Rape (1655 hits)
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Submitted by <monkeylove.at.easy.com> (View user info) at 2008-05-02 03:30:41 EDT
I wait.
The day is coming to an end and the shadows hang long from the eaves of the building making tiger patterns on the hard baked earth outside.
I wait.
I hear them coming, the unmistakable noise made by a group of females as they trot unconcernedly down the narrow alley. My pulse beats faster at the sound and I can feel the blood rushing through my veins. My breathing quickens, sawing softly through the gap where my front teeth used to be.
The females hesitate slightly as they enter the shade of the building, they glance about nervously for a moment and I worry that they might decide not to continue, that they will try to retreat back into the sunlight. I have a man waiting in the shadows to force them in if they try to escape but I hope it won't come to that. It's better if they aren't panicked too soon. I watch them from the gloom inside; I am not too concerned yet. I know that they won't be able to see us until their eyes adjust and by then it will be too late.
The lead one, slightly braver than her friends, decides to carry on and of course the others follow her. So predictable.
They are committed now and I glance down at my strong forearms, enjoying the way the snake tattooed there seems to coil as I flex my muscles in anticipation of the struggle to come. I flick a quick glance both sides to satisfy myself that my mates are ready. These are tough men, no strangers to the job before us and hardened to the fight. I'm satisfied with what I see.
I watch the females; decide on the one I want. I know that as the gang boss no one disputes my right to first choice. My eye settles on the one in the lead, the braver one that led the others into the dark. You'll do, I think. I reckon you're gonna be a fighter, well you'd do better than to try any crap with me.
As I watch them they suddenly become aware of our presence and stop, unsure of what to do. It's too late though, too late realizing the danger, too late realizing the trap that the alley has become. I step forward quickly, grapping my intended by the neck and dragging her away from the others. I'm vaguely aware that on either side my mates are doing likewise but I was right about mine being a fighter and I have to concentrate fully on subduing her.
This isn't the first time I've done this of course and I've learnt that an early show of strength often intimidates them and prevents any defiance, so I'm not gentle as I drag her back against the wall and try to throw her to the ground. She bucks and struggles against me and it takes all my strength to hold her. She wriggles hard in my grip and for an awful moment I think that I'm going to lose her. I can't allow that to happen, it would shame me in front of my mates if she escaped and so I set my feet and with a grunt flip her over on to her back on the floor.
I lock my arm around her neck and grip her hard with my knees. She still struggles and I reach behind me for my blade and press the cold steel to her flesh. At the touch of the steel she stops fighting me and lies still, fearful but resigned. I'm glad she's stopped struggling, I don't want to cut her but I will if I have to. It's funny how docile they tend to become once you put the blade to them.
I work quickly now, moving her around in my grip to the positions I like, using the blade to remove her outer coverings, aware all the time of her wide staring eyes locked on me, her breath rasping against my skin. I'm good at what I do and it doesn't take me long to remove every stitch from her so that she lies naked and slippery in my grasp.
I run my gaze over her; check her from all sides until I am satisfied with what I see. Only then do I meet her eyes. They are larger than normal in response to her fear and I can see myself reflected in their deep brownness. I feel a moment of tenderness for her and the desire to linger. Although I would never admit it to my mates I love her, love each one that I do. I am glad that she trusted me in the end, glad that I didn't have to cut her.
On the pretext of checking my work I run my hands down her sides, enjoying her warm fragrant skin beneath my fingers. I try to kid myself that she's the last one for me, that I've had my fill. But deep down I know that next year I'll be back in the same place, waiting again.
I snap myself out of my revere; I must be going soft to daydream like this. I glance around hoping nobody has noticed and see that the boys are finishing off their females as well. Time to put an end to it. I flip her over so she's on all fours and push her between my legs.
As she falls through the trapdoor behind me I give her a last affectionate pat on the rump, then stand and stretch my sore back. That's 200 today, I think, not bad for an old man. Behind me I hear her baa joyfully as she frolics in her new summer trim and rejoins her flock.
User Reviews
Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2008-05-05 16:29:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-05 12:30:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks Glen, your words of wisdom are greatly appreciated.
read this far did you? Well fuck off.
Submitted by Glenn. (user info) at 2008-05-05 09:22:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I start to read this post.
I am immediately disappointed.
My boredom turns to frustration which turns to rage.
Now I hate you.
-2 DIE
Submitted by Baxter (user info) at 2008-05-05 06:59:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
I liked this........... till the last line that is.
Submitted by Ltap (user info) at 2008-05-04 16:52:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I meant to +2 this, but forgot.
Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2008-05-04 15:54:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
lol
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2008-05-04 15:31:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by AsshOly (user info) at 2008-05-04 01:02:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i dont think anybody on ubersite got laid last night besides drogoroch. everybody is being such a dickhead on this post.
Anyway dude, I enjoyed it. Besides the issues somebody listed below about sheep stabbing, being in an alley etc, if you throw out the last line this could be a story about rape. it could use some editing, but in essence this was a solid contribution to ubersite's awesomeness, as rob might say.
I have a really bad fucking headache. Got really drunk this morning on purple rain flavored mad dog 20/20. do. not. ever. drink. that. ghetto. swill.
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Boo hoo, the faceless virgins don't like this post. Go cry me an e-river.
Submitted by AsshOly (user info) at 2008-05-04 01:02:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i dont think anybody on ubersite got laid last night besides drogoroch. everybody is being such a dickhead on this post.
Anyway dude, I enjoyed it. Besides the issues somebody listed below about sheep stabbing, being in an alley etc, if you throw out the last line this could be a story about rape. it could use some editing, but in essence this was a solid contribution to ubersite's awesomeness, as rob might say.
I have a really bad fucking headache. Got really drunk this morning on purple rain flavored mad dog 20/20. do. not. ever. drink. that. ghetto. swill.
Submitted by QueenAshlee (user info) at 2008-05-03 23:25:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Was this really about sheep? Jesus.
Submitted by QueenAshlee (user info) at 2008-05-03 23:22:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
What the fuck?
Submitted by X54 (user info) at 2008-05-02 19:31:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I thought this was okay, but there were a few things that seemed intentionally misleading which detracted a little from the surprise ending. But maybe it's because I don't know anything about sheep.
The title, for example. Is "rape" really used to describe sheepshearing? Or did the narrator fuck his sheep in addition to shearing it? Why would sheep be running down an alley? Or is "alley" a word for some kind of corral in sheepspeak? Do sheep-shearers really stab uncooperative sheep to make them stop struggling? What did sheep do when they lived in the wild, without anyone to cut off their wool? Keep getting bigger and poofier until they couldn't move?
Submitted by spyder882001 (user info) at 2008-05-02 19:21:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2008-05-02 14:20:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
If I see you, I'm going to eat your skull.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2008-05-02 14:15:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Nope.
Submitted by Coleslaw_Murphy (user info) at 2008-05-02 13:01:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Didn't like the content too much, but I did enjoy some of the phrasing. Also, you worked parts of the guy's description into the detail (e.g.: lack of teeth, tattoo) without making it sound too expository.
Idk, something about it +1.
Submitted by Ltap (user info) at 2008-05-02 11:59:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this, surprisingly.
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-05-02 11:54:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Leonore (user info) at 2008-05-02 11:42:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Wouldn't be Uber if there wasn't some mention of rape on the front page!
Submitted by PepsiCoke (user info) at 2008-05-02 10:59:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Fuck, I thought this was going to be RapeMadness.
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 10:15:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
You neglect to mention 'Matchday 2'
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 10:14:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Jet Set Willie fucking sucked.
Greatest games in order:
Toejam & Earl > Pong > Everything Else > Jet Set Willie
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 10:13:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Pong is nearly as good as Jet set Willy.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 10:01:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I'm no good at the robot game, my controller is old and worn and not responsive enough. I've had to resort to Pong.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2008-05-02 09:35:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Worth reading
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 09:01:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:57:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Thanks for clearing that up. It doesn't matter, only you've no idea the number of e-mails I had from him going on about how much he hated alters and accusing me of being every single one under the fucking sun. The fact is that 'Toshi' comments in almost exactly the same way, he makes similar typos and it's pretty well known that you've been blowing EI for centuries. Keep it up gents.
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I havent actually looked all that closely at the comments of Toshi, I shall and get back to you on what I reckon. He does seem to be somewhat more literate that EM though.
Despite the rumours I never blew Em, tried but he didnt want any of it.
So how are the robots? They dead yet?
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:57:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Thanks for clearing that up. It doesn't matter, only you've no idea the number of e-mails I had from him going on about how much he hated alters and accusing me of being every single one under the fucking sun. The fact is that 'Toshi' comments in almost exactly the same way, he makes similar typos and it's pretty well known that you've been blowing EI for centuries. Keep it up gents.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:48:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:42:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
What the fuck does the title of that have to do with anything? In any case, I was having a relatively interesting discussion with indo about work. I wasn't saying 'Thanks, I appreciate the criticism' or ':)' or 'I thought this would go better'.
That shit is fucking gay. Whatever, I've got robots to kill in Armored Core 3. Have fun Drogo + Emission.
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You are a douche Hurty. I was mentioning the title to point you to a direct case of you hanging and responding, i had to use the title as just saying Your bonkeyed post wouldnt really narrow it down between all your camwhore posts.
You da man! Go kill robots. Where is emission, or is that you just accusing some new guy of being an alter just for being new? Well thats original.
Who cares alter of not?
Submitted by odin (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:48:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:42:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
What the fuck does the title of that have to do with anything? In any case, I was having a relatively interesting discussion with indo about work. I wasn't saying 'Thanks, I appreciate the criticism' or ':)' or 'I thought this would go better'.
That shit is fucking gay. Whatever, I've got robots to kill in Armored Core 3. Have fun Drogo + Emission.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:39:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
hopefully the afternoon will be as quick as the morning.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:38:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:27:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Ain't done that in a while, but then who really cares?
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Aint done what? Hang?
Christ just look at your bonkeye post, the one you actually labelled bonkeye rather than your normal camwhores.
Just seems a bit off having a go at someone for something that you do all the time.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:27:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Ain't done that in a while, but then who really cares?
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:21:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:18:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
You'd be wrong, but then, you seem like a bit of an idiot.
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You know he's right Hurty. You hang and reply to a lot of messages on your posts.
Double standards FTW
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:18:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
You'd be wrong, but then, you seem like a bit of an idiot.
Submitted by orph (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:10:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
oh, and I almost forgot - needs more rape.
Submitted by orph (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:08:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
s'alright.
I fully support orphelia's ratings.
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 08:00:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:23:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:20:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Your reviews are pretty much coming from three or four people.
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Thats no different to most heated posts either Hurty.
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It seems to me that most HurtByTheSun posts get to most heated because of him doing what he is accusing me of i.e replying to comments and encouraging FJ Bell and Orphelia to do likewise.
However I think that's fair enough as I would far rather just get constructive criticism than heat.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:23:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:20:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Your reviews are pretty much coming from three or four people.
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Thats no different to most heated posts either Hurty.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:21:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
No Comment
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:21:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Like I said, I always rate your work fairly because I like it.
Despite my loathing you. lol
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:20:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Your reviews are pretty much coming from three or four people.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:20:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:17:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
You never seem to have minded when we hung out on your posts Drogo, dropping the +2s and all.
You should have said then we were lemmings when merely in my case, I was probably just having a laugh on a post I actually really appreciated.
I'd rather be a lemming than bitter :)
Is it still flying by?
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Zooming!
My post never really generate heat all that much. I would just like to think that if it was rated then thats what people thought of it, rather than just because.
Still not bitter yay!
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:17:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I have no idea what salobbered means, trying to eat a bacon butty.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:17:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
You never seem to have minded when we hung out on your posts Drogo, dropping the +2s and all.
You should have said then we were lemmings when merely in my case, I was probably just having a laugh on a post I actually really appreciated.
I'd rather be a lemming than bitter :)
Is it still flying by?
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:16:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
See Toshi you picked up on the general theme here. The problem with your 'Rape' is that it wasnt actually 'Rape' For some reason people here thinks it's cool and things to go on about rape. Hehehehe isnt it funny?
If you had actually written about proper rape you would have done better, and the loons would have swarmed all over it and salobbered on it.
Just my opinion
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:13:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
So I write about rape and more people review, there seems to be a trend on this site.
Orphelia cant like rape.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:13:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Not snide or bitter. Just doing what everyone else seems to do. trying on Lemming for a day.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:12:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
When did Drogo get so snide and bitter? Anyone?
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:11:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Unlike Hurty to bring up anything Gay. How very odd.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:09:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Hooray, a gay fest!
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:09:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:03:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Oh and yet again, it gets pointed out that I sometimes leave a 'I didn't read it comment' when I see that on Uber a hundred times a day.
And of course you can be a 'fan' of someones stories.
You are just being awkard and annoying, Drogo.
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Yep!
But you're playing along so my morning has flown bye.
Keep it up Toshi (sounds like something from Mario or something)
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:06:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
:(
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:03:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Oh and yet again, it gets pointed out that I sometimes leave a 'I didn't read it comment' when I see that on Uber a hundred times a day.
And of course you can be a 'fan' of someones stories.
You are just being awkard and annoying, Drogo.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 07:01:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
If I made that comment, I was probably being flippant. I read everything I rate, if it is serious fiction, usually twice. So to understand it better.
I have also said, many times, I have a husband, an pregnant, work as a high class hooker... I suppose all those are true too.
If I ever leave a 'I didn't read it comment' rest assured I did. Or at least tried to.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:58:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:50:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I put myself in that catagory because I do +2 MOST his posts. Like I say, I also do yours and orphs. I like your styles etc. There is nothing wrong with being a 'fan'.
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Nothing wrong with being a fan, if such things can exist here, but you have commented before that you hardly ever read the posts you are reviewing, that just sounds rather pointless.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:50:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I put myself in that catagory because I do +2 MOST his posts. Like I say, I also do yours and orphs. I like your styles etc. There is nothing wrong with being a 'fan'.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:48:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:36:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Think before you generalise about me,, Drog.
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I wasnt necessarily generalising about you Orphelia but if you choose to put yourself in the 'I +2 everything he writes' category then that is fine.
I stand by what I said though.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:44:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
A story about 'rape' with a twist at the end and bestiality? Hardly new territory.
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:41:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I honestly thought it was good and something alternative to everything else I have seen on this site, granted that does not mean it is good. I just get fed up with people who dont read and rate.
Thanks for your honesty though.
Submitted by darko (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:40:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Toshi, there's no point in posting ANYTHING on this site. That's the beauty of it!
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:39:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 11:37:04 BST (#)
Ranking: 0
Im not sure if there's any point posting fiction on this site.
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Of course there is, and there's a great deal of good fiction on here. This, however, is not one of those 'good' pieces.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:38:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
That, Toshi, is why I post all my fiction on writing.com
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:37:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Im not sure if there's any point posting fiction on this site.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:36:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
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Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 11:31:09 BST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:23:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Awww, let Drog defend his buddy. Bloody Southerners
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What buddy?
Just saying that this deserves better comments than it has had in comparison to most of the shite that gets +2'd around here. I dont know this chap from adam, actually I dont know any adams at all.
If this had been posted by say Mr Bell then certain people here would have given it a +2 anyway.
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I absolutely adore everything FJ writes, except his last post, which if you look at, I haven't rated.
I think he writes in a style I find appealling and easy to read.
I +2 most things he does, as I do orph and you Drogo, as I happen to love everything you three do. Maybe throw LM in there too.
I liked the first 2 posts from this guy, and one other, I forget which, but this was only worth a '0' from me.
I don't auto +2 anyone here, except steak, and that is because he was once very kind to me helping me watch a bus video.
Think before you generalise about me,, Drog.
Submitted by darko (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:34:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
It feels like there are at least 3 alters in the comments below.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:32:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
And I am far from jizzing over this Hurty, get it right.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:31:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:23:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Awww, let Drog defend his buddy. Bloody Southerners
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What buddy?
Just saying that this deserves better comments than it has had in comparison to most of the shite that gets +2'd around here. I dont know this chap from adam, actually I dont know any adams at all.
If this had been posted by say Mr Bell then certain people here would have given it a +2 anyway.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:28:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No, do you?
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:27:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Do you reply to every comment on Uber?
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:26:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
If it had been better, yeah, it probably would have gone well.
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:26:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
This could have gone so well.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:24:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Shut the fuck up Carter, you illiterate goon.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:23:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Awww, let Drog defend his buddy. Bloody Southerners
Submitted by CarterPFly (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:23:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This deserves a better rating then it got, probably because that Sunhurt guy is a complete and utter cunt.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:19:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 11:07:49 BST (#)
Ranking: 2
Most fiction is better I agree. But he was trying something. Most of Bells stuff sounds the same to me and I get bored reading it. Think you should just give this guy a chance as this is much better than most of the shite recently.
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It is and it isn't. Some of his stories have been great, others have been boring and annoying to read, like this one. Simply because he's done some decent stuff in the past doesn't mean you have to jizz all over everything, especially when it's as bad as this. False encouragement, etc.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:07:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Most fiction is better I agree. But he was trying something. Most of Bells stuff sounds the same to me and I get bored reading it. Think you should just give this guy a chance as this is much better than most of the shite recently.
Submitted by woolfe (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:03:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-05-02 06:02:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I've posted quite a few things that don't relate to shagging, actually.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 05:57:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
That's true, but then when Bell writes fiction it's better than this. Cunts got a one track mind though. This 'Toshi' guy started out rather well I thought, I'm beginning to change my mind though.
Submitted by LittleMonster (user info) at 2008-05-02 05:57:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
*dies*
Submitted by LittleMonster (user info) at 2008-05-02 05:56:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm with Drogo
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 05:51:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 05:26:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Come on Drogo this is boring as fuck.
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And that differs from most posts here how?
At least this is an attempt rather than "I got drunk fell over tried it on with a buuuurd but failed, went home and soiled myself."
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 05:26:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Come on Drogo this is boring as fuck.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 05:16:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Didnt!
Submitted by blueboy (user info) at 2008-05-02 05:03:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
because this did deserve it
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2008-05-02 04:36:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Because it doesnt deserve the reviews it's getting.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-05-02 04:32:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Not cool.
Submitted by darko (user info) at 2008-05-02 04:32:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
You make rape boring
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 04:19:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Im just trying to showcase my writing Orphelia, that's all. You are obviously just here to comment and that's fine.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 04:07:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
ps I don't 'fit in' I think it is better that way.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 04:05:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Why does this person try so desperately to fit in? Odd.
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 03:58:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Ok you may shout at me for replying but I just want to explain this post.
It was an experiment and was intended to blunt.
Comments appreciated, thanks.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-02 03:54:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Interesting, but I hated the style, it seemed clipped and military and didn't work for me.
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-02 03:52:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Sorry Orphelia, I judged from the title. Liked the story and not the title, maybe one day you could read my writing, would be appreciated.
Thanks.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-02 03:45:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
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Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-04-28 13:43:31 BST (#)
Ranking: 2
Surprisingly good.
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Why is it surprising? Oh, I forgot, I really don't give a shit. Whoops.
ps I didn't read this, I don't really read on Uber anymore.