sleep like a rock, wake like a feather (543 hits)
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Submitted by <Art> (View user info) at 2008-06-13 14:41:17 EDT
He didn't like others. He didn't like himself, but a locked bedroom door and a blanket pinned down over the window couldn't hide him from his own existence. Each day was a struggle to remain dormant.
A knock sounded at the door.
His ears perked up with a curious discomfort as he tip-toed out of his cave, towards the front door.
Drifting from the kitchen was the strong stench of eighty or so science projects ready to go.
He opened the laundry room door, ever so quietly, and stepped over piles of clothing, some heavy and damp with moisture, and some so dry that they could be snapped like breadsticks. On the other side of Mount linen was a single, bare window reflecting the rays of the sun.
Another knock at the door.
His foot rested on an old tool box as he scanned the front door from the laundry room window. He pressed his right cheek up against the glass to get the right angle.
There was a young woman, leaning against his open screen door, a face he was not familiar with.
Slowly he back away from the window, muting each and every muscle contraction along the way.
The wasted venture gave him nothing but a rough idea as to what time of day it was, as he crept back in to the bleak comfort and safety of his cave.
He closed the door behind him, choosing to leave all of the second chances never taken on the other side of the barrier; along with all of the second chances he was never given.
The fear of being solely responsible for ones own happiness struck fiercely and swiftly like lightning, with dark clouds haunting a barren landscape which once thrived fervently beneath a cerulean sky.
Any future promised to crave and resent the past. Oftentimes the gaps between happiness and truth lie chasms apart.
No light penetrated the blind walls; there was nothing left to do but close his eyes.
Sleep like a rock, wake like a feather.
User Reviews
Submitted by AlwaysAnEagle (user info) at 2008-06-16 11:07:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Good start, needs cleaning up.
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2008-06-15 13:33:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-06-14 18:18:49 EDT (#)
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And I fucking hate you for no particular reason other than you are a total nob jockey.
Submitted by tloshjohnson (user info) at 2008-06-14 17:52:03 EDT (#)
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Banjo has turned Uber into some shit awful love fest and I fucking hate her for it.
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2008-06-13 22:49:15 EDT (#)
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"Sink like a stone, float like a feather."
--Unbroken Chain
(Just google it.)
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-06-13 16:06:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
*shakes hand*
Anytime doodles you big scroat bag. Manbearpig kiss! Muhaha!
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2008-06-13 16:03:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
possible communist below
Submitted by GangsterSquid (user info) at 2008-06-13 16:02:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Banjoodles(n.) (bahn-jew-duhls) - A pair of computer users who enjoy enacting fellatio on each other via reviews on internet message board posts.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-13 16:00:09 EDT (#)
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and on that it is time to leave for the day, we'll just say I win, because i'm a man and we always win.
I think steak is into beastaltiy, maybe you two could hook up?
Just kidding, I'm sure you have a great personality.
*kisses*
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:59:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Bubba spawn from a wrinkled old granny fanny below. Also into grannies and young children, its genetics.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:58:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Has me confused with bubba below.
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:55:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Roll another 'old joke' old flacid man. You blatantly lack the imagination to get it up and if I don't turn you on its because you're into fucking grannies and babies. Granny fucking paed 2 below.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:52:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
hangs out with that faggot scruggs two AND three below.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:51:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
It is only flacid because everytime I 'talk' to you I get this visual of you ripping large chunks of flesh, from whatever hapless animal you might have killed for your meal, with that powerful jaw muscle of yours.
Scary, to be honest.
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:51:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
fag below
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:50:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
stfu and keep doing the 'below' jokes
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:47:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Oooh Doodles, I know you don't mean it or you wouldn't try and get my attention all the time.
Its ok, if you think your cock is there then that's fine. A flap of flacid skin does not constitute cock no matter what your mum tells you.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:45:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Translated via babelfish to english from manbearpigian two below.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:44:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Non-female as explicitly proved by the name MANbearpig and photographic evidence below.
I would also like to point out that I DO have a penis, thank you.
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:41:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Man with no cock and old jokes making out his cocklessness and lack of luck with ladies doesn't bother him below.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:39:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Manbearpig trying to be insulting, but coming (har har) off as a desperate whore below.
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:33:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Yes, I admit it, I would let Doodles cum in my hair - IF HE HAD A COCK!
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:30:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
ginger sock penis below.
Submitted by GangsterSquid (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:22:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Banjo and Doodles are gay lovers.
Submitted by Mud (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:19:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
im not sure what to make of this
allow me to make a suggestion. with sentences like: "He closed the door behind him, choosing to leave all of the second chances never taken on the other side of the barrier; along with all of the second chances he was never given.", to coat them with metaphor or say them more discretely. coming right out and saying things like that makes it sound forced. imply that that's what he's doing rather than explicitly stating what's going on. you get the idea across in a much more interesting way.
dont be too abstract, just don't be as direct and try to not come out and say things like that.
another example: "but a locked bedroom door and a blanket pinned down over the window couldn't hide him from his own existence."
imply that he's having trouble with his dormancy and loneliness rather than saying it explicitly.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:16:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Manbearpig being vain below.
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:03:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
See what I mean, that's the chronic vanity kicking in again. Automatically think the whole world is talking to me, referring to me... Jesus, its all about me...!
ME ME ME!!!!
I outta see somebody about it...
Submitted by DudeThatsBOSH (user info) at 2008-06-13 15:02:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
i think corn nugget was referring to the poster?
vanity indeed
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-06-13 14:57:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
hahaha, yeah right. Don't mess with me corny, I suffer from chronic vanity.
Submitted by corn_nugget (user info) at 2008-06-13 14:54:28 EDT (#)
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Its better than your last post, at least.
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-06-13 14:51:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
sorry, not for me