THUPA-R3: "Tonight Is Not Enough" (audio) (502 hits)
Category: Sound & MusicRating: 1.21 on 21 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by kaos-king (antius777) (View user info) at 2009-01-04 17:33:01 EST
Both Scourge and I planned on cheating this round. Why? Because, um... well, we're both cheaters.
Anyhow, my attempt at cheating may have backfired as the mic I used was a piece of shit.
The vocal recording was altered along with music added. (don't worry, I didn't sing.)
It's a lil' over 2 minutes long and builds as it it goes.
I expect a flurry of critiques on this one...
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Tonight Is Not Enough
If you can't find your way,
Make a home here in my arms.
I know you've been fighting for a long time,
And that it taste like war on your tongue, but
It's sweet to me...
Just close those eyes and let go.
There's space for you to sleep here again.
I've got a blanket made from miracles, and
A pillow filled with wishes whispered.
So watch your head, lay it down
Promises can wait another day.
For tonight is not enough
So shine on in that manner so delicate,
Shine on and gather the memories about your skirt.
Wave goodbye to all those monstrous days,
Those times filled with the most hollow of words.
I want to see you last longer than anything alive,
Forgotten by no one but me.
And I won't fight the shadows or the cold.
So don't yield
Or let the earth consume.
We have only minutes left now,
And we're only a few kisses away.
Tonight was never meant to fill us,
It was only meant to fail...
Tonight Is Not Enough.mp3 (2 MB) [audio/mpeg]
User Reviews
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2009-01-05 23:08:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Didn't listen to it. Yet.
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2009-01-05 17:36:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2009-01-05 17:36:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2009-01-05 17:35:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2009-01-05 17:35:19 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2009-01-05 17:19:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Ah Hadley... you just couldn't resist, could you?
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2009-01-05 14:29:26 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I kept waiting for Crow and tom Servo to pipe up over the horrible B movie soundtrack. Since they didn't...well....
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2009-01-05 09:49:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Typical, no contest is complete without a final barage of alters trying to fuck it up.
Submitted by baby (user info) at 2009-01-05 05:05:14 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
YourNameHere cares very deeply about internet poetry contests! Best not to type too much with it, whoever owns it, you might accidentally drop a 'GET THE PICTURE, DIPSHIT!' or a few thousand emoticons if you're not careful.
LOL!
Submitted by Banjo (user info) at 2009-01-05 03:48:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm pretty sure I rated this last night... wtf???
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-01-05 03:02:29 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
amazing
p.s i havent listened
Submitted by YourNameHere (user info) at 2009-01-05 02:44:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2009-01-04 22:59:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by shadow (user info) at 2009-01-04 22:26:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You're a special boy.
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2009-01-04 21:37:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2009-01-04 20:38:47 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
No Comment
Submitted by RoadSong (user info) at 2009-01-04 20:35:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2009-01-04 20:18:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I am reminded of a Laurie Anderson piece, which I consider utterly awesome. I'd +3 this if I could, and add that this is why voicewhored free(er)form poetry is better simply posted words for us non-poets.
I dunno if it was my download, but the recitation started with the center and finished with the top, never getting to the bottom.
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2009-01-04 20:06:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2009-01-04 18:22:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
pfffft...you call this cheating?
just wait. another half hour of polish and your face is going to be fucking rocked off by my post.
+2 for now.
if i start losing, i'll be back with my -2 gun.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2009-01-04 17:36:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Oh.
Um... it's quite loud.