Thupa: Gone (668 hits)
Category: NoneLabels: poetry
Rating: 1.8 on 31 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Sacrilicious (View user info) at 2008-12-18 23:56:32 EST
I did not think of you today.
Your absence went unnoticed,
there was no strange void to fill.
Around the table, there was no empty chair.
There were no furtive glances-
no feigned, sick smiles
to distract from your absence.
I did not think about your ugly, inked skin,
or the stench of a thousand cigarettes.
There was no mention of hard time,
of money, or grief, or neglect.
There were no whispers tonight
beneath the clanking of dishes,
or behind a half-closed door.
When I sang, it was not in spite of you
and the gravel in your voice
was missed by no one.
I did not think of you today.
And I think you should know-
the little boy who just turned ten
did not think of you, either.
User Reviews
Submitted by sketch9 (user info) at 2009-04-01 21:00:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
suck. full of suck.
Submitted by beeltea (user info) at 2008-12-29 01:54:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
If everybody is okay with it, and since there were so many forfeits in round two, I can put Saccy up against JoeyG (who both forfeited but expressed interest in still playing) for the "highest loser bracket" for round three. Deadline would be tomorrow, 11:59 EST. Let me know.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2008-12-21 19:36:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
very good.
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2008-12-21 19:31:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
ooh, rarely do I like poetry but I liked this one. Well done!
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2008-12-21 18:50:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
:)
Submitted by marginwalker (user info) at 2008-12-21 15:32:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Yes.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-12-19 23:27:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
My demented opinion tells me two things:
1) Poetry should rhyme. It doesn't have to, but it should.
2) Poetry should evoke sentimental (emotional) feelings.
I can deal with the lack of #1. You took #2 to new heights.
Well done.
Psssttt!! Are you employed yet, or fucking off like the rest of us?
Submitted by Lib (user info) at 2008-12-19 19:44:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by shadow (user info) at 2008-12-19 17:48:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn, that was actually kinda heart-string-pulling.
PRETTY GOOD for the last minute :D
Submitted by RoadSong (user info) at 2008-12-19 17:26:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2008-12-19 14:57:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
luverly.
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-12-19 14:13:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Nephews are awesome, I'm going to play with mine this weekend!
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2008-12-19 14:11:57 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2008-12-19 13:48:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
wait, you gots kid?
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2008-12-19 12:58:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Also, I'm glad that you sang for no other reason than because it felt good :)
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2008-12-19 12:56:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I did in fact think of you :)
Went for drinks with Rob last night. We came to the quick conclusion that you rock. Then we rolled around naked in a field of daisies because that's not gay at all.
Submitted by Yozz (user info) at 2008-12-19 10:11:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm only leaving this +2 because I feel a compulsion to fit in wherever I am.
Submitted by rubbermaid (user info) at 2008-12-19 09:55:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Not quite as good as mine but nice.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2008-12-19 09:49:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-12-18 23:58:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I just got home, with a few minutes to spare before deadline.
This is more a description of my night than anything else.
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Look at you, Ms. 11th Hour.
I WROTE MINE IN A FEW MINUTES TOO. RUSHED LAST MINUTE WRITING FTW!
PS - My entry was a description of your night too.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2008-12-19 09:01:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2008-12-19 07:56:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You have a kid? Ferreal?
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2008-12-19 07:12:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2008-12-19 06:35:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
The other day, upon the stair...
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-12-19 04:25:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2008-12-19 03:35:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
sad :(
Submitted by BranDo (user info) at 2008-12-19 03:22:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
desolation rocks.
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2008-12-19 03:20:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2008-12-19 00:18:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
nothing to say.
Submitted by beeltea (user info) at 2008-12-19 00:06:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
wow way to wait until the last moment... I thought everybody's phavorite philly phanatic had phorpheited.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2008-12-19 00:02:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
THIS IS BULLSHIT COMPARED TO MY MASTERPIECE WHICH YOU HAVE YET TO RATE. I THOUGHT WE WERE FRIENDS?
YOUR CHRISTMAS CARD IS GETTING PULLED. UNLESS YOU EMAIL ME YOUR ADDRESS AGAIN SO I CAN PROPER SEND IT.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2008-12-18 23:58:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I just got home, with a few minutes to spare before deadline.
This is more a description of my night than anything else.