Understanding Death. (466 hits)
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Submitted by HurtByTheSun (View user info) at 2008-05-12 05:36:16 EDT
(I wrote this a while ago, quite a long while ago so I decided to brush it up a bit and get some balanced and well formed opinions.)
Lying in a perfectly drugged cliche of dead memory waste and VCR tapes filled with lies he pondered the world. It had rained sorrow down upon him and those he loved with unceasing certainty. All he touched was drained and ultimately ruined. Constantly feeling sadness of such bleak intensity that his thoughts often drfted to the precious idea of suicide. Johnny Mandell had once said that it was painless. But his death song was not to come yet and so he put pen to paper and wrote these words:
"Man, fuck this shit."
Having finished his magnum opus he turned his thoughts to the few friends he had. They were all downstairs in the house they had lucratively come by. Probably more fucked up than he was, he wasn't sure if he wanted to join them or not. As he heard voices being raised he decided against gracing them with his company and fell asleep.
As he slept they raged. Someone had lost their money and was wildly accusing everyone he could wave his twisted little fingers at. He was of course, through a heroin haze, totally incapable of seeing his money on the sofa where he had been contentedly drooling up until a minute ago. When his money had been pointed out coupled with the accusation that he was a "dopey cunt" he totally lost it. He started flailing about with painfully thin and scarred arms and caused some people pain as his bony fists made rapid contact. Everyone became infused with furious junkie rage and the fight blossomed. Bottles and needles and pills and venom flew through the air, ruining the room. Through the all powerful feeling their drugs had given them they failed to notice that they were killing each other. No one noticed until she was the last person standing and having lost so much blood she collapsed with the rest. So it goes.
Upstairs the young awoke with a searing pain in his head. He went downstairs for something illegal to ease the pain. Seeing all his friends dead in the living room was quite a shock. Reeling with nausea, his headache intensified. He staggered outside and looked for solace in the moonlit night but all he found was the front end of a bus as he collided with it.
The last thing that had gone through his mind was a bus. Now he was having a whole new series of thoughts. The most obvious of these was, "Why can I still think?" As he looked down at his body, almost obscured by a crowd of people, he thought, "Amazing that even at this late hour people can still be attracted to such gory scenes as this." He also realised that someone was bound to walk through his front door, witness the battlefield of his living room, and wonder just what the fuck had happened.
Being immortal he no longer cared what happened for he could do anything. He could watch nubile young ladies changing in dimly lit rooms... But this idea was stopped in its infant steps by the voice of Devina, one of The Gods. She whispered in his ear I wouldn't even think about it if I was you . Having stoically practised atheism throughout his life, he was surprised that Devina spoke to him now. She spoke to the young man again,
You have a mission to do for me.
"Do I?"
Yes.
"Oh..."
Devina's task was not a simple one. He was to find the bus driver who had mowed him down and promptly left the scene. By finding this man he would understand the reason for his death. Searching far and wide he was wondering where he should go next to look for his assailant when he saw a man leaning in a doorway sipping from a glass containing a vicious looking red substance and smoking a thin cigarette. The man looked over and said,
I am he whom you seek
"I've been looking for you."
I know
"Devina told me to find you."
I know
"Who are you?"
Abbadon
"Why did you kill me?"
It was necessary
"My death was necessary?"
Yes
"Uh, why? if you don't mind my asking"
Well you see if I hadn't killed you then you would have caused terrible problems. Y'see you are, ahem, you were The Chosen
"Chosen for what?"
Chosen to be killed by me, you idiot
"Wha---"
His words were cut short by a rushing of wind as he whirled back to where Devina had left him, again she spoke:
Do you understand now?
"Well not really, no"
How unfortunate
"Was having Abbadon tell me I was 'The Chosen' all you wanted me to hear?"
Yes, everyone needs to know why they died
"But I don't know"
That must be very frustrating for you
User Reviews
Submitted by MajorAssface (user info) at 2008-05-13 12:42:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
'Constantly feeling sadness of such bleak intensity that his thoughts often drfted to the precious idea of suicide.'
Why can't your thoughts drift to suicide?
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2008-05-13 12:34:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-05-12 19:13:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
hahahaha
edited by bubba.
kill yourself.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-12 18:51:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-05-12 23:33:16 BST (#)
Ranking: 2
I like the story idea, but I would like to edit the writing. Not trying to be an asshole, but I see major problems.
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Go for it dude, for serious.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-05-12 18:33:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I like the story idea, but I would like to edit the writing. Not trying to be an asshole, but I see major problems.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-05-12 17:30:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by TechnoRatty (user info) at 2008-05-12 16:49:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
dead friends in the living room can be an annoyance -- that is why I keep my dead friends in the garage, they reside quietly with my live enemies and my robot butler Benson
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2008-05-12 15:14:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
i didn't particularly like it either... <points at berty>
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-12 12:11:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Cool link dude, cheers!
Submitted by beer-turtle (user info) at 2008-05-12 12:04:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I was reminded of this for some reason http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QrKnhOJ-R80 "The Black Button"
Submitted by Squirrelly_Girl (user info) at 2008-05-12 10:15:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow. Just wow.
Submitted by shadow (user info) at 2008-05-12 10:10:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"that must be very frustrating for you"
made me giggle more than a little.
Submitted by lostnphound (user info) at 2008-05-12 08:20:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
BOING
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-12 05:53:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
It's open ended because I wasn't sure if I wanted to add to it, I kind of like it like this though.
I have to confess the picture is lifted from a piece of work I did for a friend ages ago, I have plagiarised myself. The shame.
Submitted by Toshi (user info) at 2008-05-12 05:51:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
This is a fantastic idea just sloppily executed in places and didn't seem to go anywhere.
Fantastic picture though.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2008-05-12 05:50:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
A bit pointless and rubbish, I thought. I did like the car chase with the New Zealand woman clinging to the bonnet though.
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2008-05-12 05:44:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Have this +2 on faith and because it seems fairly 'in' to +2 you.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-05-12 05:44:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Cool picture.
I enjoyed this. It would be a good opening for something, there's definite potential to expand.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-05-12 05:43:30 EDT (#)
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Abbadon can be a number of biblical reference thingies. Satan, a lesser demon or just a place. Revelation has the most stuff about him, I believe. I did originally have a few references referring to him as the devil, but I didn't want to make it seem too biblical I suppose.
Submitted by TheBrad (user info) at 2008-05-12 05:40:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i havnt read the bible for a while but wasn't abbadon one of satans buddies? or is it just another name for the dark one? Good read though, i'd like to see it taken a bit farther.