time on the meter. (475 hits)
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Submitted by Danger_Ranger (View user info) at 2008-04-07 08:56:43 EDT
He sat and watched the blue turn to green, then slowly grey, listening to the crackle of the guards' radio.
They had been there in the carpark for the last hour, behind him - out of sight, and Angus had watched them with the hairs that prickled on his neck.
He turned the can on its end, the 'plunk' of the widget louder than the the incoming tide against the wreck, and he turned it again.
'Plunk.'
Frannie licked ketchup from her fingers and placed the styrofoam tray on the dash.
She knew what the approaching detective would say, wound down the window and did her best to look inquisitive.
"Nothing. There's fucking nothing but sand. I say we pick him up and fucking beat it out of him."
Frannie smiled. She'd known Jane since they were at primary school, they went to high school together and then the academy, and Jane was as black and white right now as she was when she'd scolded Frannie back in the third grade, for questioning Santa. She knew her well enough to know the smile would rile her, and smirked at how she could push her buttons - and Jane hers. Like chalk and cheese, but with an intimate knowledge that made them somehow strangely similar.
"He's not about to lay down and just give in Jane, we may as well bring in that rock - we'd get just as much cooperation."
Jane threw open the door of the Skoda as Frannie went to open it.
"Well YOU go and find something in all that fucking sand then Frannie! Go and find something that makes MORE SENSE than bringing that fucking arsehole in and BEATING the living fucking SHIT out of him until he tells us!"
"Jane. He doesn't know. He's guilty as hell, but he doesn't know."
"fuck you" Jane muttered, turning her back and staring at the hills that rose out of the bay.
"He doesn't know 'yet'" Frannie continued. "Let's just wait and let things..work."
Jane watched the headlights as cars wound their way down along the narrow coastal road, flinched as her friend's hands touched her shoulders, relaxed, looked back at the cars and wondered where they were going.
"I'm okay" she muttered. "I'm just pissed off."
"I know Jane, I know."
Jane tilted her head as Frannie gently pulled her hair and fashioned a ponytail, tied a knot and watched it fall loose - playfully shoving her friend softly in the back.
She gave up an involuntary laugh, scowled at the betrayal and scowled again as she found herself instantly letting it slide, hiding her smile.
"Where do you think those cars are going Frannie?"
Frannie O'Conner rested her chin on her friend's shoulder, and whispered "Where are any of us going Janie girl? Where are any of us going..."
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Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-04-17 00:09:29 EDT (#)
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Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2008-04-08 08:36:06 CDT (#)
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Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-04-07 12:42:26 EDT (#)
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i've been meaning to mention this for some time.
attaching mp3's to writing is really, really, really, really gay.
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Still not as bad as perkman linking to youtube and, in the context of the story, telling us when to press play. """
yes but it's along the same lines old egg.
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2008-04-09 04:45:06 EDT (#)
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Bart should pick better quotes for his perma uberboard.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-04-08 20:14:02 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Danger_Ranger (user info) at 2008-04-07 09:28:26 EDT (#)
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fucking 'a corrine, you think corn comes in fucking nuggets?
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For this.
The post is really, really, really gay. Like soccer. And large headed English men. And Australian pedophiles who cum in the mouth of Hungry Hungry Hippos.
That type of gay.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2008-04-08 19:56:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
awww... Shiny armour is out today!! :-)
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-04-08 09:44:09 EDT (#)
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This guys is always posting
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2008-04-08 09:36:06 EDT (#)
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Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-04-07 12:42:26 EDT (#)
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i've been meaning to mention this for some time.
attaching mp3's to writing is really, really, really, really gay.
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Still not as bad as perkman linking to youtube and, in the context of the story, telling us when to press play.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:41:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Firetrucks are cool.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2008-04-07 13:18:34 EDT (#)
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hmmm.. not as good as some of your other stuff. But I'm glad you're writing again.
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2008-04-07 13:01:14 EDT (#)
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And a +2 for the poster...he's alright as well.
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2008-04-07 12:59:15 EDT (#)
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I like this story.
I also like the totally non-gay song.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-04-07 12:42:26 EDT (#)
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i've been meaning to mention this for some time.
attaching mp3's to writing is really, really, really, really gay.
FYI.
This was rubbish.
Unless you are doing an expose of American TV drama writing.
Submitted by Socialist_Joe (user info) at 2008-04-07 12:14:54 EDT (#)
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moracco
Submitted by corn_nugget (user info) at 2008-04-07 12:02:37 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-04-07 11:38:24 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by LittleMonster (user info) at 2008-04-07 11:31:20 EDT (#)
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I like these
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2008-04-07 11:18:52 EDT (#)
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It's all very homoerotic.
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-04-07 10:54:15 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by corn_nugget (user info) at 2008-04-07 09:30:24 EDT (#)
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Don't get mad at me just because I didn't know that hairs could see!!!!!
Submitted by MudWhistle (user info) at 2008-04-07 09:29:15 EDT (#)
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get a new shtick
Submitted by Danger_Ranger (user info) at 2008-04-07 09:28:26 EDT (#)
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fucking 'a corrine, you think corn comes in fucking nuggets?
Submitted by corn_nugget (user info) at 2008-04-07 09:25:51 EDT (#)
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He watched them with the hairs that prickled on his neck?
Submitted by Charlton_H (user info) at 2008-04-07 09:14:01 EDT (#)
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Your time is nigh, fucker!