Grueberfest Round 3 - false hope (402 hits)
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Submitted by Desz (View user info) at 2008-10-12 23:55:37 EDT
Crawling to the light, she is almost there. Slowly crawling trough the vent not to make any sound and give away her location.
She doesn't know how long she was there for, he always kept the light on and there was no other way to know. Always with the light, the music and the constant dripping of the water, more then enough to make most people crazy but for her it was the best place in there. It was the only place he wouldn't hurt her, the place where she slept on the bed from steel with the concrete walls and the brick floor. The only decoration in there was a little dent in the wall with the dried blood. Her predecessor must have slammed her head there until she died, something which many of times she wanted to do.
The light is getting closer she will be there soon. Back to her life! She starts to smell fresh air and it delights her. Clutching the knife she used to stab him she looks at it and sees a little blood still dripping down from it. She knows it wasn't a fatal wound, but enough to give her a head start.
All the chambers she has seen and the things he has done to her, they are unbelievable she never knew people were able to do such horrible acts, but maybe she worries more about the chambers she hadn't seen. There were times when she was made to step out of the room and he would drug her, only to wake up some time later with no feeling in her body and tubes going in to her with food and water.
There is the end of the light, she steps out of the vent and looks around. She is in the middle of the forest. Not knowing where to go she just starts running.
The rape was the worst part, he would do so many disgusting things to her. She can't even think about it without feeling the need to throw up. She was a beautiful woman first, but after all the things he did the beatings the torture and the "operations" she was a hideous sight. But only after she started to get so hideous the raping started.
After running some time she stops at a patch of water and drinks some, the water tastes foul but at least she knows there are no drugs inside. She looks at the water and sees her reflection. She is scared, she had always know what he did to the rest of her body because she could see it, But this is the first time she could see her face.
She starts crying, this is the first time she really cried since she was first taken. She finally realizes what happened; it is not a bad dream anymore. How can I go back to my life like this? My boyfriend will never want me like this! How can anyone love me like this! She is crying even more now. Ever since he took her she had been living with the hope that if she escaped she could go back to her life.
She cuts her wrists and feels the last bit of her live seeping out of her, that patch of water she just drunk from turns to a deep red color. And just before she lets out her last breath she sees him standing behind her, unzipping his pants for the last time.
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Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2008-10-14 13:43:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Not much story here...
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-10-13 09:16:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Desz (user info) at 2008-10-13 06:45:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-10-13 18:29:41 WST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ok, I know why it is done, suspense, story continuaton etc. I am just saying, if it were me, I'd smash their skull into a million pieces, hack off all their limbs and burn their torso to ashers, you know, just to be sure and all.
Don't get exasperated, I gave you a +2. And 'they' all do it.
Especially in films. Some chick knocks her captor out and runs down a tunnel and you just KNOW he is gonna wake up and limp chase after her.
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hehe i know what your talking about, i won't go into the big scary house on the top of that hill in the first place. but i had no idea where i was going with it so yeah, just left him in there so i could play wiht the story a little.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-10-13 06:29:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Ok, I know why it is done, suspense, story continuaton etc. I am just saying, if it were me, I'd smash their skull into a million pieces, hack off all their limbs and burn their torso to ashers, you know, just to be sure and all.
Don't get exasperated, I gave you a +2. And 'they' all do it.
Especially in films. Some chick knocks her captor out and runs down a tunnel and you just KNOW he is gonna wake up and limp chase after her.
Submitted by Desz (user info) at 2008-10-13 05:56:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
This really irks me but why, in horror/thriller stories/films, when the victim gets the chance to slay their captor, instead of caving in their skull and doing the job properly, do they leave them semi fucking conscious?
I know it adds to suspense, etc, but it is shockingly dumbass.
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well if she killed him she coulden't get raped again by him, and i didn't feel like making a new character. so i guess you could say that were lazy writers?
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-10-13 05:33:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
john terry is cack
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-10-13 05:30:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This really irks me but why, in horror/thriller stories/films, when the victim gets the chance to slay their captor, instead of caving in their skull and doing the job properly, do they leave them semi fucking conscious?
I know it adds to suspense, etc, but it is shockingly dumbass.
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2008-10-13 02:36:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fuckin' A.
Rapin' A, in fact.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2008-10-13 02:06:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
If prose could be horrifying this would be it.
Auto Electroprose +2
Submitted by Desz (user info) at 2008-10-12 23:59:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
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