for horror.
Submitted by ooQueso (user info) at 2007-08-15 10:09:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
In a dream, it did. Fortunately I woke up to dry sheets.
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2007-08-15 09:46:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Not entirely sure how I feel about this one. It seemed somewhat sophmoric with all the piss and shit and the monologue was choppy and frantic though I spose if something scared a guy enough for him to become incontinent his thoughts would be all scatterbrained and jumpy. eh whatever. i liked the last ones and did read all the way through this so..... +2 for more fiction. this didn't really happen to you right?
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2007-08-15 09:32:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by azurefroz (user info) at 2007-08-15 07:35:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Helmet cat is not amused.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2007-08-15 05:19:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Excellent! The constant references to defecation were a bit worrying though, although I suppose it takes all sorts to make a world eh? Tell you what, why don't you make the next post about a man who explores his own arsehole via a combination of contortion and Alice in Wonderland style shrinkage! It would blast the booker list into tri cornered hat!
Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-08-15 01:08:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Uncensored!
Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-08-15 00:18:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Better than i do under the influence
Submitted by ooQueso (user info) at 2007-08-15 00:07:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Well, buzzing hardcore, but not quite plastered. I guess you could say drunk.
Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-08-14 23:33:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You wrote this drunk?
Submitted by ooQueso (user info) at 2007-08-14 23:09:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Maybe not drunk... I'm pretty damn buzzed right now, though. Alcohol is my muse.