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Submitted by Hornet (View user info) at 2008-06-24 19:14:41 EDT
Wendi's brother liked to stare at the sun. He'd been doing it ever since I could remember. When Sewell was a little baby, when I was dating Wendi, he would fuss until he could see the sun. It wasn't until he was a year and a half old that the pediatrician realized something was seriously wrong with Sewell's eyes. The ophthalmologist explained that there was a malformation in the lenses of Sewell's eyes. They contained hollows, and the hollows were filled with vitreous fluid. The vitreous fluid was dark, and acted like a heavy shade between Sewell's eyes and any light source. Sewell had been declared legally blind. Even now he liked to sit outside and look at the sun. He couldn't read, couldn't watch TV.
He once said, "The sun is the only thing I can see."
I went outside while the rest of Wendi's family was still gathered around the table after our traditional Sunday dinner. Sewell was there, staring at the sun. It was a blinding red orb on the horizon.
I said, "You'll miss dessert."
He said, "That's okay. This is more important."
We stood for a few minutes watching the sun. Soon Sewell frowned and shook his head. He turned and looked at me, and his eyes were spooky, jumping with the red glare of the sun. If surgeons had removed those lenses filled with smoky black fluid, Sewell would not see anything at all.
He said, "It is changing." I asked him what he was talking about. "The sun. It is changing."
I said, "Surely scientists and astronomers would know if something was happening with the sun. You're only a little boy." I clapped him on the back. He was a good kid but he'd been terribly subdued lately.
He said, "They can't see what I see. The sun is changing and things are going to get very bad."
I said, "Come on, Sewell."
He pointed at the sun. He said, "I wish you could see it! It is pulsing, fluttering, it's not natural. The sun is sick."
In a melodramatic fashion I said, "What, are we all going to die? I hope your sister and I make it to our tenth anniversary at least, I have a nice trip planned."
He said in a matter of fact way, "Not everyone will die. If there are any people like me they will live. People without eyes will live. Anyone with optic nerves that can carry light to the brain will die. It will be painful, and it will affect every living thing."
I waited for him to laugh and say it was all a trick. He did not. He looked at me again with those dark red eyes. He said, "You should take my sister on that trip now. Time is almost up."
The sun went down and night came.
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Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2008-07-22 23:33:25 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-07-02 14:53:47 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-24 20:04:26 EDT (#)
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The sun has gone down and the moon has come up. I can't type sadly.
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Oh Doodles, you most certainly CAN type sadly.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-07-02 14:50:38 EDT (#)
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Submitted by experima (user info) at 2008-07-01 19:33:19 EDT (#)
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Submitted by sexualchocolate1984 (user info) at 2008-06-26 11:01:54 EDT (#)
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Now this is how to do a first post! Interesting, creative, dark, awesome.
This story has got my attention, more more more.
Welcome.
Submitted by Hornet (user info) at 2008-06-25 15:53:41 EDT (#)
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Thank you for your comments. I will post more.
Submitted by Lib (user info) at 2008-06-25 14:32:17 EDT (#)
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Submitted by shadow (user info) at 2008-06-25 11:46:52 EDT (#)
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You did that thing I do. With the last line. And the sucking.
Interesting idea, at least. I'd read more.
Submitted by cordelia (user info) at 2008-06-25 09:37:43 EDT (#)
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Submitted by FALLEN (user info) at 2008-06-25 09:00:15 EDT (#)
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vitreous fluid FTW
cool user name
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2008-06-25 08:58:16 EDT (#)
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could have been much longer, much more, and much better. still, i enjoyed it.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-06-25 03:18:59 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2008-06-25 03:18:32 EDT (#)
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Welcome, have a plus two for trying. I liked your premise, but it wasn't developed as fully as it could have been.
Submitted by HateMudkips (user info) at 2008-06-25 01:55:29 EDT (#)
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i liked this and am requesting a continuation of the story. pretty please?
Submitted by Val (user info) at 2008-06-25 01:29:55 EDT (#)
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madeleine albright.
Submitted by Falafel (user info) at 2008-06-25 01:04:06 EDT (#)
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Could have used a little more length.. or at the very least, a Habeeb style pic of a boy with MS Paint red eyes. And maybe a yellow wiener with a red square tip.
Submitted by X54 (user info) at 2008-06-25 00:57:20 EDT (#)
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Ha ha. Creepy. Could have been longer.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-24 20:05:30 EDT (#)
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Also. Is he going the distance? This is very important mind you.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-24 20:04:26 EDT (#)
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The sun has gone down and the moon has come up. I can't type sadly.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-06-24 20:03:51 EDT (#)
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The sun has gone down and the mono has coem up would have been a much better last line.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-06-24 20:00:47 EDT (#)
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...and long ago somebody left with the cup.
Submitted by SilentRenegade (user info) at 2008-06-24 19:37:10 EDT (#)
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flow was a little choppy... but the story idea was good.
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-06-24 19:17:01 EDT (#)
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OK - that actually wasn't bad.
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-06-24 19:15:21 EDT (#)
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STFU N00b