Confinement Of His Own Creation (694 hits)
Category: RomanceRating: 1.45 on 26 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Hourman (View user info) at 2008-03-03 09:46:51 EST
The key sat easily in the lock, and he looked up to the light shining out of the window, the glare of the TV flickering against the glass. He let out a sigh and turned the key, stepping in to the cold hallway, a dishevelled pile of shoes sat miserably at the bottom of the stairs. He'd already torn the lino up last week, the parasite that lived with him had ripped it, probably in the early hours as she fell in through the door.
The banister felt cold, and running his hands up it he slowly trudged up the stairs. It was too late to go out, and too early to sleep. He knew that she'd end up sitting with him, making his only few hours of rest seem more like torture.
The spare room, that now resembled a student dig, clothes scattered on the floor, and the smell of mould from a room with not enough circulation, this was meant to be his own private space. Felt more like a private hell.
The maisonette was his pretty much, but the transfer deeds hadn't come through, and she still acted as if she had a right to anything. Sticking his head round the door, he could see the repugnant visage of his ex-fiancé sitting there on his sofa, watching his TV, her feet on his coffee table. None of it was hers, but he didn't feel like any of it was his.
Her phone jingled, no doubt another text from someone she was never fucking whilst they were together. Anxiety kicked in and he felt the bile rise in his stomach, and his tongue swell in his mouth. Once he had loved her, but then she had broken him time and time again. He was like a rock weathered by a constant storm, no way of moving and no way of even protecting himself. The constant tortuous barrage of hate that her venom filled mouth spewed on him.
"You're back early" She hadn't even moved. No doubt he wasn't worth the turning of the head.
"Yeah," He wanted to scream and jump on her, literally beat her till she stopped moving, end her life without a single care "too tired to go anywhere, thought I'd try and relax at home..."
"What's that supposed to mean?!" Her head whipped round, her sunken eyes stabbed at him, he felt the attrition already.
"Nothing. Can I watch TV?" He asked, pretty much expecting her to say no.
"No. I've already started watching something." The anger swelled in him even more.
"You do realise that it's my TV, my sofa and pretty much my everything? Not only that, but you have a TV in your room! I have fuck all in mine!"
She smirked and sunk into the couch even more "It's my house too you know? You can't tell me what to do."
"I was asking, not telling. I thought you might be pleasant. Can I get that money for the bills off you too?"
He had paid all the bills yesterday, and she'd promised to give him the money.
"My moneys all tied up, I'll pay you when I leave." She said it like he was stupid for even asking.
"Well my money's tied up... and you said you'd... you know what, never mind. Just pay per week you're here? So for this week it would be £18... wow that seems like a pretty good rent for you!"
She laughed "You're kidding right? I'll pay you when I leave."
How is this even fair? He couldn't comprehend the sheer lack of decency; this girl had nothing but hate and malice within her. She knew that he couldn't afford all the bills for the month, plus the mortgage on his own, along with repairing all the stuff she'd fucked up.
"How do I know you'll pay me? I think this is really unfair of y-"
"- Don't tell me what's unfair! You're the one who broke up with me remember?! I'm the one leaving so you can fuck off for all I care!"
The brain works in a marvellous way, allowing the aggressor to be the victim at will, simply so they feel less guilty and more humane. He classed inhumane, on a day today basis, as someone who purposefully goes out of their way to make someone's life less pleasurable. To take away the little pleasures they may have.
"You realise you were the one who had the affair? You disappeared off to fuck someone else, whilst coming home and kissing me with your whore lips. I put up with all your shit, and I did everything. I changed who I was and lost all my friends for you. Yet still, because I wouldn't let you get away with you not keeping your legs shut, I'm to blame? You need to grow the fuck up. The world doesn't owe you anything, and one day when you do have to take responsibility for something, it's going to be a real big shock."
"Fuck you! Talk to me like an adult! You were the one who didn't have the guts to tell me you were unhappy! You were the one who wasn't man enough to fulfil my womanly needs! I never wanted us to end! Anyway, you get the house soon enough, so why don't you fuck off?"
"No I didn't tell you I was unhappy, because when I did, you got all suicidal. You threatened all sorts of shit, and I stuck by you! Yeah I fucked up a few times, but I never kissed or fucked anyone else. Ever. If you didn't want us to end, you shouldn't have let someone else fuck you, and you shouldn't have treated me like shit. Oh and just so you know, I don't find you attractive, I don't mind a bit of weight, but you've gone up ten dress sizes since I started going out with you! I'm sure that's my fault too! Don't tell me I wasn't supportive, I offered you all the help and love I could! You're a fucking parasite."
He could feel the anger swell in him, as he picked up the glass on the table and plunged it deep into her neck, her gargled screams fading as he shredded her throat, blood spraying all over the room. He bathed in her crimson glory, and let out a primordial howl, relishing in his invaders conquest.
He looked at her, then the glass again, she wasn't worth it. He had to believe that somewhere in there was a good person... he had to believe that.
"Whatever, you'll never know what you've done to me." She glared at him, and as he walked back down the stairs of his house, he could hear her cackling on the phone. Her victory speech in full swing.
Lighting up a cigarette, the moon bathed him in light, as if to wash him of his anger. He sat on the bench outside his house and inhaled deeply. He thanked his lucky stars that this was his biggest problem, he thanked his lucky stars he was able to resist the temptation of ending all his problems with one quick swoop. He thanked his lucky stars there was good in him, and he was so happy that whatever happened he knew he was trying to be a fair about all of it as possible.
"Fuck it, shit happens" he thought as he flicked the cigarette into the bush, the moonlight chasing his heels as he walked back to the confinement of his own creation.
User Reviews
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2008-03-19 10:36:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Tingle jingle.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2008-03-04 10:58:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I thought I'd already reviewed this. It's good.
Submitted by X54 (user info) at 2008-03-03 23:48:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Falafel (user info) at 2008-03-03 19:38:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
He could feel the anger swell in him, as he picked up the glass on the table and plunged it deep into her neck, her gargled screams fading as he shredded her throat, blood spraying all over the room. He bathed in her crimson glory, and let out a primordial howl, relishing in his invaders conquest.
He looked at her, then the glass again, she wasn't worth it. He had to believe that somewhere in there was a good person... he had to believe that
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+2 for properly incorporating imagination into text then back to reality.
-2 for giving into suicide threats and not calling her bluff
+2 because you broke it off.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-03-03 19:34:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
BITCH!
You know, if you need ways to drive her out/make her life hell, etc, you know you're in the right place..
Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2008-03-03 18:34:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2008-03-03 10:11:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Actually, for those interested, this is pretty much autobiographical.
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Maybe you can't kick her out, but you can make your place shitty to live in.
Take every door in the place off the hinges, see how she likes zero privacy.
Got any of the utilities in your name? Shut them off. Live in a hotel for a few days. If the power is in her name, you can just flip the main breaker and remove it from the box.
Is she allergic to any animals? If so, go to the nearest pet grooming place and buy a bag of hair to spread around.
Know anybody with herpes? Give them her toothbrush.
Take naked pics of her sleeping and post them on uber. Or post her phone number on BAMF.com.
Fuck bitches, get money.
Submitted by Lib (user info) at 2008-03-03 14:58:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-03-03 13:40:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2008-03-03 13:38:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
fuck her when she's asleep
that'll fulfill her "womanly needs"
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2008-03-03 13:28:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by HotWillie (user info) at 2008-03-03 13:27:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
what an interesting glimpse into your life
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2008-03-03 13:20:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
been there done that. four fucking months of not feeling welcome/comfortable in my own home. fuuuuuck that. they're right by the way. passivly aggressivly doing little things that you know will bother her can soothe the irritation.
Submitted by ilikesteak (user info) at 2008-03-03 13:01:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-03-03 12:52:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by LittleMonster (user info) at 2008-03-03 11:03:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
F.J.Bell just rocked my world. He is right. Revenge dear heart, revenge!
Didn't realise this was true story. Bloody sucks lovey. Listen to the Bell.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-03-03 10:38:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Untill the change of equity forms come through etc, I can't do shit.
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Don't be so defeatist - you can do plenty:
1. Leave the toilet seat up all the time;
2. Hide the remote control before you go out in the morning;
3. Arrange for you both to go on Jeremy Kyle to sort out your differences;
4. Wank in the shower just before you know she's going in and don't hose it down the drain, so she stands on it;
5. Wank into her shampoo bottle/pillow/medication/jacket pocket;
6. Fart loudly and unapologetically as close to her face as possible.
You said that you changed for her - don't EVER do that man. Now, strap on a pair and if she's making your like miserable, fucking get even.
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2008-03-03 10:27:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Untill the change of equity forms come through etc, I can't do shit.
Oh well, it's a big lesson learnt.
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2008-03-03 10:26:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Appreciate the comments none the less.
I think the ending was hard, because the situation is still unresolved... e.g. I still live with her.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-03-03 10:26:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Well that sucks, the situation i mean. Kick her out. No point being uncomfortable in your own home. Then find a nice attractive roomie.
Submitted by LittleMonster (user info) at 2008-03-03 10:14:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Good, but not your best darling.
Things that bother me about it, but I'm awful at trying to explain things like that.
I liked the way it read though, maybe it was the ending, I'm not sure. Loved the begining.
Nurrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2008-03-03 10:14:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
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Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-03-03 10:12:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
That sucks, but a good yarn nonetheless.
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2008-03-03 10:11:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Actually, for those interested, this is pretty much autobiographical.
Submitted by Ltap (user info) at 2008-03-03 10:04:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Pretty kickass story.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-03-03 09:56:12 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Average at best.
-1 because, like it says, 'I've seen better.'
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-03-03 09:54:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
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