Rita Stands Alone: Part 1 of 2 (727 hits)
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Submitted by QuinnTheEskimo (View user info) at 2007-11-28 15:38:59 EST
"Hey, Chuck!" Rita made an over-exaggerated wave trying to get my attention. I winced, by now she must have known I didn't care for that nickname. Rita was lovely, but a little scary. She seemed to have an edge that I didn't understand, there was something primitive about her, not in her looks, oh no, but in her actions, her ideas, her very movements. Or maybe it was her over-sized, second-hand, fake-fur coat, which she wore even on hot days like this.
"Hey, Rita." I answered, picking up my backpack and walking away. My interactions with Rita were always embarrassing. I had the sense that she had some kind of... Desire for me? Infatuation with me? Crush on me? Or maybe she was just trying to be friendly. I hated feeling the kind of pressure I felt around her. Every little misstep felt magnified a hundred times.
"Are you going to class?" She asked, jogging a little to meet up with me. I glanced at her bouncing breasts as her coat flapped open then quickly turned my eyes down, feeling a little shame and hoping she hadn't noticed.
"Yeah, the science class I'm taking this semester." I was still walking, picking up my pace a little bit. She had to jog again to catch up but this time I didn't glance at her breasts.
"With O'Connor, or Bach?" She asked.
"Uh, Prof. Goldstein."
"Ah, the Jew." She said in a knowing tone.
I winced at the slur, then nodded. I prayed that she wouldn't ask to walk with me to class at the same time that I tried to think of a good excuse to leave.
"Whaddya say to playing hooky?" She asked me, cocking her head to one side and putting a hand on her hip. Beneath her knee-length coat I see shes wearing a mini-skirt with leg warmers.
"I dunno, I mean, where are we going?"
"Lets bale." She smiled
"Bale?" I asked, and all of a sudden I felt curious.
"Let's ditch this school and go on an adventure. Lets escape to someplace exotic. Ever been to Alaska?" She smiled her biggest smile, and flashed her crooked canine.
But with that my curiosity was squelched. "No, I have a paper due today, I can't." Those were the words I said to her, but my tone, my posture, all screamed a subliminal message of "Get lost, scary girl." My sentence wasn't even over before I saw Rita's smile diminish, her shoulders slump a little, and her hand dropped from her hip. Instantly I regretted rejecting her, but something told me it was too late to turn back, too late to correct myself and go with her.
"I didn't know you had a paper due." She turned her face away and I was struck with the sudden urge to kiss her cheek, but I held myself back.
"It's alright," I told her, even though I knew it wasn't. "Some other time?" I suggested unconvincingly.
"Yeah, sure." She brightened up but I couldn't tell if it was fake or not.
"It's just, I have to go to class, you know? I don't want to get docked for-"
She cut me off. "It's fine, Charles, really." She used me real name. And she hugged me. "Some other time."
I wish I could tell you I saved this moment, and that me and beautiful Rita went someplace in a stolen car, eating Lay's, drinking beer and flicking our cigarette butts out of the window, playing the radio too loud and getting into fights at truck stops. I wish I could tell you how we're still lovers and still happy after all this time. But it's been too long to lie anymore.
In reality, I said, "Bye, Rita." And walked away. After about thirty yards, I turned around and walked backwards, searching for Rita's giant fur coat that would stand out so well against the other more scantily clad college women.
I saw her, she saw me. I didn't wave. She didn't smile. Some other time.
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Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-01-10 20:50:57 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
this is pretty bad
Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2007-12-03 07:09:33 EST (#)
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Not bad.
Submitted by jared.melton (user info) at 2007-12-03 04:21:41 EST (#)
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Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-12-02 02:11:49 EST (#)
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Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-11-29 11:56:31 EST (#)
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That's so, uh, cute
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Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-11-29 08:57:48 EST (#)
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Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-11-29 03:28:06 EST (#)
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Submitted by lungfish (user info) at 2007-11-28 23:52:37 EST (#)
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Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:10:43 EST (#)
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and then boris felt compelled to to eat a nutrigrain bar.
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I honestly don;t get it. what?
Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-11-29 03:19:54 EST (#)
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Roommates in the extreme. Quinn and Haiku, buddies and roomies forever!
Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-11-29 02:59:57 EST (#)
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Do you two live together?
Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-11-29 02:52:28 EST (#)
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Goddamn it, Haiku, if you wanna -2 this so that you can negate the rating that i totally falsly gave myself, go ahead, i won't object.
also, I'm still glad that your 1000th review was my post.
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2007-11-29 02:50:55 EST (#)
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Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-11-28 18:24:29 PST (#)
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WHOA THIS REVIEW IS MY ONE THOUSANDTH REVIEW
HOW AWESOME IS THAT??
TOTALLY AWESOME!!!!
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Submitted by lungfish (user info) at 2007-11-28 23:52:37 EST (#)
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Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:10:43 EST (#)
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and then boris felt compelled to to eat a nutrigrain bar.
Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-11-28 21:24:29 EST (#)
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WHOA THIS REVIEW IS MY ONE THOUSANDTH REVIEW
HOW AWESOME IS THAT??
TOTALLY AWESOME!!!!
Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2007-11-28 21:23:14 EST (#)
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Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2007-11-28 18:35:31 EST (#)
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haha
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2007-11-28 18:31:43 EST (#)
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Submitted by Lib (user info) at 2007-11-28 18:30:50 EST (#)
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Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2007-11-28 17:57:36 EST (#)
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Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2007-11-28 13:50:56 PST (#)
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Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:47:12 EST (#)
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I don't think I know that walk.
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it's very delicate, one misstep and the whole thing turns into a jiggling mess.
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I know about that walk, one day my Sister informed me that when boobies are jiggling, it's probably on purpose.
"I winced, by now she must have known I didn't care for that nickname"
I can't remember if I've used a line almost exactly like this, or if you have.
Muahaha, I'm subliminally influencing your writing!
Better put a stop to that quickly, if you don't want your ratings to drop tremendously.
If I have to explain to some random internet reviewer later on that I'm being nonsensical right now, I'm going to be annoyed.
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2007-11-28 17:13:36 EST (#)
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GODAMMIT STOP MAKING FUN OF MY MOM
Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:50:56 EST (#)
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Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:47:12 EST (#)
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I don't think I know that walk.
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it's very delicate, one misstep and the whole thing turns into a jiggling mess.
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:47:12 EST (#)
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I don't think I know that walk.
Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:46:39 EST (#)
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Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:40:51 EST (#)
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Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:37:04 EST (#)
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Toe, I totally thought you were a dude
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:(
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Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:40:51 EST (#)
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Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:37:04 EST (#)
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Toe, I totally thought you were a dude
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:(
Submitted by sir_cowman (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:37:04 EST (#)
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Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:12:47 EST (#)
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I can walk in such a way that my boobs bounce. I reserve this walk for very special occasions.
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Toe, I totally thought you were a dude.
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:34:58 EST (#)
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Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:34:47 EST (#)
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Submitted by firefly (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:28:06 EST (#)
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Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:12:47 EST (#)
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I can walk in such a way that my boobs bounce. I reserve this walk for very special occasions.
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:10:43 EST (#)
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and then boris felt compelled to to eat a nutrigrain bar.
Submitted by corn_nugget (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:09:40 EST (#)
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I like how you write.
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2007-11-28 16:03:29 EST (#)
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Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2007-11-28 15:48:59 EST (#)
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