You're just somebody that I used to know (463 hits)
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Submitted by loveinbrevity (View user info) at 2008-07-02 17:50:20 EDT
Took the turnpike this afternoon
Headed north, back towards NJ
Where the dirt is cold and the skies are grey
my exit is coming up
Signs count down the miles left as a smoke my cigarette to the butt.
Exit, ironic
To exit here would be to remain
Fuck PGA
On the turnpike is where I want to stay
15 w 2 miles ahead, keep right.
And if I get there I will sit on the stairs of my old home
The ones on which I used to sit when I wanted to be left alone
I'll sit at the top of the stairs with my knees pulled tightly to my chest
In my hands my chin will rest
In my head I'll review
All that has happened between me and you
Is there a space for me?
As far as room in your life goes
Say it to me
But don't do it with a hard dick under your clothes.
You take me to your room in the middle of the night
You whisper sweet nothings to make me less uptight
My eyes are of the purest jadestone
I give your life meaning
I make you feel better
You said to me
You make me happy
I say to you without words as you silently stare at me
eyes gleaming
I sit half naked, cross legged on your bed
Your guitar is asleep in the corner
I glance at it periodically
It's bursting with unwritten songs
You will never write about me
They hum silently, melodically
What are you thinking?
Nothing.
You lie to me
Come hell or high water is what you promised me
Maybe we should have thought that out more carefully
Because came the hell and came the water
And we can't take this thing much farther
I will no longer take that long winding car ride to your world
You're gone and now that part of town no longer exists
You left and that's what you took with.
I hope your sheets still smell of me
I hope the scent drives you crazy with desire for me
I hope when you close your eyes
me sprawled on your bed is the image you see
I hope that what hurts the most is knowing that I would have been good to you
No I hope what hurts the most is knowing you hurt me too
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Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-07-09 15:12:31 EDT (#)
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Submitted by loveinbrevity (user info) at 2008-07-09 14:55:35 EDT (#)
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This was perhaps the shittiest thing i have ever written in my life. This is a picture of my ex and the back of my head. It was taken almost a year ago. I do reside in America. I wasn't born here, but thats where I am now.
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I would like to point out these samples of your 'writing':
http://www.ubersite.com/m/117562
http://www.ubersite.com/m/117532
http://www.ubersite.com/m/117525 http://www.ubersite.com/m/117524
http://www.ubersite.com/m/117481
http://www.ubersite.com/m/117476
http://www.ubersite.com/m/117475
http://www.ubersite.com/m/117474
More can be seen here
http://www.ubersite.com/u/loveinbrevity
Submitted by loveinbrevity (user info) at 2008-07-09 14:55:35 EDT (#)
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This was perhaps the shittiest thing i have ever written in my life. This is a picture of my ex and the back of my head. It was taken almost a year ago. I do reside in America. I wasn't born here, but thats where I am now.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-07-09 12:02:29 EDT (#)
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Is this a song?
Is that you in this pic too?
Are you American?
Submitted by iambetteratit (user info) at 2008-07-05 22:15:11 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-05 13:53:55 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-05 13:52:47 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-05 13:52:24 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-05 13:51:56 EDT (#)
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What the fuck
Submitted by iambetteratit (user info) at 2008-07-04 00:26:59 EDT (#)
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you would want to win the special olympics... even if you win you're still retarded
Submitted by Genko (user info) at 2008-07-02 22:31:42 EDT (#)
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But I forgot to rate.
So I guess that means we both fail.
I'd go back, but it's too late.
I'll just go drink some ale.
Submitted by Genko (user info) at 2008-07-02 22:29:27 EDT (#)
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Adding
random line
Break
does not
A poet
Make
(At least my poem has a rhyme in it.)
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-07-02 21:02:34 EDT (#)
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shit
Submitted by PayMeLater (user info) at 2008-07-02 19:58:33 EDT (#)
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I liked it.
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2008-07-02 19:47:56 EDT (#)
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love in brevity?
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-07-02 19:44:49 EDT (#)
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Submitted by iambetteratit (user info) at 2008-07-02 19:39:08 EDT (#)
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I wish my lawn was emo like you so it would cut itself.
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This would only have been funny if you said it sarcastically.
However, you thought the joke was actually funny when you typed it.
Therefore you fail at being funny, like you fail at writing, like you fail at serving your county.
You seem to be all about failing don't you?
I bet you couldn't even win the special olympics.
Submitted by iambetteratit (user info) at 2008-07-02 19:39:08 EDT (#)
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I wish my lawn was emo like you so it would cut itself.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-07-02 18:47:26 EDT (#)
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Submitted by X54 (user info) at 2008-07-02 18:46:40 EDT (#)
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So, are these rapidfire posts of yours part of some larger work? Is there any connection between them beyond the whining emo theme?
The first two, I notice, both involve Amanda. Amanda drives her boyfriend to suicide and may have been a contributing factor in her chorus teacher's suicide, too. Then we have an ode to Amanda from someone she just dumped, then another from the same person after it sinks in. She certainly leaves a trail of depression in her wake, doesn't she ("I should come with a warning label"). Amanda isn't mentioned by name in the third post, but I suspect it's her. Has her conscience finally caught up with her?
This fourth post seems out of place, though. She's jilted, but not yet bedridden as in the third post. It might have been better to save the third post for last, in keeping with Amanda's downward trajectory.
Not a bad idea, but the execution seemed a little heavy handed to me.
Submitted by pandora (user info) at 2008-07-02 18:19:55 EDT (#)
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The guy in that photo looks very moist. The inside of his hoodie probably smells like anchovies.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-07-02 18:12:48 EDT (#)
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fuck off emo kid
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2008-07-02 17:53:07 EDT (#)
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repost this three times for a prize
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-07-02 17:52:01 EDT (#)
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ONLY 6 POST TO GO UNTlL YOU ARE SUPREME ATIONAL CHAMPION WINNAR WINNAR CHICKEN DINNAR, WOOO