curse of the phantom love (276 hits)
Category: NoneRating: -0.72 on 10 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by cerpin_taxt (View user info) at 2008-03-05 20:46:46 EST
winds blow and days pass
my love nowhere to be seen
come out of hiding!
constant thoughts of thee
making her way gracefully
returning to me
crying out for help
in every last direction
and finding nothing
not my love you see
for she has disappeared so
and taken my soul
watching the trees sway
remembering feeling whole
oh, to hold my love again
that is all I ask
trapped inside a box
nothing but nameless faces
dear love come to me
come to me so quick
and out of the bright blue sky
wash in with the tide
her stone steady eyes
from a thousand miles away
linked in tight with mine
this is my downfall
the curse of the phantom love
happiness awaits.
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Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2008-03-06 18:28:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
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Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2008-03-06 18:28:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by BeforeEmily (user info) at 2008-03-06 15:08:09 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-03-06 14:41:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You know what - I'm giving you a +2 ONLY because you keep posting even though you are getting FLAMED. I wouldn't go so far as to say your poetry sucks - but it ain't great.
Submitted by lostnphound (user info) at 2008-03-06 09:59:22 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
No Comment
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-03-06 06:44:49 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Poetry -2.
Submitted by theshadypeach (user info) at 2008-03-05 21:06:59 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2008-03-05 20:53:50 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
See? I'm a fuck-tard and I can write something that rhymes. Please just one time, write me a rhyming poem. I promise, if you can write just one that rhymes, I'll stop -2'ing your poems.
Dumbest criteria for rating poetry ever. That said, I didn't like the poem. And the title? Are you serious?
However your other stuff is better.
Submitted by Linus (user info) at 2008-03-05 20:58:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2008-03-05 20:53:50 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
This didn't rhyme
You do this all the time
Over and over I say
"Poems that don't rhyme are gay"
Well, gayer than most;
but not as gay as this post
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See? I'm a fuck-tard and I can write something that rhymes. Please just one time, write me a rhyming poem. I promise, if you can write just one that rhymes, I'll stop -2'ing your poems.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-03-05 20:48:05 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
words...words...words...
This blew.