Breaking Point (1663 hits)
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Submitted by Orphelia (View user info) at 2007-10-25 03:46:21 EDT
Anna stood intently watching the rolling sea stretching for miles before her. The deep indigo blues swirled in a torrent with emerald greens, the crashing waves breaking on to the craggy rocks in a foam of yellow and white froth.
The sound of the water sung to Anna like a lullaby.
From the cliff tops, Anna could see for miles. Houses miniaturized to dots of brown and grey on the landscape. The gulls, circling a shoal of fish miles from the shore, appeared like specks of dust on the pale blue horizon.
Anna breathed in the moist, salty air, feeling her chest tighten, her lungs compress. All the beauty that surrounded Anna couldn't stop the ache she felt in her heart, the pounding in her head.
She felt her feet sink slowly into the soft mud beneath the grass. 'Rooted to the spot' she thought as she watched a nearby gannet swoop the water for its prey.
Anna liked the sea. She liked the way it whirled and eddied around the rocks in the shallows. That in the deepest parts of the ocean, the water appeared to be black with shadows and mystery. She felt the water reflected her own turmoiled mind.
The drive here had been spontaneous. The final straw had been something so insignificant, Anna had trouble to recall what is was. She simply took her coat from its peg, gently closed the door behind her, got into the car and left. It had been that easy.
She had driven for hours, not knowing her exact destination but somehow drawn here, to the sea and its endless tide. It had not been her intention to travel so far and she could barely remember any of her journey.
Her tears had long since dried and left charcoal streaks down her pale cheeks. Her anger, her despair, had subsided into a numbness which swept over her entire body.
Anna ran her fingers through her windswept hair. She smelled the faint scent of her coconut shampoo. The sweet fragrance brought memories of their last holiday abroad together, years ago now, flooding back.
Biting her lip, Anna swallowed hard, trying to rid herself of these thoughts. No, she couldn't allow herself to think like this, not now. Not of her children. Her bright, beautiful children.
Anna's gaze fell upon a clump of thrift, it's delicate lilac flowers swaying in the sea breeze. Anna was astounded something that looked so fragile could survive such a hostile environment.
Her legs felt leaden as she stepped closer to the edge. The sun was setting now, the clouds turning violent shades of purple, orange and pink.
When they had met, she was sure he had loved her. A deep, passionate love. A tender lover. As the years ticked by, Anna's feelings had never changed, only increased in intensity. It was little things at first, Anna noticed now, looking back. The change had crept upon her so stealthily it had taken her months to realise the truth. By then, it was too late. Things had deteriorated acutely once Anna accepted this was the beginning of a long end. She gave up trying to please, doing anything seldom gave her pleasure. Her depression, some days, consumed her in a blackness she hoped she would not wake from.
She became immune to his cruelty, his meanness. He had hurt her enough and he could hurt her no more. Anna felt dead inside.
The sunset faded away into night and Anna began to feel the cold biting at her face and hands.
Across the water, she spotted a line of boats, trawlers hauling in the days catch, their lights illuminating a black, forbidding sea. The ligthouse below, a red and white beacon guiding the men safely back to shore, it's spotlight searching the ocean as if looking for lost souls.
She had felf so unaware of everything recently. So scared of the future. Everything was out of her control.
Anna took one last look around at the sky and sea. Closing her eyes tightly, shutting herself away from the world around her, she silently stepped forward off the edge of the cliff and plunged into the darkness below.
User Reviews
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2008-03-25 13:57:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 Orphelia
Submitted by lostnphound (user info) at 2008-03-25 13:27:21 EDT (#)
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BOING
Submitted by HotWillie (user info) at 2008-03-17 21:39:07 EDT (#)
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how long were your children crying while you wrote this beautiful post?
because it was worth every minute.
Submitted by DonovanMD (user info) at 2008-03-17 21:25:28 EDT (#)
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I read this before and forgot to rate it. Well done.
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2008-03-06 08:27:26 EST (#)
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Very good.
Thanks for the tips.
Submitted by TheGoat (user info) at 2008-02-13 05:36:39 EST (#)
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wow. i like the imagery.
Submitted by woolfe (user info) at 2008-02-12 06:44:30 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by matnotharry (user info) at 2008-02-04 19:17:23 EST (#)
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YES.
Submitted by BeforeEmily (user info) at 2008-01-31 17:02:03 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-01-07 18:08:08 EST (#)
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http://www.ubersite.com/m/114141#2620085
Submitted by sadie73 (user info) at 2007-12-08 18:50:46 EST (#)
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Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-12-03 10:33:54 EST (#)
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I'm gonna slap my cock on your face....repeatedly. You will become my personal slut and cook cherry cobbler at my beck and call.
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I bet he really meant cock cobbler
Submitted by sadie73 (user info) at 2007-12-08 18:49:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Pretty damn good. . .
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2007-12-08 18:19:51 EST (#)
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Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2007-10-31 07:46:10 EDT (#)
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CJ's advice was terrible - this was fine for what it was.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-12-03 10:33:54 EST (#)
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I'm gonna slap my cock on your face....repeatedly. You will become my personal slut and cook cherry cobbler at my beck and call.
Submitted by creep_firebombing (user info) at 2007-11-23 09:08:01 EST (#)
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Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 03:47:05 EDT (#)
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Be gentle with me.
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I most certainly would not be gentle with you.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-11-22 17:57:32 EST (#)
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Why thank you Bubba. You are right, I am a whiney bitch.
Let it be known to all - Bubba is NOT fat. I repeat, Bubba is NOT fat.
But he is a virgin. Hehee
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-11-21 21:34:46 EST (#)
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Teh Final shite. . . . --- ***
<lastgoodshityagetfromme,yacunt>
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-11-21 21:32:38 EST (#)
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Another for yer brother. He has bigger tits, doan he??
Smootchie wootchie.
Twathole. . .
:)
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-11-21 21:31:07 EST (#)
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Feel Bette??? Shit. I cain't tipe fur carp. . .
:)
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-11-21 21:29:23 EST (#)
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Here's your +2,you WHINEY CUNT!!!! DOES IT MAKE YOU HAPPY?? HUH????
I will make your scummy twat feel bette if you wish. No??
Well, then, suck my ratatouille. . . ..
Stupid whining bitch. . .
:) jes havin'fun,lady. Don't take the intarweb seriously. . .
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-11-21 03:02:18 EST (#)
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Thanks Bubba! You know, the only thing funny about you is the size of your penis.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-11-20 20:18:47 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
HaVve I told you lately that you suck dog balls. Ye reap that which ye sow.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2007-11-19 13:38:39 EST (#)
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Are you a dirty mackem then? Horrible
Submitted by rorrim (user info) at 2007-11-19 11:53:44 EST (#)
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After some serious consideration, i can't seem to be able to find a witty response to this :
http://www.ubersite.com/m/113112#2580345
Let's just say, it made my day.:->
Admirer below.
Submitted by lungfish (user info) at 2007-11-11 02:50:55 EST (#)
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You are, indeed, without question, the hottest Orphelia I have ever, or am likely ever, to know.
Submitted by Danger_Ranger (user info) at 2007-11-08 06:39:27 EST (#)
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http://www.ubersite.com/m/87055
nice post btw, nearly as good as mine. nearly. okay nearly as good as licking lead-based paint. we can't all be authors shnookums.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-11-07 16:56:54 EST (#)
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bye girl. Keep on keeping on.
Was just getting to know you too...
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-10-31 09:17:29 EDT (#)
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BWAHAHAHAHAH
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-31 09:15:29 EDT (#)
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That you were Shapeshifter. That guy hates me.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-10-31 09:13:34 EDT (#)
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Interest is peaked...what things have you heard, may I ask?
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-10-31 09:07:21 EDT (#)
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http://www.ubersite.com/m/112852#2568272
Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2007-10-31 07:46:10 EDT (#)
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CJ's advice was terrible - this was fine for what it was.
Submitted by rorrim (user info) at 2007-10-29 12:22:51 EDT (#)
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http://www.ubersite.com/m/98029#2565089
Clever girl! Have a X for making me smile.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-26 12:10:14 EDT (#)
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Berty - I am sorry if the comment I left on spiltpersons post the other day made you :-(
It was meant to be tongue in cheek. My sense of humour is lame.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2007-10-26 11:59:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
It's all relative Orphy. In Ubersite terms it isn't really, but in real terms it means your posts have been looked at on average 1100 times.
"Nobody is famous for 15 minutes anymore, instead everyone is famous to 1500 people."
-Cat & Girl
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-26 11:31:06 EDT (#)
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Is that alot of hits?
Thanks rorrim ;-)
Submitted by rorrim (user info) at 2007-10-26 11:28:25 EDT (#)
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I just noticed you've got an average of 1100 hits per post.
You go, girl!
This was also good, btw.
Submitted by Paloma (user info) at 2007-10-25 21:44:37 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by lungfish (user info) at 2007-10-25 21:38:36 EDT (#)
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Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 17:25:50 EDT (#)
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This picture oozes cool.
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Why yes. Yes it does. Thank you for noticing.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2007-10-25 16:40:36 EDT (#)
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Shlongy would like you to make arrangements to blow him.
-Captain Thorns
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 14:57:15 EDT (#)
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I think there are a few 'small things' but I am pleased with the result and I enjoyed writing it. And I really appreciate the constructive criticism.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-10-25 14:51:40 EDT (#)
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Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 14:33:26 EDT (#)
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Merlina - I thought I put something about the sunset faded into night. I was really uncertain about the whole last paragraph anyway. I tried to tell the reader that she had been there for hours. Or something.
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It was a small thing - was a beautiful piece anyway.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 14:33:26 EDT (#)
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Merlina - I thought I put something about the sunset faded into night. I was really uncertain about the whole last paragraph anyway. I tried to tell the reader that she had been there for hours. Or something.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-10-25 14:27:45 EDT (#)
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Pretty good.
Submitted by triangle_man (user info) at 2007-10-25 12:41:23 EDT (#)
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bummer
Submitted by Lib (user info) at 2007-10-25 12:33:54 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-10-25 11:54:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-10-25 11:00:24 EDT (#)
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My only critque would be the very last bit "plunging into the darkness below".
I had it pictured perfectly (as it said sun was just setting with colours) and darkness seemed wrong. Maybe into the blue?
Or maybe I'm talking rubbish...
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:54:55 EDT (#)
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Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:02:26 EDT (#)
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Hurty - I kow what you mean. I only had a choice of 'she', 'her' and 'Anna' though.
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hmmm actually you could have presented her as "the woman" or something along those lines and used various synonyms for woman, then introduced her as anna a little bit into the story.
you can also start more lines with verbs instead of pronouns or anna.
like the last paragraph, instead of "anna took one last look" you can say "taking one last look, anna" etc.
Submitted by FlakMonkey (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:47:11 EDT (#)
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nice, pretty picture.
~Brdn_nkd
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:45:51 EDT (#)
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Also did you know that hurty has a vagina? Infact he's one big weeping vagina.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:44:45 EDT (#)
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Did you know that once in NEW YORK, NY. A man was knocked down by a car and got up uninjured, but lay back down in front of the car when a bystander told him to feign injury in order to collect insurance money. The car rolled forward and crushed him to death.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:44:24 EDT (#)
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Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:42:15 EDT (#)
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Em that made my head spin.
Hurty - go away you Scottish meanie, back to your tenement (Scottish for squat)!
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Just wave Buckies Tonic wine at Hurty and he will be all yours.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:44:11 EDT (#)
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Psst everybody. Drogo is scared of spelling and grammar. What a girl! hehe
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:42:15 EDT (#)
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Em that made my head spin.
Hurty - go away you Scottish meanie, back to your tenement (Scottish for squat)!
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:41:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:37:52 EDT (#)
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Drogo - might seem like a daft question to you but I am not very good with computers. Thanks for your advice all the same.
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No questions are stupid. I'm amazed you managed to type your stuff in the Uber box, i find it too frightening as I know how atrocious my spelling and grammar can be.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:40:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I can write better than anybody who can write faster, and I can write faster than anybody who can write better
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:37:52 EDT (#)
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Drogo - might seem like a daft question to you but I am not very good with computers. Thanks for your advice all the same.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:31:20 EDT (#)
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Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:05:44 EDT (#)
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Yozz - I see your point. I admit, this post is littered with mistakes (how do you use spell check on here, incidentally?)
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Type it in Word and copy and paste ?????
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:30:00 EDT (#)
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Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 15:05:44 BST (#)
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Yozz - I see your point. I admit, this post is littered with mistakes (how do you use spell check on here, incidentally?)
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STFU n00b. GTFO.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:05:44 EDT (#)
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Yozz - I see your point. I admit, this post is littered with mistakes (how do you use spell check on here, incidentally?)
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:04:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I gave it a second read. I missed some things the first time. I get it.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:02:26 EDT (#)
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Hurty - I kow what you mean. I only had a choice of 'she', 'her' and 'Anna' though.
Drogo - I agree. I once spoke to a lady who was a counsellor. She said that the hardest people to help were those who's relatives had committed suicide. They continually ask 'why', even if there was a note. They never get their answer. I thought this was really sad. I would prefer to stick around and work my troubles out. But I am tough like that. Beachy Head is beautiful.
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2007-10-25 10:01:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I find it curious how she could see the beauty of each and everything in the world around her (at least, in that one moment) but be so depressed as to jump. Compare, for example, http://www.ubersite.com/m/108965. +2 for being well written.
Submitted by Paralyzed_By_Hope (user info) at 2007-10-25 09:58:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good first attempt at fiction. Nicely paced. I agree that it was more snapshot than story, but sometimes - when written well - snapshots can have more depth than a traditional story arc.
Also, just a note, indigo is blue and emerald is green, saying "indigo blues" and "emerald greens" is a bit repetitive - to me. Other than that, a pleasure to read.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2007-10-25 09:45:33 EDT (#)
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next time bring a towel and roll it up for your knees. i swear it makes it easier for you.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-10-25 09:42:06 EDT (#)
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I never tried to twist it!! I sat perfectly still thanks. You just have rubbish aim.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-10-25 09:36:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-10-25 09:34:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-10-25 14:33:31 BST (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice piece.
Personally I think Suicide is a rather selfish act but then I have never been touched by it so dont really know.
Beachy Head is Beautiful.
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Ive always found it itched a bit too much..
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Hahahahahahaha
Shame on you Em! I tried it once on a beach and have vowed never to do it again, unless on a british beach which is mainly just stones rather than sand.
And that doesnt mean that I GAVE head on the beach, before you try and twist this.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-10-25 09:34:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-10-25 14:33:31 BST (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice piece.
Personally I think Suicide is a rather selfish act but then I have never been touched by it so dont really know.
Beachy Head is Beautiful.
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Ive always found it itched a bit too much..
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-10-25 09:33:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice piece.
Personally I think Suicide is a rather selfish act but then I have never been touched by it so dont really know.
Beachy Head is Beautiful.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-10-25 09:14:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i like katys arse
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2007-10-25 09:13:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
1.5
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2007-10-25 09:13:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
a couple of lines in here were a little too romance novel for me but over all i thought it flowed nicedly.
Submitted by TheGoat (user info) at 2007-10-25 08:36:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by swamp_donkey (user info) at 2007-10-25 08:30:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I actually read this and liked it.
Submitted by BranDo (user info) at 2007-10-25 07:41:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
suicide deserves a +2 always.
not enough people can commit it in my book.
my book is fiction too.
good read.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2007-10-25 07:23:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Very nice, but using 'Anna' all the time kind of irritated me.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-10-25 05:08:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I am wearing a crisp white shirt today.
Gay men do fancy me, its my innocence look plus the fact I like doing women up the pooper.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 05:01:21 EDT (#)
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Haha Berty.
Thanks CJ. I totally get what you mean. I was worried that the reader wouldn't be bothered about Anna as I never gave her a character really. I toyed with the idea of her not jumping but I found it hard to write it that way without it sounding cheesy. Thanks *takes notes of all CJs suggestions*
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:54:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Ah, the ol' unreliable narrator: "He never once bought me prada, that cruel beast!" heh heh.
Nobody has used that in ages actually, or at least it feels like no-one has.
Submitted by ChaosJester (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:54:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Well, you could have done a lot more with this that you actually did, but I'll rate favorably since this seems to be your first stab in the realm of fiction.
Still, next time, try to give your character an arc to follow. This is more of a quick snapshot of a personality than an actual story. If she'd come to the cliff to die, then, upon reflection decided that life was too sweet to waste prematurely or something, then it would have made this much more satisfying to read.
Hell, you could even introduce an extra character like a some random person who happened to be walking along and saw her start to walk off the cliff. The dialogue that would ensue from such an encounter would serve to both illustrate the woman much better and draw the reader into the story more.
...
Anyway, the point that I'm trying to get across is that, while the post you've crafted is pretty in a painting sort of way, it's also just at static and take-it-or-leave-it as an image. Next time, try to get the person reading your stuff ppersonally involved in your material.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:40:36 EDT (#)
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Berty - I am not sure she was abused as such, maybe just ignored and unloved.
Em - didn't I see you there? haha
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:37:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'd rather watch a film about Alzheimers than a film about wimmin drowning themselves. Afterall, the movie version of wimmin drowning themselves starring Mel Gibson was definative.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:37:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
GAY BAR GAY BAR!
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:36:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I really liked it, although there do seem to be an awful lot of posts featuring abused women lately.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:15:57 EDT (#)
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Thanks.
Submitted by AsshOly (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:13:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
dont fret. especially for a first attempt at fiction, this was pretty good. i liked this more than that shitty book.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:12:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I haven't read it, it doesn't sound like my cup of tea.
I hate it that it seems so similar too you. However, it is such a much written about subject it doesn't surprise me that it reminds you of something.
Submitted by AsshOly (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:09:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
no, it's about a chick who drowns herself in the ocean after her affair doesnt work out. there were other factors too, but your story paralleled that aspect of it.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:05:34 EDT (#)
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No I have not read the Awakening. Isn't that a film about people with Alzheimers?
Submitted by AsshOly (user info) at 2007-10-25 04:02:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
read the awakening recently?
Submitted by AsshOly (user info) at 2007-10-25 03:56:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i wish you could place jpgs anywhere in the post. i looked at the picture first and then started reading, and now the visual is sort of bringing your words to life, already.
im on line 2. i just wanted to share that really quickly.
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2007-10-25 03:55:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
i always like to go to the ocean shore, where a river flows out, so i can watch the salmon fuck while i drink a little crab and eat some wine
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2007-10-25 03:48:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I love clifftop flowers.. there are amazing ones up there that alot of people aren't aware even exist..
Lovely post.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-25 03:47:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
My first attempt at fiction. Be gentle waith me.