Something Good.. (528 hits)
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Something good.
She stammered that sentence over and over in her mind. She looked down and bit her nails nervously in class. She couldn't control herself. She looked up at her teacher.
"Wow" she thought, he is fat. Not fat in the cute way but fat in the disgusting way. She smiled and thought about how much of an egg he looked. He was round like a ball with tiny little legs, bald head, and fat greasy arms.
The teacher grimaced as he looked over trying to teach the kid's algebra. His face was perturbed as he knew that none of them really gave a shit and he didn't either. The only ones he looked out for was Johnny Garrison, and Alison Walker. They're parents were on the PTA and had given the school lots of money.
They paid him $3,000 dollars that semester to make sure they passed so they could breeze through to Calculus 1 for college. He looked over the rest of the people in the class and felt a pang of shame.
He really did care and wanted to be a teacher. But society and life had broken this teacher down into a drone. A drone that only taught those whose parents gave a 'shit' the ones who gave a shit gave donations to his bank account.
She looked around the room again. She looked to the back of the room and glanced at the popular kids in the back row. There they were Jason Camptree, Fat Jimmy Cliff, and also the heartthrob John Anderson. She wondered about their lives for about an instant and the "kick" of the coke she snorted earlier hit her head like a rocket.
Her nose started to bleed and she quickly lifted her hand and covered it as the other girls in class giggled.
"Did they see?" she thought as her head went back towards Jimmy Cliff. They had been best friends in Elementary school all they way up until Jr. High. She was his first kiss and he was her first love.
He wasn't one of the pretty kids, or else even that good looking. He was just a cutie putootie as her mom used to say when they were kids. He was fat and stout, and was just funny. There mothers had been friends since childhood and they used to be forced to go on 'play dates' together. She recalls how he used to make her laugh by giving her "Truffle Shuffles", and doing Chris Farley impressions.
He turned on her though his freshman year. Jimmy Cliff was a soft kid. But he had 2 older brothers that used to pick on him pretty rough. It was only enviable that he would put away his toys and join the football team. He didn't like it at first but he got tired of being the fat loser kid.
He wanted to be cool and in the "in crowd" so he did it. He became the court Jester for the popular guys and he got invited to all the parties. Though he was treated ok in the group he never was fully accepted unless he was doing jokes, or teasing himself. He had to make the jokes first before they did to be accepted. He didn't mind it though he still remembered how it felt to be a loser. He swore he would never go back to that.
She looked around nervously as her mind raced more. She wanted a hot shot. She needed a hot shot. Last time she did heroin she went crazy and locked herself up in her closet with her dad's Glock nine in her hand screaming for the fairies to leave her alone.
Her druggie friends got scared and tried to open the door and she pulled the trigger and the bullet went right through the closet door and barely grazed her friend's hair. The girl didn't mind though. She was so drugged up on heroin that all they did after was laugh insanely at how mystical and unpredictable life could be.
Her mind wandered in and out of consciousness and her mind raced at a million thoughts a minute. She wanted to leave this fucking place. She hated it. Everyone was so god damn suburban she thought.
She hated the collared shirts; she hated all the kids that had known her since grade school. She wanted something good. What was good to her now was hot sex in the back of Skid's Harley out back by the local bar. Skid was a 25 year old drug dealer. He was one of those that wouldn't go down by himself. Unshaven with stubble all over his face. He was kryptonite to young innocent girls that didn't know any better. He was slimy from the start until the end. He would pray on the innocent get them strung out on drugs and feast on there money and life until they were used up.
She didn't mind his age though. It intrigued her. She planed on marrying him even though she was only 17. She longed to get out of her life and move on to be with him. She wanted a life unchanged and untouched. She needed the exhilaration of life in her.
She got a hot flash as she thought of Skid. She could feel her panties get wet as she blushed. She looked over and saw Jimmy Cliff staring at her. She looked down as he thought she missed him. He missed her.
Jimmy Cliff's mind started to wander. He knew this was his Jr. Year of high school and he had to get his grades up. Coach was bitching up a storm and he was one of the lead linemen on the team next year. He had to earn his stripes though. He recalled getting paddle by the seniors when he was a sophomore.
He laughed now at it but at the time it was horror. They had on the first day thrown him into a trash can, and then pulled his pants down in front of the senior cheerleading squad. They also took his fat ass and gave him a wedgie over his head in front of his freshman English class. He got it pretty bad. He knew he would get it pretty rough because his older brothers Steve and Kyle were both starting Varsity and they were both seniors.
He didn't quite mind it though. He had been getting it his entire life. What did it matter if it was in front of more people? Jimmy didn't quite mind the abuse. He liked being the athletic Fat kid. Instead of the nerdy, loser, quite, fat "Fat kid". He figured this was his role in life. He didn't quite mind the abuse because all the freshman got it.
He just recalls the paddling and started to laugh at it. I guess his best friend Chris was right. He recalled what Chris said after they both were crying after the humiliation of getting paddled after football practice.
"One day we will look back on this day, and laugh and laugh". While he was wiping the tears from his eyes.
Jimmy guessed he was right and he began to smile. He looked over at Stephanie Glen.
"What the fuck happened to her?" Is all he thought. She was like him. They're parents were both upper middle class people. Their dad's watched football, their mom's baked cookies and Jimmy liked that.
He liked the Suburban Cliché' he lived. She was like him except she had 3 older gorgeous sisters. Stephanie was pretty, a gorgeous face, blue eyes, and dirty blond hair and golden tan skin. She was just chubby. Just like him. Jimmy used to joke with her that they were the chubby versions of a hot cheerleader and a football stud. They were the only two over weight ones in both their families.
Jimmy just stared at her with her uncombed hair, black mascara, and also her pale skin that when they were younger was a healthy bronze. He recalls their first kiss behind his house on his little swing set. They used to write little love notes and talk about how everyone would tease them. Both their parents would pester them about their weight, sports, cheerleading, then she just flipped out.
It was after the divorce when she changed. Her pretty perfect girl outfits turned to outfits of despair and chaos. He thought he would speak with her after class.
She looked around and waiting impatiently for the bell. She looked around nervously as the bell went from breeze time like when she watched TV to what seems like an hour a minute. The fix had gotten to her. She had to see Skid and she also had to get some heroin.
"RING!", "RING"!
Finally, she thought as she started to gather her things. As she was picking up her bag a familiar body walked over to her.
"Hey Steph?"
She turned to see Jimmy Cliff walking over to talk to her. She looked at him and feelings of warmth came over her. It was weird. Warmth after such a long time.
Jimmy Cliff: "Hey, umm... can I talk to you?"
Stephanie: "Umm... what... I mean... um yeah..."
Just as soon as she said that Jimmy's friends run over to him. They all start to jump on him and around him and start to ask him for belly rubs.
Jason Camptree: "Jimmy, you chubby fuck com'ere and let me get a belly rub"
John Anderson: "Yeah, fatty let me get a rub I have a test tomorrow.
Jimmy just looked over and lifted his shirt as his buddies rubbed his belly. He laughed while they did it because he knew it was funny. They always rubbed his belly before each game, and before every test they had. It was just a jock thing they did.
Jason looked over at Stephanie and just basically looked through her. They didn't acknowledge her existence and she could feel herself getting smaller and more transparent.
Jason Camptree: Hey, Jimbo well see' yah later ok?
They both left. They were astounded that Jimmy wasn't going to ride with them to the parking lot like they had done for the last 3 years of their lives. They couldn't understand.
Stephanie looked at Jimmy and didn't smile. She looked over at him crossed and vexed.
Stephanie: "You really have become a toy haven't you Jim?"
He knew exactly what she meant by that. She saw him as the clown. She thought that his friends saw him as the one they could disrespect and also shove around. She thought he was there game. She thought he was the friend to poke fun at and tease just like in grade school but she was wrong.
Jimmy Cliff: Steph it isn't like that. John and Jason are my best friends. I like the way they treat me. I'm ok with who I am Steph. I wasn't when I was younger but now I am. I know that I'm fat I always have been. But the fact that they can tease me about it and it doesn't upset me shows me that I have overcome most of my insecurities. Also what about you? You are dressed like a fucking ghoul? What the fuck is so tragic about your life?
She looked at him as her eyes darted and turned to fire. What was so tragic about her life? That fat fuck she thought as she knew that he knew damn well what was wrong. The divorce had destroyed and ripped her family to shreds behind the gates of there little rich town. They were part of the elite in the area. Her mother had divorced her father who had remarried her friend's mother. How could she show her face around the town after all that shame? Everyone knew her father was a sleaze ball and her mother was a whore.
She looked at Jimmy and just did what she did back when they were younger and when he pissed her off.
Steph: "Hey Jimmy, come here"
Jimmy Cliff: "Oh, ok... hold on Steph..."
WAP!
She hit him in the nuts closed fist. He yelped, as his face turned red and he fell over on the ground holding his balls. It hurt. But alas, Jimmy was used to it. He was on the ground in agony as she just sat there with her arms crossed looking down at him.
He looked up from his knees with pain in his eyes and remembered just how much of a bitch Steph could be. They dated all through Jr. high and he knew that he probably in her weird psycho mind deserved a quick hit to the nuts just for bringing up bad stuff.
He thought about it and looked up at her and just kind of smiled. It was funny that after all this time she still remembered how to keep him in line.
Steph: "So what's the count Jimmy?"
Jimmy Cliff: "oowww... Shit, let's say around 67. I mean that's the 67th time you have hit me in the balls. Steph we aren't dating anymore you can't do that."
Steph: oh, really?
She winded up and gave him a swift kick to the nuts for a second time. He doubled over in pain and felt like he was going to hurl. He knew he shouldn't have mouthed off to her. I mean he had known the psycho for fucking 15 years of his life. He held on to his balls and just sat there in the fetal position for a couple of minutes.
Jimmy Cliff: "Stephanie why twice? I think you got you're point across the first time, Why you gotta hit Captain Chubs where it hurts?"
She laughed a bit and helped him up. They started to talk about old times for a bit and also about how there lives have been so far in high school. She was out doing insane things and he missed her. He smelt the fragrance of her hair and recalled how she used to always wear cherry shampoo.
She hugged him and for the first time felt safe again. She knew that she had gotten in too deep with where she was and she wanted him to help her. He looked up as he saw her nose bleed.
Jimmy Cliff" Steph are you ok? You're nose is bleeding, Steph look at me. What is wrong?"
She looked into his green eyes and she knew that he knew her. She couldn't lie. She told him about her addiction and also how she was in deep with a couple of bad people. She had gone to a party with a friend and had met a guy who introduced her to Skid.
Skid was an aggressive boyfriend and she would come home with bruises all over her. She showed Jimmy the track marks on her arms and the bruises on her body. She loved Skid but sometimes he was a little rough he told her.
At the sight of her bruises Jimmy got angry. His face flushed and his skin started to turn red. He was angry that someone had hit her. One of his friends and also his ex-girlfriend. He loved everything about her. She knew how to keep him in line. He also loved the way they flirted. He didn't quite mind the hit to the balls whenever he pissed her off. She had been doing it since they were 11 years old.
Jimmy Cliff: "Stephanie I'm going to get you out of this. Just wait, when is this pedo asshole coming by?"
Stephanie: Later on tonight. I have to have his money Jimmy. I fucking nodded off while I was doing lines at this girl's house and it got stolen, I'm scared he will... He will just fly off the handle I can't control him when he flips out."
Jimmy Cliff: Don't worry let me worry about that.
Jimmy had a plan that was about to endanger him and all his friends. He was going to try and save a girl from a drug dealer. He didn't quite know how but he was going to handle the situation. He called up John and Jason and told them what was going on.
They understood. Even though they didn't like Steph, they loved Jimmy and they were ready for what was about to happen next.
Jimmy On cell phone: Hello, Jason? Do you have you're dad's rifle with the scope? What? Why do I need it? I don't plan to shoot it dumb fuck I just need it to scare someone? You can sneak it out? Ok. Cool. Jason are you down? Yeah? Ok cool. Call up Nate and a couple of the guys, we have to go to the tavern tonight... What? I love you to buddy *click*.
He did not know what was going to happen this night. But he knew it would be something good.
*part 2 is coming*
User Reviews
Submitted by jojo747 (user info) at 2008-04-09 12:09:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2008-04-09 12:08:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
this need a good bit of polishing, but it's got some decent bones. keep working at it!
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2008-04-09 04:50:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
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Submitted by indoninja (user info) at 2008-04-08 14:56:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-08 14:52:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
this is the shit
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2008-04-08 12:17:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Utterly clichéd and utterly bollocks.
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2008-04-08 10:43:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:39:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Atta boy Perk. Keep on truckin'.
Submitted by Ltap (user info) at 2008-04-08 10:16:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
This was shit. I see perkman has decided that he gets -2s and hate when he talks about his idiocy and pathetic life, so he's decided to write shitty fiction now. Uh-oh....
Submitted by Rhymenocerous (user info) at 2008-04-08 09:29:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-04-08 03:11:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-04-08 03:11:57 EDT (#)
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No.
Submitted by Registered_S_O (user info) at 2008-04-08 00:32:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-04-07 23:12:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by Registered_S_O (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:33:36 CDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This was decent. You definitely need to do some editing and cleaning up. A few minor details need tweaking. All in all I enjoyed it and look forward to your next one.
Also, you mention unshaven face with stubble all over it. You really only need one or the other.
ahahahahahahaha
the second worst writer on ubersite is coaching the worst.
awesome.
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Some people like my work. And you are still a right cunt.
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2008-04-08 00:21:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Why you gotta hit Captain Chubs where it hurts?
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That's gonna be my review whenever someone -2s me.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-04-07 23:33:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
see young Ax here is the complete opposite of you.
It's why he's liked.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2008-04-07 23:15:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Jimmy Cliff the singer?
in crowd?
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Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-04-07 23:12:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by Registered_S_O (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:33:36 CDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This was decent. You definitely need to do some editing and cleaning up. A few minor details need tweaking. All in all I enjoyed it and look forward to your next one.
Also, you mention unshaven face with stubble all over it. You really only need one or the other.
ahahahahahahaha
the second worst writer on ubersite is coaching the worst.
awesome.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-04-07 22:00:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Write about chokomut ice cremes, instead.
Submitted by Registered_S_O (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:59:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:53:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Registered S_O- Thanks I don't know how I will take it but I think you will like what happens next. Thanks a lot I write for the people!
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Not a problem man. I am guilty of the things I mentioned in my earlier review, plus many more instances. I think I will peruse your user profile to see if you have written anything else I may like. Good on you mate. And apollo88 is a right cunt.
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:53:15 EDT (#)
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Registered S_O- Thanks I don't know how I will take it but I think you will like what happens next. Thanks a lot I write for the people!
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:42:50 EDT (#)
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Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:29:48 EDT (#)
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You don't believe I lived in Laguna beach? I also currently live by there in Newport.
What landmarks or things do you want me to tell you about to better answer you're dumb ass assertions icarus?
Please let me know?
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I hear there's this big gold bridge thing near San Francisco. Why don't you tell me more about that? Then tell me about this "ocean" thing I keep hearing about while I regale you with a story about the time Harry Potter and I went gnome tipping.
Submitted by BadSamaritan87 (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:40:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:34:19 EDT (#)
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no infact your right icarus I'm a bullshitter. I don't want to discuss bullshit on my story. Either like it or hate it. God damn reality show rejects. Fucking everyone wants know too much.
Submitted by Registered_S_O (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:33:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This was decent. You definitely need to do some editing and cleaning up. A few minor details need tweaking. All in all I enjoyed it and look forward to your next one.
Also, you mention unshaven face with stubble all over it. You really only need one or the other.
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:29:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
You don't believe I lived in Laguna beach? I also currently live by there in Newport.
What landmarks or things do you want me to tell you about to better answer you're dumb ass assertions icarus?
Please let me know?
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:25:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
fuck you.
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:23:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Rich people in Narnia own castles. Or hobbits. My dad owned a small family of hobbits. I used to break out the hooch and get them really fucked up.
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:20:39 EDT (#)
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Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:09:19 EDT (#)
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true icarus. But I actually have lived in Laguna Beach and I know some people who went to highschool with the tools on the show. I have partied with some. Typical So-Cal bullshit. That's about right.
Well I'll keep writing for you buddy. Hopefully you will like something.
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Sure you did, kid. Me? I lived in Narnia. You know that horse dude? Yeah, my sister dated him. He's really a snob in real life.
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:15:18 EDT (#)
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Apollo- Hey, football head why don't you post something instead of being a giant cunt all the time?
I know you're fucking ginormous head isn't small enough to fit through doors. haha I like you though fat head.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:11:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
sorry yes comment, absolutely shite.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:10:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:09:19 EDT (#)
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true icarus. But I actually have lived in Laguna Beach and I know some people who went to highschool with the tools on the show. I have partied with some. Typical So-Cal bullshit. That's about right.
Well I'll keep writing for you buddy. Hopefully you will like something.
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2008-04-07 21:07:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:58:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Why icarus? is it because they are basically "Rich kids, with problems?"
Let me know.
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Sorry, I don't see them as Laguna Beach, Gilmore Girls, or even Everybody Loves Raymond. I see them as a bunch o nobodies who live in suburban developments and think they're TERRIBLY interesting because they listen to Lifehouse and smoke pot; the sort of kids who have absolutely nothing to add and don't get their own TV shows. Not that it's a roast on their demographic, mind you; most people, especially the under-21 lot, are naive morons.
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:59:22 EDT (#)
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Method- don't lie you love the perky goodness! Admit it! Admit it!
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:58:43 EDT (#)
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Why icarus? is it because they are basically "Rich kids, with problems?"
Let me know.
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:58:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
You're almost as good as Christopher from the Sopranos, keep it up champ, and make sure you DON'T go back to school, school is for suckers!
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:56:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
I almost always end up wanting to kill ALL your characters.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:39:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Atta boy Perk. Keep on truckin'.
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:37:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Both. I write story/ screen plays. That's what I want to do with my life!!
But alas, I have to go to law school. Promised my mommy...
Submitted by PerkMan (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:36:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Jimmy Cliff is the shit!!
Submitted by ilikesteak (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:35:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Not bad perky. Not bad at all.
Submitted by Leonore (user info) at 2008-04-07 20:32:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I read this and the format gave me a headache.
Is this a story or a screen/stage play?
OUCH