rhyming is waaay overrated (392 hits)
Category: NoneRating: -0.09 on 13 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by cerpin_taxt (View user info) at 2008-03-07 13:58:53 EST
Across skies of chalk white clouds
I stumble upon your eyes, and find despair
Reaching out for time to mosey by
Your wounds are those which my love will repair
Tracking mud through your thoughts
An open mouth, a blank stare
Keeping secrets irritates
I hesitate when you are near
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Tremble tremble tremble
Called my wrist to the page
The pen is under pressure
The ink cannot be saved
The picture often pretty
Message all but scathed
Author always pleasant
Locked within their cave
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Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2008-03-08 18:48:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This should put you back in the positive.
Submitted by cerpin_taxt (user info) at 2008-03-07 20:39:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
they were one piece but i decided that it didn't make sense, they don't have any connection other than the fact that they were written while taking the same dump.
Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2008-03-07 17:15:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
FINALLY!!
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-03-07 17:01:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-03-07 14:18:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i like the word 'mosey'
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That was my least favorite part
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-03-07 15:19:54 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
This post is under-rated...it should be rated a lot worse than where it stands now.
Submitted by Ltap (user info) at 2008-03-07 15:09:54 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
You suck.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2008-03-07 14:29:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Tenacity.
Is not for me.
But I can see
That you will be
(Inexplicably)
Stubborn.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-03-07 14:18:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i like the word 'mosey'
Submitted by SkullBiter (user info) at 2008-03-07 14:11:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I like the second one.
Submitted by HotWillie (user info) at 2008-03-07 14:08:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
+2BUBBA
this sucked ass
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-03-07 14:06:17 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2008-03-07 14:03:48 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by BeforeEmily (user info) at 2008-03-07 14:00:51 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Do you ever stop?