In Four Years........ (704 hits)
Category: RomanceRating: 1.29 on 28 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by TechnoRatty (View user info) at 2007-10-29 20:01:34 EDT
Four years from now, we won't know each other. Four years from now, we could both be married to different people, have two kids and a big house. Or maybe we'll both be the big people at our companies. Who knows? We could've lost everything, become tramps, or ... something. Maybe we'll be sitting in the hospital with no memory. Or maybe we'll be jumping out of a plane just for the joy of it. We don't know now, we won't know it then.
Remember when we first met? You and I both agreed, we were just going to have a fling, but there was something that happened when we touched. It made me feel like I belonged, it made me feel safe. I held onto that feeling for the seven months we 'fooled around'. It was the only thing that made me know my life wasn't falling apart.
I lost everything I had. My job, because they were 'cutting back', and my house, because they were tearing it down. My dad was in a car accident, My brother's wife was cheating on him, and my mother was becoming a drunk. My life was falling apart.
You did the right thing. You offered me a place to stay while I got back up on my feet. I'll always owe you for that. We still fooled around occasionally, but somehow we turned into an old married couple. I don't know when, or even how, but we started to argue.
I missed the guy who made me smile for no reason, the guy who made me feel happy. I missed us. What happened to us? Was moving in too much, too fast? How should I know? You never told me anything.
I'm packing my bags, I'm going to go and live with my mum. She needs me right now, and I sort of need her too. I'm set on leaving. Since I no longer have my job, you don't have to worry about seeing me everyday and wondering what I was doing.
You might not remember my name in four years, you may be happy in four years. Maybe you will be. Maybe I will be happy too. Who knows? In four years, we would not last as a couple, and the fling had to end sometime.
It's odd, in fact weird, how you're watching me take my stuff out of the flat. I leave one more box, just as an excuse to come back up one last time.
I walk into the flat and look at you. I ask, because I have to know, "Will you remember me?"
"Of course I will," the lie rolls off your tongue. I stare at you, for a long moment, and you add, ".....Maybe."
"You won't," I tell you, "So whatever you're feeling, regret, and relief, whatever...it won't last long."
"I know," you say, with a nod. You pick up the last box and stare at me. I hold out my hands and wait. You smile lightly and hand the box to me.
Oh, God, I think I'm going to cry. I mutter my goodbye, "Thanks for everything. I really owe you."
"Yeah, sure," you say, and I sigh.
"Bye," I call out as I regrettably walk away from you. You were probably the best thing that ever happened to me. I throw the box into my car and feel the tears come on. What had gone wrong?
I was in love with you. I let emotions cloud everything, didn't I?
Oh, God, I ruined it.
I sit in my car and cry, with my head on the steering wheel. I don't try to control my sobs.
You won't remember me, but I know I'll remember you forever. I'll never forget how we used to joke around, used to hold each other late at night. I'll never forget how you held your hand out for me, when my family fell apart Even though it was just last week, you were there for me, and that's what was important.
I screamed in frustration and then attempted to dry my eyes. Once I did, I turned the car on and took one lingering look at your flat. Then I drove.
User Reviews
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2007-11-23 13:58:22 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Y HALO THAR CHAD CHAMLEY
Submitted by beat_raven (user info) at 2007-11-23 13:30:59 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
http://storywrite.com/story/114601
You're Erica Lynn too? Wow.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2007-11-23 13:22:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Depressing, and cuts very deep in me.
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2007-10-30 21:11:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Drive on.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2007-10-30 16:50:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Paralyzed_By_Hope (user info) at 2007-10-30 16:19:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
That jogged a memory hidden in the deep corners of my mind. +2 for surprise nostalgia.
Oh and I liked it regardless.
Submitted by FALLEN (user info) at 2007-10-30 15:56:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
ditto
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2007-10-30 13:36:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by triangle_man (user info) at 2007-10-30 13:15:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I didn't mean it.
Come back!!!
Submitted by oscar_dean (user info) at 2007-10-30 11:04:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Bittersweet. *sigh*
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-10-30 10:14:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-10-30 09:37:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Christ I know what this is like.
Submitted by FlakMonkey (user info) at 2007-10-30 08:34:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
all too well.
~Brdn_Nkd
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-10-30 06:07:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This made me sad :(
+2 'cos you are fab.
Submitted by ChaosJester (user info) at 2007-10-30 05:04:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2007-10-29 21:31:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I know exactly where this is coming from.
Submitted by ColchesterDr (user info) at 2007-10-30 00:46:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by ramirez60 (user info) at 2007-10-29 23:43:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
after four years...
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2007-10-29 23:35:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I'll save you. We'll get together and you can blow me and your frown will turn into a smile.
I'm that kind of guy.
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2007-10-29 21:31:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I know exactly where this is coming from.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2007-10-29 21:27:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-10-29 21:22:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
good solid one
Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2007-10-29 20:55:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
HEY YOU, DOWN THERE. Shut the f up about your dick already.
Submitted by ConorJS (user info) at 2007-10-29 20:52:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
"Bye," I call out as I regrettably walk away from you
"Regretfully" would be the word you were trying for there. That's not the reason for the rating though, I just didn't like it.
Submitted by ShimishSmortion (user info) at 2007-10-29 20:41:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I thought it was well written
Submitted by beer-turtle (user info) at 2007-10-29 20:33:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
If looking back hurts...look ahead.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-10-29 20:07:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2007-10-29 20:02:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
sorry.
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2007-10-29 20:02:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
My dick is numb. And itchy.