Mistress Tales: Platonic No Longer (817 hits)
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Submitted by Paralyzed By Hope (View user info) at 2007-12-17 08:53:57 EST
When she rolls over and opens her eyes, she's momentarily lost. The bed is not hers. This room does not belong to her. She lifts her eyes to the window and gazes out at the ocean. The sound of the shower filters through the slightly open bathroom door. With a long yawn, she stretches out her naked body, the sheets smooth against her skin. A small smile plays at the corner of her lips.
In her mind, she is dancing on your grave.
When he walked through her office door, holding flowers, he proclaimed you were gone. That you were over. He had made his choice. And it was her. It would always be her. For a moment, she felt guilty. You didn't deserve this. You were a nice person. With feelings. But any regret quickly faded, replaced with a smile as he bent down to kiss her. Under her desk, she pinched her wrist, just in case it was all a dream.
Last night as he held her sweat-glistened body close to his chest, she felt the ache deep inside her. The burn she knew all too well. Distance and time had not faded it. They cocooned themselves in comfort and desire. Her body opened to him as if it were finally returning home.
A buzzing catches her attention. His phone, turned to vibrate, lays on the night stand, its red light flashing rapidly. She glances at the screen and bolts up as she sees your name careen across the highlighted screen. Listening closely to him in the shower, she reaches out a shaky hand and grips the phone. Her fingers curl around the hard plastic as she tremblingly pulls it towards her. With a heavy breath, she flips it open, hoping to see your desperate attempts at winning him back.
Pressure builds behind her eyes as she reads text after text. With each push of a button, it becomes clear you are not gone. There is no talk of breaking up or lost opportunities or dashed hopes. Instead she reads that you believe him to be at a conference. Sent away by his work, counting the days until he's back on the plane and in your arms once more. She can't help but push more buttons. She closes her eyes when she sees his call to you at 2 in the morning. She vaguely remembers him crawling out of bed and her shivering as cool air slipped beneath the sheets and rolled over her skin. The only other memory she has is the feel of him wrapping his arms around her and falling asleep with his nose against her ear and his leg thrown over her body.
The shower stops and she snaps the phone shut, placing it back on the night stand. Her stomach drops as he appears in the doorway. Droplets of water fall from his hair and run down his bare chest. He crawls across the bed and hovers over her. Desire burns in her chest. She can feel him hard against her thigh. He lingers his lips on her neck, trailing a wet trail of kisses down to the pale flesh of the breast peeking out beneath the sheet. A moan escapes from her lips as he runs his hand up her leg and across her hip bone. He leans in, kissing her ferociously. From its perch on the night stand, the phone vibrates, causing her to stiffen against his touch. She pulls back, loosening his grip on her arm. As she climbs from the bed, he rises up and encircles her waist with his arms.
She laughs sadly, telling him she's taking a quick shower. He leans back to the bed, his eyes flickering over the length of her body. He'll be waiting for her.
As her heart hits her stomach, she cocks her head over her shoulder, calmly telling him he missed a text.
Doubt rushes across his face as he gives a worried glance to his phone. Locking the bathroom door behind her, she hears him open his phone and the tinny sound of him scrolling through his messages. She turns on the water to block out the sound of him knocking at the bathroom door and calling her name.
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User Reviews
Submitted by DasHeer (user info) at 2008-01-24 02:20:45 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2007-12-19 05:41:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Jesus though, seriously, I have only ever known 1 dude who ever let his life get this complicated and he is a complete muppett.
Real people don't do this. I mean marriages and relationships can come crashing down in big dramas but that never happens in this way. People get sick of one another and break up but people generally move much more slowly than this crazy shitstorm you've painted here.
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PLEASE tell me you got the "shitstorm" from mr.Lahey of trailer park boys
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2007-12-19 19:43:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I think you are pretty awesome.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2007-12-19 05:41:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Jesus though, seriously, I have only ever known 1 dude who ever let his life get this complicated and he is a complete muppett.
Real people don't do this. I mean marriages and relationships can come crashing down in big dramas but that never happens in this way. People get sick of one another and break up but people generally move much more slowly than this crazy shitstorm you've painted here.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2007-12-19 05:00:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This is a nice, concise bit of fiction.
Of course we all know that in real life this sort of bust up is pre-dated by a lot more lying and terrible planning. Or manipulation. Or all of the above.
Submitted by ConorJS (user info) at 2007-12-18 12:04:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
God's second mistake...
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2007-12-18 11:50:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2007-12-18 05:48:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Lovely, and im talking about Circe.
Smooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooth.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2007-12-18 05:36:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ignore Dangerpants. Anyone having trouble with the perspective probably can't read the longer words anyway. It's very clear, and nicely done.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-12-18 01:45:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
No Comment
Submitted by sideshow (user info) at 2007-12-17 17:48:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Great series!
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-12-17 16:44:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-12-17 16:44:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Paralyzed_By_Hope (user info) at 2007-12-17 15:50:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2007-12-17 15:36:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
you didn't tell them about my pubes did you?
Of all the responses, this one confused me the most.
DangerPants: I'll work on the confusion. I figured knowing you, your, yours are the only references to the girlfriend, would be able to help. But I'll figure something out.
Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2007-12-17 15:36:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
you didn't tell them about my pubes did you?
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2007-12-17 15:34:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Why's that, CookiePants? Going to invent an imaginary platonic mistress for your imaginary boy hero?
Submitted by DangerPants (user info) at 2007-12-17 15:21:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
The only thing that stops me from really being able to love this series is how hard it is to keep the action straight in my head. You shift perspective alot, which is something that you can't do when the only names the characters have are You, Her, and Him. I keep having to stop and re-read paragraphs because it's hard to tell what's happening to which girl, and who's feeling what.
Just a detail, really, but an important one I think.
Submitted by Creepy_guy (user info) at 2007-12-17 15:01:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I love this little series
Submitted by EkO (user info) at 2007-12-17 11:37:27 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
nope. i didn't care for this.
Submitted by triangle_man (user info) at 2007-12-17 11:28:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
wait til he finds out he has herpes...
Submitted by cuberat (user info) at 2007-12-17 11:25:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2007-12-17 10:57:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
fucking hell. that's very well done
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2007-12-17 10:55:45 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
yeah... cheaters rarely change their ways.
Submitted by corn_nugget (user info) at 2007-12-17 10:49:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2007-12-17 10:30:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
frankly that's what she get's for dating a cheater and that's what he gets for trying to keep a harem. i think it's ultimately all on her though.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-12-17 09:30:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
All I know is that women love it when you shit in your hands and then wipe it in their hair. I've had nothing but positive response.
Submitted by c1ndy (user info) at 2007-12-17 09:05:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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