What If (478 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: -0.21 on 18 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by BlinkinTurtle (View user info) at 2007-09-03 19:30:38 EDT
Sat, desolute waiting for time and life.
Left alone to ponder what I have been,
and what I may become.
A lonely path awaits us all,
but mine is long and dark.
The leaning arms of sulking trees
Block out the light of love,
and bring a shaded calm of silence,
that screams at me so proud.
Past the envious leaves of solitude,
fly clouds so undecidedly,
to await my thoughts once they have past,
and to steal my contemptuous smile.
I'll walk beneath the jading glare,
lost in thought and memories past.
Think of times when I have sat at the majestic table,
with an angel by my side.
When life was good, and when I smiled.
When the sunlight made it through.
What if I hadn't done it,
What if I'd have seen things through.
But I threw it all, had one last walk.
But now my walkings through.
I'll sit and think, of what I have been.
And of what I may become.
User Reviews
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-09-04 19:47:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by BlinkinTurtle (user info) at 2007-09-04 19:14:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Merci, Mr Berg.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2007-09-04 18:12:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I thought the poem was pretty good.
Blink away.
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2007-09-04 17:58:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
My last post was terrible, and even I think this sucks ass.
Submitted by BlinkinTurtle (user info) at 2007-09-04 09:18:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Meh. The ratings don't bother me. But those who actually offer serious criticism or light thanks, then please keep doing so. I won't post everyday, and won't always post what some of you see as a waste of "Uberspace". But anyhows, thanks for those who can at least appreciate what I am trying to do, and a big fuck you for the ignorants. Smile.
Submitted by ChaosJester (user info) at 2007-09-04 07:45:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Well, Okay.
I usually dislike poetry, but this struck a chord.
Good pic, too.
Submitted by Progr3ss (user info) at 2007-09-04 04:49:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Submitted by AsshOly (user info) at 2007-09-04 04:17:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
didnt read your stupid fucking poem because everybody else rated negatively, but that picture is neat.
Submitted by HateMudkips (user info) at 2007-09-04 02:42:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
meh
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-09-04 02:04:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good for you for not getting all offended when people -2 you (at nearly every post) and good for you at keeping at what you like writing.
Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2007-09-03 23:13:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
What if you stopped posting this dreck,
that would be awesome.
Please do so directly,
I am much obliged.
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2007-09-03 23:11:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
oh fuck no
Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2007-09-03 21:59:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I read this and started stabbing my eyes out with a blunt pencil
Submitted by Realpolitik (user info) at 2007-09-03 21:48:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
-2 no comment
Submitted by earth_collapse (user info) at 2007-09-03 20:50:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Okay.
Submitted by ShapeShifter (user info) at 2007-09-03 19:53:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Yes!
No!
Submitted by BlinkinTurtle (user info) at 2007-09-03 19:32:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
http://mapouk.deviantart.com/gallery/ - picture taken from here. Wrote verse around it.
Submitted by earth_collapse (user info) at 2007-09-03 19:32:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Are you kidding?