drowning (797 hits)
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Submitted by Barts_Mom (View user info) at 2008-07-09 08:39:45 EDT
The chatter from the guards' car went from drone to melody, melody to drone, and then back again.
Back and forth, back and forth...
Angus tipped the widget in the can; tock tock, tock - tock, tock....tock.
He looked up and stared across the steel grey sea, back at the can and placed it carefully upside down on the grass between his splayed feet.
'tock'.
The radio sputtered and Frannie listened from the passenger seat with one ear, glazed vision on a blurred horizon.
"He's moving Frannie" Jane said, "What are we going to do? Fran for fuck's sake what are we going to do he's leaving!"
"let him go Jannie, he's stuck. He's no car, no clothes - nothing - just the shirt on his back."
Water lapped at his jeans and pulling off his shirt he turned and saw the guards looking at their toes and at each other and behind their backs and across and beyond themselves, at nothing.
"Elephants" he thought, drawing a picture in the sand with his toe. "'Oliphants' even mr tolkien.....pink ones."
Swimming - swimming was always good. There was something looming at the end of it though that made him pause, not the destination, not the realisation.....treading water he spat a small fountain of bitterness.
"molecules..." he mused watching the bubbles in front of his nose. He gulped a mouthful of sea again, thought about england and without looking up at the star embossed ceiling, slowly began to sink.
User Reviews
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2008-07-13 16:20:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I didn't read this. Luckily for you, I'm rating the post (well, the picture anyway) not the poster because you're currently on my auto -2 list.
Submitted by lungfish (user info) at 2008-07-10 00:58:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I wrote a post like this, just to see what would happen. Got pretty much the same response. Can't explain the +2s on this or the other. Maybe we're just so damned lovable.
And. FUCK. ME. It was El Guettar I was thinking of. Oh well. Hubris come easily after some whiskey on an empty stomach. So does pretentiousness. But I'm oh so lovable. And cuddly too, with this beer gut and all. Still, I feel like I tarnished the honor of the old man. I'm going to shut up now. Starting to feel like an ass.
Submitted by TheBrad (user info) at 2008-07-09 23:08:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I hated this, but found myself +1 ing the acid baked feeling i got from it.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-07-09 15:02:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
barts mom blows as much as bart does, apparently.
Submitted by Lib (user info) at 2008-07-09 13:59:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Zampano (user info) at 2008-07-09 13:52:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
The picture reminds me of a shot from The Fall.
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2008-07-09 11:54:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Pentameter (user info) at 2008-07-09 11:50:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I liked it, but it's still kind of missing something for me. Don't know what though.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2008-07-09 11:32:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I really liked this.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-07-09 11:07:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
hey, mrs. cilfone, what was bart like as a boy?
i bet he was really backwards and horrid at sports? little shy of girls. tended to play alone a lot.
but full of manners, right? a real 'please' and 'thank you' and 'sir' and 'ma'am' kind of kid.
probably got beat up here and there as well, right?
well hey, take heart, you did a pretty good job! look at him today! he's a successful internet superstar!
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Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-07-09 09:20:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Oi you cunt.
I thought you were eaten by gerbils.
Or had died in another such pussy way.
At the least I thought I had run you off
Submitted by sexualchocolate1984 (user info) at 2008-07-09 09:10:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Uh, meh.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-07-09 09:08:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by MANICMOTHER (user info) at 2008-07-09 08:59:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The post, not the poster.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-07-09 09:07:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
That picture is fantastic.
The text was like a mince that's full of peas. I mean, I like peas as much as the next guy, but that mince is FULL of peas.
Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2008-07-09 09:06:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Nice pic.
Submitted by MANICMOTHER (user info) at 2008-07-09 08:59:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The post, not the poster.
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-07-09 08:45:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
The picture was nice.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-07-09 08:43:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
well looky who it is, I thought you had died of rickets or something