Together (490 hits)
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Submitted by orph (View user info) at 2007-10-09 09:00:51 EDT
There he is, and I've been waiting so long here in the rain to catch a glimpse. He's so dreamy, so beautiful, and I don't believe any of the bad things they say about him.
He's seen it all, done it all, but was always more hardcore than any of the pretenders. Rocked and rolled, snorted and smoked, drank and vomited, always more, always wanting more.
Thin and fat, pretty and ugly, nice and bitchy, he's fucked them all, but never enough, always wanting more. Women and men, girls and boys, there's nowhere he won't go. Insatiable, that is what he is.
Family and solitary, friends and enemies, acquaintances and siblings, all flashed through, but are now just individual cells in the film of his past. It's a sordid, sexy, filthy, sickening and beautiful movie. He's a star and a hack, the reviews are adoring and critical, but he laps it all up, like champagne from a dog's dish.
He's so perfect, and I don't even feel the rain seeping down the collar of my coat. I'm here and so is he, we were made to be together.
'Don't you know who I am?' is his catch-cry, and of course everyone does. They love him and hate him, want to be him, or beat him. It's great to be famous, but I know how he feels about me.
He struts and strolls, punches and cowers, cries and laughs, but he's the man in the end, and he knows it. But best of all, so does everyone else.
He's looking at me now, and I can see the question on his lips.
'Why do people think that life is hard? It's a fucking breeze bitches, and if you're whining, fuck off. Look at me, no really, look at me. Aren't I just the shit?'
I know my love, I know how it is.
'My clothes are designer, my cars are the latest, the greatest, and I've got a jet, yeah, a fucking jet! I've got more houses than anyone, more than I need; I haven't even been in half of them yet.'
But you deserve it my love and I will always cherish what we have.
'And for what, what is it that you people throw your money at me for? Do you think we connect? Am I saying what you're thinking? Are we just friends that haven't met yet?'
He's speaking to me! Oh, I know darling, we are lovers, not just lost friends. I've followed you for years, and I can tell we're meant to be.
'Fuck off - I hate you all, and the more you love me, the more my contempt grows.'
He wasn't supposed to say that; it's a trick, something to do with all the microphones and cameras they always shove in his face - anyone would get sick of that.
'You fucking parasites make me sick - I don't care what you fucking think! You morons buy whatever I put out, and lick my arse like its ice-cream. I tell you what; it's all a fucking charade you pukes! It was a character I played in movie. Fucking get over it and leave me alone
I wish they would leave him alone, but I can tell he's not talking to me. He knows how I feel. These sweaty freaks that track you everywhere, I'm sick of them too. Why can't they leave us alone?
What's that slut doing here? That evil bitch is only after his money, she doesn't know you! Tell her to get out of here! I've waited for three hours for you to come and get me. FUCK OFF you meddling whore!
The security are looking at me now. I've got to leave you again. We can't have another mix up like last time. The knife was meant for her - you said you'd get rid of her! They're running at me. I'll leave your present here, they can hand it on to you my love.
'It's another one sir,' the hired thug murmured into his radio, as he cradled the doll likeness of his employer, head hanging from a slender thread, throat cut.
I can still see you my love, and tonight, I know where we'll meet. I've gone ahead, and I'll wait for there...
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Submitted by netimportant (user info) at 2007-10-11 00:45:48 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-10-11 00:27:35 EDT (#)
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Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-09 17:34:50 EDT (#)
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Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-10-09 14:48:47 EDT (#)
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Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-10-09 14:48:36 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2007-10-09 11:19:07 EDT (#)
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Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2007-10-09 10:18:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
It's good!
Submitted by pshuu (user info) at 2007-10-09 09:58:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Creepy.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2007-10-09 09:55:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
I didn't like it. The subject matter of obsession hasn't been properly explored and seemed trivialised by the rhythm of the post.
That rhythm was good for defining the characters but what's the end product? All it amounted to was "ooooh, she's crayazeee!" rather than anything human.
Perhaps you've just gone for too big a picture. Perhaps another aspect of obsession, something people can identify with would have been more appropriate? For example, a fat kid who grows up to be a dude obsessed with urban stealth who wears disguises when he takes the bus and constantly moves address in order to feel invisible. You could look at motivations and actual thoughts of people locked into circular thinking.
I did like the structure and rhythm though, they were pretty cool.
Submitted by shadow (user info) at 2007-10-09 09:45:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
hmm.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-10-09 09:43:43 EDT (#)
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Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-10-09 09:34:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2007-10-09 09:12:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Yeah, forgot all the passwords.
Submitted by orph (user info) at 2007-10-09 09:09:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
cheers locksly, what happened - alters all blocked?
Submitted by nicballs (user info) at 2007-10-09 09:08:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice.
Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2007-10-09 09:06:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No.
Not the place.
Submitted by Hilarity_Ensues (user info) at 2007-10-09 09:06:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I <3 stalkers.