Ten thousand Lightning Strikes in a Day (1263 hits)
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Submitted by Fey (View user info) at 2008-06-27 18:49:35 EDT
I felt the eyes on me, the gaze crawling sluggishly up my spine as I walked up the stairs, the endless stairs. As I rounded the corner, I threw a glance over my shoulder and saw the angel on the wall, the angel head and wings on the wall above the door. Only a face and wings, wings that seemed to be sprouting from behind where the ears would be, if they weren't covered in golden curls badly painted on cheap ceramic.
It wasn't until a week later that the angel began talking to me. It whispered, to begin with, so I had to strain to hear it over the ever-present whine in my ears, my eardrums burst when I was small. My ears used to bleed.
I took the elevator twice, to avoid the angel, but then it cried and the crying was worse than the whispering. I could hear it in my head now, past the whining in my ears, replacing the whining in my ears with whispering. It started asking me questions, things I had no answer for. "Why?" it would ask, and I would have to answer "Because." but it wasn't enough of an answer and the angel cried.
It called me Hobbyhorse, although I told it my name was not so, and it asked me on the thirteenth day a question which lead to the end. "Why do you not burn this place down?"
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Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2009-05-04 04:17:12 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by John_H_Kim (user info) at 2008-09-30 19:11:36 EDT (#)
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I really enjoyed this one.
Submitted by joedaddy (user info) at 2008-08-08 00:56:26 EDT (#)
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Fey O
Fey yea yea O
Daylight come and I wanna go home
Submitted by sage104 (user info) at 2008-08-08 00:28:39 EDT (#)
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Snaps. As in, coffee shop poetry night snaps. I'll give you a 1 though.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-08-07 17:59:59 EDT (#)
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fey, oh fey..post again some day, eh?
Submitted by diadima (user info) at 2008-07-20 21:48:40 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-06-30 23:48:52 EDT (#)
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More, please.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2008-06-30 13:48:43 EDT (#)
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Needs major expansion.
What's here is lovely, though.
Submitted by sexualchocolate1984 (user info) at 2008-06-30 07:19:53 EDT (#)
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Poetic. But no hard on, that's fer fucking sure.
Indeed. Plus poetry sucks balls.
Off you fuck.
Submitted by woolfe (user info) at 2008-06-30 03:55:18 EDT (#)
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Submitted by woolfe (user info) at 2008-06-27 11:22:11 EDT (#)
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If I wanted to read pre-pubescent level bullshit, I'd read a ghola post.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-06-30 03:32:49 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Ltap (user info) at 2008-06-30 02:22:35 BST (#)
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Who +2'd this?
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Me, I dont suppose you would have seen a +2 before.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2008-06-30 03:22:00 EDT (#)
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BORK BORK BORK
Submitted by Ltap (user info) at 2008-06-29 21:22:35 EDT (#)
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Who +2'd this?
Submitted by shitfuck (user info) at 2008-06-29 12:33:45 EDT (#)
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Poetic. But no hard on, that's fer fucking sure.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-06-29 12:23:14 EDT (#)
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I think I over estimate America.........
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-06-29 11:36:18 EDT (#)
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OH NOES YOU DISLIKE ME?
Tragic.
Get a fucking life.
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-06-29 09:52:42 EDT (#)
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Rare fairy sighting, get the camera.
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2008-06-29 05:15:51 EDT (#)
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Of course, Bubba. I was just being sloppy. =(
I'm guilty of underestimating, Haiku, but I'm not often surprised by what America does anymore.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-06-28 19:45:57 EDT (#)
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Good stuff, BUT:
You awakened a pet peeve of mine---
"It called me Hobbyhorse, although I told it my name was not so, and it asked me on the thirteenth day a question which lead to the end."
LED to the end!
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2008-06-28 19:26:45 EDT (#)
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You and me both.
You would be surprised at how many people think that global warming is a clever scheme made up by the "liberal media", but like I said, you really shouldn't be at this point.
And that's only skimming the surface, really.
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2008-06-28 18:05:37 EDT (#)
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Yes, underestimating America is a sin I'm often guilty of.
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2008-06-28 17:53:09 EDT (#)
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aha...you would think that would be logical, but you would be underestimating America's ability to produce funny looking young men with a complete lack of tact.
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2008-06-28 17:47:58 EDT (#)
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I think a young man with a head as big as yours on a neck as thin should be nicer to people who at least are semi well-proportioned. =)
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2008-06-28 17:44:13 EDT (#)
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Don't get excited, woman!
http://www.ubersite.com/m/112150
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2007-10-02 09:28:58 PDT (#)
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You'll always be that homely woman who can write pretty well, to me.
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2008-06-28 17:37:36 EDT (#)
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Ha. Well, the sea of shit here has tides, as many seas do. Sometimes it's high tide, and there's just too much shit for there to be any beach left to play on and then at other times the sea recedes and I feel like I have space to spread out my picnic blanket, lie back, relax and get sand in my ears and my food, get my sandy food stolen by cocky seagulls, get bitten by sandflies, get stepped on by topless volleyball players running backwards, discover that I forgot my sunscreen and burn the fuck out of my face, burn the shit out of my feet on the black sand (shitbeach, NZ style) and generally struggle to remember why I came to the beach in the first place. And then the shit rises again and it's time to leave for a while.
But it's nice you think I'm cute. I'm not, but that's not the point.
Submitted by haikumikoo (user info) at 2008-06-28 17:20:15 EDT (#)
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It's so cute how you've been re-testing the water at ubersite lately.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-06-28 13:29:47 EDT (#)
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Told ya - http://news.bbc.co.uk/sport1/hi/cricket/england/7475337.stm
Another pathetic performance.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-06-28 11:23:25 EDT (#)
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"Could" has nothing to do with it. Arrogance is pretty much the standard when it comes to English sport.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-06-28 11:22:12 EDT (#)
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You could be right. Anyway im off to my mates to have a fun filled evening/afternoon.
Have a good one.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-06-28 11:20:43 EDT (#)
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Much like the England football team then: a bunch of selfish glory seekers - not a team.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-06-28 11:17:45 EDT (#)
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Bell, Pieterson, Bopara, Shah all quality but so careless it is ridiculous.
What im saying is they all have so much talent but so little application.
Oh and Ambrose is Pure Shit.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-06-28 11:15:18 EDT (#)
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England batsmen are 'classy'? You're clearly watching a different team than I am.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-06-28 11:13:33 EDT (#)
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Pah. But we do have a problem, all our batsmen are very classy but fail to deliver.
Much like me........scores of 44,26 and 21 this season :(
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-06-28 11:11:43 EDT (#)
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England will lose, again.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-06-28 11:10:21 EDT (#)
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Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2008-06-28 12:09:43 BST (#)
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Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-06-28 06:59:54 EDT (#)
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Toe lady, you listening to the cricket?
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Was watching it even! Now I'm focussing on drinking - cricket has that effect on me. 'Sidebottom'
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Be interested to hear your take on the 'controversy' in the last match.
This match is nicely poised. Pieterson could win this but alas he could always lose it.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2008-06-28 07:49:11 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2008-06-28 07:20:20 EDT (#)
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Wellington is a lovely place, Toe. You're in Auckland? Wellington feels a lot less like a big city, but still has all the things you'll need and want.
Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2008-06-28 07:09:43 EDT (#)
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Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-06-28 06:59:54 EDT (#)
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Toe lady, you listening to the cricket?
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Was watching it even! Now I'm focussing on drinking - cricket has that effect on me. 'Sidebottom'
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-06-28 06:59:54 EDT (#)
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Toe lady, you listening to the cricket?
Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2008-06-28 06:57:59 EDT (#)
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Kiwi Fey!
yea, when I take acid I feel the same way.
Is it bad that I read this as a drug post?
On a completely unrelated note;
Ever lived in wellington? I'm moving there in about 3 months and I want to know if the people down there are weird.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-06-28 04:53:26 EDT (#)
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I really like this, well you know what I mean.
Submitted by messmind (user info) at 2008-06-28 04:28:22 EDT (#)
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Rare yef post above...
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2008-06-28 01:05:57 EDT (#)
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I read this earlier and forgot to rate it. Have another.
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2008-06-28 01:05:27 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by X54 (user info) at 2008-06-27 22:41:15 EDT (#)
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As I read this, this post entitled "Ten Thousand Lightning Strikes in a Day," I couldn't help but notice the sentence construction, the jarring sentence construction that kept crying out, kept shouting "Look at me!" And then I got distracted, lost in the jarring sentence construction that kept crying out, Look at me!" and I lost track, I forgot what the story was about. But it's fun, really fun writing like this. Isn't it?
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2008-06-27 20:13:36 EDT (#)
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YAY
Submitted by PayMeLater (user info) at 2008-06-27 19:58:36 EDT (#)
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This was almost something.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-06-27 19:54:08 EDT (#)
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Oh... oh, this made me happy.
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2008-06-27 18:50:24 EDT (#)
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WLGF? But people think I do anyway, so... <shrug>