snuffed out (685 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryLabels: poetry
Rating: -0.46 on 16 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by spacemonkey (View user info) at 2008-01-22 01:44:37 EST
the candle extinguished its flame
burnt out from a lack of wax
a smoky trail still waifing
from the blackened tongue that
once spoke with fiery passion
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Submitted by BeforeEmily (user info) at 2008-01-23 11:37:45 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by shadow (user info) at 2008-01-22 14:12:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
this is utter smegma by itself, but if it were an observation made by a character in a story, or an intro, or a bit of prose inside a larger piece, well then it'd be very lovely to read.
As is though, it's just incomplete and useless.
Submitted by SkullBiter (user info) at 2008-01-22 13:37:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
cool
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-01-22 11:09:20 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
This is "deeper" than my asshole.
Too much deep.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-01-22 11:00:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
congratulations?
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2008-01-22 10:53:49 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
i disagree scourge
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-01-22 10:34:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
i assume you meant 'wafting'...but whatever. this wasn't so bad.
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-01-22 08:39:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by MyNameIsTim (user info) at 2008-01-22 06:58:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
i quit dip.
Submitted by MudWhistle (user info) at 2008-01-22 06:57:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I watched a snail crawl
along the edge of a straight razor
That's my dream
That's my nightmare
Crawling, slithering,
along the edge of a straight...
razor...
and surviving
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2008-01-22 06:55:30 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
A 'waif' is a child. So 'waifing' is...?
Needs more wax.
Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2008-01-22 06:40:29 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I heard a fly buzz
when i died.
Submitted by rorrim (user info) at 2008-01-22 06:23:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Grimm (user info) at 2008-01-22 05:30:15 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by bob (user info) at 2008-01-22 02:15:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
wtf?
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2008-01-22 02:06:19 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
This was super gay.