GreUberfest Round 1: Burning Eyes (579 hits)
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Submitted by SandManTate (View user info) at 2008-09-26 23:40:22 EDT
-Present Day_
The flesh is cold. It has already gone through the bloated stage. When the skin split open the smell was putrid, but I didn't move the body. When the blood dried it started to flake off of the concrete, and the cushions on the couch became stiff and course, but I didn't try to clean it up.
The cunt deserves it.
*FUCKING BITCH!*
The force of thought surprises, even me. It has been three weeks already, but the anger is still hot; even if her skin isn't anymore.
*All she had to do was try to listen. All she had to do was pretend to understand.*
-Three Weeks Earlier-
"I don't want to get to know your friends right now. I want to spend time with you; get to know you" I reasoned.
"It'll only be a couple of hours, I'll have some drinks with my girls, and then we'll spend the rest of the night at my place; Just the two of us." She leaned against the jam of my bedroom door; arms folded. Her whole posture was condescending, as if nobody could be more childish than me.
"What am I supposed to do for those two hours? I don't know anybody there, and you'll be busy drinking with your friends. I'm just going to sit there, staring at the fucking wall while a bunch of strangers watch a baseball game."
"You could try to be social. You could watch the game too. Besides, I'll talk to you."
"You didn't talk to me the last time we met up with a group of your friends. You hardly even looked at me, almost as if you were embarrassed of me. Besides, you know that I don't watch sports. Why can't we just stay at my place? I'll cook us dinner."
"Why does this have to be a big fucking deal?" She yelled. "Why do you have to act like a child about this?"
"I'm not acting like a child!" My voice broke on the last word. Shit. I was starting to get upset. "Why can't you see where I'm coming from on this?"
"You are acting like a child, you shit!" Her face was turning red as she screamed. Why was she screaming? Why did it go this route? "Quit acting like a bitch."
"How am I acting like a bitch?" I screamed.
"Don't you fucking yell at me, you passive aggressive pussy!" She walked up to me and put a finger in my chest. "I don't have to put up with this horse shit. I said that I was going to spend time at my friend's house. If you want to spend time with me, then you'll grow the fuck up and come with me."
"You raised your voice at me first, you hypocritical twat." I railed, "Take you finger out of my chest, and watch your language. We are all both adults here."
"Fuck off you little twit."
She started to take a step around me, and head for the door. My hand shot out and grabbed her upper arm. I squeezed; not enough to hurt, but enough to let her know that I meant for her to stop.
"We're fucking talking here. Don't fucking walk out on me." I snapped.
I didn't see her move, but I felt the slap across my cheek. I also felt the wetness in my eye where she spat at me.
Before my mind became conscience of the action, my hand balled into a fist, and connected with her mouth.
A rivulet of blood dribbled down the middle of her lip where my blow had split the skin.
It felt GOOD. I felt powerful.
*If the bitch won't listen to words, she'll listen to my fucking fists*
I punched her again, across the cheek and watched her head snap to the side. Letting go of her arm, I clenched my other fist and knocked her head back around. There was already a bruise forming on her cheek bone.
Her eyes... oh her fucking eyes! They bored into me, and they burned with... respect?
*Burning eyes,* I thought. *I'll make sure it's respect.*
I hit her again. And again. And again.
-Present Day-
My knuckles are covered with scabs. They were pouring blood by the time I had exhausted myself. She had stopped breathing some time earlier. I'll never know exactly when.
Her eyes are still open, but they don't burn anymore. They stare blankly at the wall.
Her body is covered with a blanket, and there is a small space heater positioned next to her hips. I reach over to turn it off, and I kneel in front of her. I pull the blanket off, revealing her naked hips.
I slide my oiled penis into her warmed pussy. It's just about the right temperature.
I know that people are looking for her, and eventually they'll find her here with me. Until then, I'll fuck this bitch just like she needs it.
As I begin to thrust, her head shifts slightly. I look into her eyes... oh those fucking eyes.
They look like they are burning as I orgasm.
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Submitted by samjohn (user info) at 2008-11-19 14:30:54 EST (#)
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Submitted by sandmantate (user info) at 2008-10-20 15:19:58 EDT (#)
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Oh, are we doing the thing where you go thru all my posts and give them a -2? You're so original and intimidating!
Submitted by stucker (user info) at 2008-10-20 14:53:05 EDT (#)
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Well this sure was a waste of whatever amount of time it took to write it.
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2008-10-14 20:17:54 EDT (#)
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Whyfore was I unaware of this???
Oh yeah, because I was on vacation.
Submitted by johnnybegood (user info) at 2008-10-09 10:23:27 EDT (#)
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wow this was awful
Submitted by John_H_Kim (user info) at 2008-09-30 12:24:30 EDT (#)
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The spelling/grammar was a bit distracting but it was overall a good read.
Submitted by Desz (user info) at 2008-09-29 15:43:39 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2008-09-29 10:56:14 EDT (#)
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this fell pretty flat for me.
Submitted by billrhine (user info) at 2008-09-28 12:44:26 EDT (#)
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Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-09-27 09:11:26 EDT (#)
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Submitted by FALLEN (user info) at 2008-09-27 03:14:10 EDT (#)
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needs more r...
nevermind.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-09-27 02:18:05 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-09-27 01:46:08 EDT (#)
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*mean*
Fucking typos.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-09-27 01:45:11 EDT (#)
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Submitted by sandmantate (user info) at 2008-09-27 01:38:33 EDT (#)
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Bubba, I'm not Jack. Go hover over there.
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Son, you are 100% correct: You are NOT Jack. You and Doodles together multiplied by the speed of light wouldn't be as big as a small wart on Jack's ass. I maean that in the nicest possible way... :)
Submitted by sandmantate (user info) at 2008-09-27 01:38:33 EDT (#)
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Bubba, I'm not Jack. Go hover over there.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-09-27 01:29:00 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-09-27 00:59:25 EDT (#)
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You fail at the English language
atrocious grammar
and not that well done over-all.
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English critiques from a retard.
"Overall" is one word. No hyphen required.
:)
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-09-27 00:59:25 EDT (#)
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You fail at the English language
atrocious grammar
and not that well done over-all.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-09-27 00:38:34 EDT (#)
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Before my mind became conscience of the action, my hand balled into a fist, and connected with her mouth.
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*conscious*
Also, this was not in the realm of grUeberfest gruesome, this was simple spousal abuse. Hence, the -2.
Sorry.
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2008-09-27 00:36:56 EDT (#)
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Behram, an Indian thug, holds the record for most murders by a single individual. He strangled 931 people between 1790-1840 with a piece of yellow and white cloth, called a ruhmal. The most murders by a woman are 612, by Countess Erzsebet Bathory of Hungary.