I Am The Storm (841 hits)
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Submitted by kaos-king (antius777) (View user info) at 2008-02-16 10:38:25 EST
Recently I join a group on writing.com and they had their 1st contest. Taking entries of either fiction or poetry, they gave out the prompt of "Pirates." Mutha Fuckin' Pirates! All right, I think I can stumble my way through something for this...
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I smile as these dark winds blow
The cannon roars behind me, and
We know the joy of battle today again.
These sails billow in defiance much like
The kind that rages inside our bones.
Watch them scurry about their deck
Pompous and dazzled rats,
They see our blades at ready.
Steady, in this wind that howls and
I smile, for I am the storm...
I smile as these dark winds blow
Those spoils of our conquest rest
So close before us, a shipwreck waiting.
Not the gold that attracts my hands
As much as the plundering itself.
The violation of another's, domination:
It sets my soul ablaze with life.
So as we draw near our goal here
Waters will cast red for my need and
I smile, for I am the storm...
I smile as these dark winds blow
Prepared to honor the men who fell,
Their graves the very depths we now sail.
A blood that spilled freely before
Marking this ship whole, blessing it strong
Staining it the color of waged war.
Ghosts, standing beside us in attention
An armada in our legacy looking back
And with a past as rich as I am and
I smile, for I am the storm...
I smile as these dark winds blow
And I ask the waves to wash me more.
May dry dirt never curse my sight
Les' those upon it feel my hate.
I will walk this swaying wood eternally:
In days, in dreams, in death beyond.
The open heavens above me cast
Their brilliant stars down upon me
So that my wickedness may shine and
I smile, for I am the storm...
User Reviews
Submitted by BubbaEarl (user info) at 2008-02-18 13:26:06 EST (#)
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not that we'd be seeing much of the beach.
Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2008-02-18 13:19:48 EST (#)
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What BubbaEarl said, minus the name-calling. (I love you BubbaEarl, let's elope to Myrtle Beach).
This site has not and will not change. You're only going to run into the same problems you had with it before, except probably worse this time because of all the shit you tried to start before you "left" last time.
You're a good writer but you aren't going to receive the accolades you are after by posting on Ubersite. You just aren't.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2008-02-18 13:19:21 EST (#)
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Submitted by MudWhistle (user info) at 2008-02-18 13:06:03 EST (#)
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OMG KAOS LOOK MY DASTARDLY PLAN OF PICKING ON YOU UNTIL PEOPLE SEE HOW COOL I AM HAS WORKED!!!!
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MudPickle is, like, so cool.
Submitted by BubbaEarl (user info) at 2008-02-18 13:17:15 EST (#)
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should i take your cock out my mouth now?
Submitted by MudWhistle (user info) at 2008-02-18 13:06:03 EST (#)
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OMG KAOS LOOK MY DASTARDLY PLAN OF PICKING ON YOU UNTIL PEOPLE SEE HOW COOL I AM HAS WORKED!!!!
Submitted by BubbaEarl (user info) at 2008-02-18 12:58:31 EST (#)
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i don't think you're an asshole. you tell it like it is.
this douche needs to fuck off to readersdigest.com. what the fuck do you keep coming back here for, kaos-drama-queen. uber is what uber is.
Submitted by MudWhistle (user info) at 2008-02-18 12:43:07 EST (#)
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Submitted by BubbaEarl (user info) at 2008-02-18 12:36:09 EST (#)
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time to up the meds huh
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hahahahahah....no seriously dude....kaos is just fine...its me...I'm the asshole here
Submitted by BubbaEarl (user info) at 2008-02-18 12:36:09 EST (#)
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time to up the meds huh
Submitted by MudWhistle (user info) at 2008-02-18 12:05:10 EST (#)
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i know you are but what am I?
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-02-18 11:55:21 EST (#)
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Of course... as long as your ass is entertained then that's all that matters, right?
Jesus bloody Christ, you're a fucking leech...
Submitted by MudWhistle (user info) at 2008-02-18 11:48:23 EST (#)
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ya know...you suck one little dick in life....
anyway...please keep going I find you highly entertaining
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-02-18 11:40:30 EST (#)
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Muddy, pull that cock out of your mouth and do something other than be a fucking rodent.
That's all you are on this site - some species of vermin.
Back when you were BAMF you actually posted things of merit. What the fuck happened?
You know what, I don't care. You obviously think you're "King Of Uber" now...
... what a glorious fucking title.
Submitted by MudWhistle (user info) at 2008-02-18 11:33:23 EST (#)
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Kaos-King, The Anti Drama
wow son....you reach new levels all the time....what did it take 3 post this time for you to flip your wig?
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-02-18 11:28:09 EST (#)
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Trolls abound...
And certain individuals wonder why I think this place has turned to absolute shit.
Why don't some of you e-thuggin' little cunts actually post something? No, no... something of VALUE!
Oh, that's right - Most of you are too busy trying desperately to forget you're nothing but petty cubicle jockeys.
I have no problem taking abuse from the likes of Caul, Method, Shlongy or Hidden: at least THEY are 100% assholes.
Most of the rest of you are fucking pathetic. Now beat your dicks to a hard-on showing me how cool and tough you are behind your keyboards. Because, of course, we wouldn't want you to get your docker khakis dirty in the real world. Go home to your fat ass wives, your 2.5 brats and your suave ranch-style houses. Go home and realize that your lives are a fucking joke.
Go... and let Muddy lead the way.
Submitted by loopdeloo (user info) at 2008-02-18 11:21:45 EST (#)
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Pirates = auto +2
Submitted by MudWhistle (user info) at 2008-02-18 07:40:13 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
at least you haven't given up your flare for the dramatics.
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2008-02-18 00:45:37 EST (#)
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for resorting to: I'm published!, on a site like this.
Submitted by iddqd (user info) at 2008-02-17 21:32:20 EST (#)
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cue me?
what do you mean?
i wish you the best of luck in your writing, and i really, really hope you get published. anything i may have said before was strictly about the reality of self-publishing, and the unfair nature of the cosmos, and in no way intended as an insult.
if you like im sure i can come up with some insults in a pinch.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-02-17 17:53:36 EST (#)
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i am the walrus
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-02-17 14:07:30 EST (#)
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geek
Submitted by HotWillie (user info) at 2008-02-17 11:14:28 EST (#)
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writing.com?
dude you can be a loser here for free.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-02-17 10:46:38 EST (#)
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I couldn't give any less of a shit about poetry or an online writing contest.
What's first prize, a season pass to MySpace.com?
Submitted by Linus (user info) at 2008-02-17 09:04:17 EST (#)
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OH LOL
I shoudda known better than to post so late. I assumed the alter thing; everyone here calls me an alter. Your review was laughs.
Submitted by BubbaEarl (user info) at 2008-02-17 07:28:12 EST (#)
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2. I believe there are quite a number of user sick of this site and I simply want them to know there are other places out there.
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hahahahahahahahahaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa i'm sure most users here know how to find what they want on the net... Google. asslick.
you're still an obnoxious, fat fucking goth. go back to writing.com you sensitive, crybaby bitch.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-02-17 06:34:40 EST (#)
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Submitted by Linus (user info) at 2008-02-17 03:45:49 EST (#)
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Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-02-16 19:30:08 EST (#)
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Awww... look at that! A -2 from both a bitchass alter and a idiot n00b. How cute...
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First, I'm not an alter and I'm tired of people accuse me of this all the fucking time.
Second, this deserved a -2 for your plug. You've been plugging this site since your return and it, no doubt, gives you a feeling of importance. Does it somehow validate you to be on a site called writing.com? Plug some work that's been recently published in that medium known as print.
Last, you're a fat faggot and shit all over yourself with the plug because I normally +2 poetry (it gets a lot of flak around here.)
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1. Actually, you stupid cunt, you were the "idiot n00b" I was making reference to. Woolfe was the alter.
2. I believe there are quite a number of user sick of this site and I simply want them to know there are other places out there. I'm sorry that something like that frightens you so. I'll make sure to put a "HEY LINUS + writing.com" link on every post from now on. Oh, and I'm about to send my 2nd (second) book to the publisher. <--- cue IDDQD.
3. Well, this "fat faggot" was fucking your mom in the ass last night and she squealed like a little bitch. I videotaped the whole thing, so I'll make sure to send you the link when I put in on the intarwebz...
Submitted by Linus (user info) at 2008-02-17 03:45:49 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-02-16 19:30:08 EST (#)
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Awww... look at that! A -2 from both a bitchass alter and a idiot n00b. How cute...
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First, I'm not an alter and I'm tired of people accuse me of this all the fucking time.
Second, this deserved a -2 for your plug. You've been plugging this site since your return and it, no doubt, gives you a feeling of importance. Does it somehow validate you to be on a site called writing.com? Plug some work that's been recently published in that medium known as print.
Last, you're a fat faggot and shit all over yourself with the plug because I normally +2 poetry (it gets a lot of flak around here.)
Submitted by Cakes (user info) at 2008-02-17 03:23:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Yes. Hell yes. You took something trite and made it personal. If this poem hasn't been submitted to that other site, only one suggested change:
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Not the gold that attracts my hands
As much as the plundering itself.
Instead:
Not the gold that rules my hands
As much as the clash of silver blades,
Basically same but throwing in skewed irony, as silver and gold are both precious, but he lusts for more, since he has both already.
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I dig it, especially considering how astonishingly hackneyed the subject. Very well done. (Mr. Cakes, we're two.)
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-02-16 19:30:08 EST (#)
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Awww... look at that! A -2 from both a bitchass alter and a idiot n00b. How cute...
Submitted by Linus (user info) at 2008-02-16 18:35:59 EST (#)
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Go plug writing.com somewhere else.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-16 17:19:51 EST (#)
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etc.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-16 17:19:27 EST (#)
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lacking in vision.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-16 17:19:06 EST (#)
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without scope
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-16 17:18:55 EST (#)
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bland
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-16 17:18:36 EST (#)
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i think it's generic
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2008-02-16 17:16:11 EST (#)
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i think pirates is a good prompt.
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2008-02-16 16:46:14 EST (#)
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I am the Earth.
Let's rock.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-02-16 16:41:05 EST (#)
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Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-02-16 14:08:49 CST (#)
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Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-02-16 15:02:19 EST (#)
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Recently I join a group on writing.com and they had their 1st contest.
okay, electro
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Check this out:
http://www.ubersite.com/m/78555#1681164
bubba, do you really think I didn't know that?
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2008-02-16 15:17:48 EST (#)
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NO COMMENT, MR. 'I'VE SEEN BETTER'.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-02-16 15:08:49 EST (#)
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Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-02-16 15:02:19 EST (#)
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Recently I join a group on writing.com and they had their 1st contest.
okay, electro
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Check this out:
http://www.ubersite.com/m/78555#1681164
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-02-16 15:02:19 EST (#)
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Recently I join a group on writing.com and they had their 1st contest.
okay, electro
Submitted by mordor666 (user info) at 2008-02-16 13:58:52 EST (#)
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Arr, matey. And that was a totally heterosexual comment.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-02-16 13:48:35 EST (#)
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*Thanks, even.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-02-16 13:41:18 EST (#)
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Yeah, thalks for dropping my opponent a big fat, juicy +2!
I love peotry, I thought this had lovely flow. Uber doesn't like poetry much though :(
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-02-16 13:15:41 EST (#)
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There's an entire page of rotating contests on the site.
This is just one contest for a group that I joined.
Every conceivable genre has at least one contest running on the site.
Hell, I'm running a "Mythic Horror" one.
Here... http://www.writing.com
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-02-16 13:05:38 EST (#)
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so the best prompt this serious writers forum could come up with was 'pirates'?
is this a site populated by 13 year olds? is the next contest going to be about ninjas, or maybe sneaking beers form dad's stock out in the garage?
either way, i liked this.
Submitted by woolfe (user info) at 2008-02-16 12:48:16 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2008-02-16 12:26:56 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-02-16 12:03:15 EST (#)
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Poetry doesn't need to rhyme, as long as it creates imagery not found in prose.
This did.
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That's just something your English teacher told you so that you wouldn't feel retarded.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-02-16 12:03:15 EST (#)
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Poetry doesn't need to rhyme, as long as it creates imagery not found in prose.
This did.
Submitted by Wompom (user info) at 2008-02-16 11:50:37 EST (#)
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Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2008-02-16 10:49:51 EST (#)
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poem that didn't rhyme.
auto -2
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-02-16 11:15:43 EST (#)
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+2 PIRATES
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-02-16 10:51:58 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2008-02-16 10:49:51 EST (#)
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poem that didn't rhyme.
auto -2
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-02-16 10:44:44 EST (#)
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The site is set up totally different that this, heavily moderated and you have to pay to be a member.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2008-02-16 10:39:18 EST (#)
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You shouldn't have given us the link. You know how these morons are.