A Melancholy Rebellion Pt.1 (442 hits)
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Submitted by R@GD0LL (View user info) at 2009-01-07 22:19:58 EST
It was a hallway. A clean hallway with a white tile floor, in which I awoke from a dream. A most disturbing dream. A dream when thought to long about simply causes confusion as a deeper meaning and understanding is struggled for. Useless, and repugnant. I could smell sickness and half filled bed pans. The hall looked as if it went on forever, and behind me there was a door. Tall and dark, the solid wood had carvings up and down it. Are those smurfs? Little demon-esque creatures frolicking through ice and fire. How morbid. I looked back down the hall, the tiles continued on forever or so it seemed, but what was that dark spot in the distance? Perhaps I should try the door. It was locked, so I peered through the window. Strange, I hadn't remembered a window. Where were the carvings? This door is blue. Out side of the window I could see people walking by with great haste. I pounded on the glass and yelled, but no one noticed. I knew they could hear me, I could here their feet tap, tap, tapping as they shuffled by. It was like they couldn't even see me. Perhaps it was just mine own curiosity that caused me to look when i passed an open window. I would have noticed surely someone hollering from within. Although, it was quite odd that i couldn't see any of their faces. Even from a distance and incoming, they looked to be looking away.
I turned back around and the dark spot, on the ground once before was now much clearer, as if it had sneaked up closer as I was looking the other direction. As I approached it I could see that it was not merely a dark spot but rather a hole that looked to descend a very long way. As I peered over the edge a staircase revealed itself to me. It was a very old staircase and it descended for what looked like miles. Dark, ominous and dank. At the very bottom a light glowed and shadows danced on the far below. This staircase brought a deep burning fear to the pit of my stomach. i would try my luck with the door some more. I turned around again, only to find there was no door at all, only just a wall. I turned around again, and the hallway was no longer a hallway but a small closet of a room with a wall and a staircase and frightened and confused old man. "I supposed I'll have to take the stairs" I muttered to myself. as i prepared to take the first step.
The first step turned into three, then four and the farther down the hole I went the dimmer the light became in the brightly lit hallway. Soon the hallway had disappeared altogether, and starting to figure out this place I reached my arm up and touched the murky ceiling. There were torches along the wall as it spiraled down and down and paintings of great kings of men. All smiling, in their beautiful gowns and armor. This did not last long however, as the farther down and down i went the more twisted their faces became. From happy, to somber, to sad, then angry I was stared down at by faces that were hot with rage. That's when the footsteps began. At first they were very soft, almost unnoticeable in the distance. They were closing quickly and i wasn't sure if i wanted to stick around to meet them. Soon I could see shadows stretching along the walls, the creatures were humanoid with horns and swords that curved like scimitars. I made haste in the direction that I had just come. The pictures were no laughing and the echoing of their evil gaffaws rang in my ears as i ran. Up and up, as fast as i could go but the footsteps were nearing ever faster, and though I was too afraid to look behind i could feel their presence so near. The pictures laughed ever harder and it looked as if they were coming out of their frames, reaching and grabbing at my clothes.
I reached the top but their was no ceiling as I had expected to cower like a scared puppy until the creatures reached me. To strike me down with their pointed blades. No, the stair stood open at the top, the walls were gone and I looked out into space as I struggled not to fall. My wedding ring slipped from my finger and tumbled into nothingness. Disappearing into darkness. My eyes were widened with fear, and then something pushed me, but I had no breath left to scream. I fell, and fell and then I was floating, and swirls of color wrapped around me. Green and blue lace snaked around my arms and legs and when I began to think that it might just be beautiful they tightened around my limbs so that i could no longer move.
A light switched on and i was lying in a chair, the light so bright I could barely keep my eyes open. In front of me was a television. The fuzz on the screen began to clear and I could make out a man's face. He was spectacled, with gray hair and had a tiny tuft of a beard upon his chin. He looked like a skinny Colonel Sanders. "Welcome to this place..." he spoke and then he smiled.
User Reviews
Submitted by sage104 (user info) at 2009-01-08 11:33:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Bad side-scroll. BAD!!
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2009-01-08 10:53:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
auto +2 for rebellious formatting
Submitted by Vas_Deferens (user info) at 2009-01-08 06:24:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
http://www.ubersite.com/m/59757#1243178
I'm plus two'ing you because...well.....god dammit just because I feel obliged. anyway fuck you.
*dusts hands*
well THAT feels better.
Oh, and FUCK your story.
Submitted by SilentRenegade (user info) at 2009-01-08 05:50:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I don't understand what happened....I had separate paragraphs... I was even sure to press space four times for each one.... Hmm, well that sucks.... and thanks Experima you are a true lady.... and bubba too.... I deserve shitty reviews for grammatical errors but story is still good isn't it?
Submitted by SilvrWolf (user info) at 2009-01-08 04:28:36 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Dear Paragraphs,
I miss you dearly. Please come back to me.
Love,
SilvrWolf
P.S. Tell resize he can come back, too.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-01-08 03:06:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
what about a picture?
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2009-01-08 00:40:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
you're a pathetic, retalling-over-someone-else's-post-whom-you-don't-know-personally pussy.
god i hope you're my friend in real life.
we'll have such a laugh.
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2009-01-08 00:38:35 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by YourNameHere (user info) at 2009-01-07 21:18:11 PST (#)
Ranking: 2
Jesus Christ, what a stupid twat.
Who the fuck cares who wrote it you dumb bitch?
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who the fuck cares what an alter thinks about what someone else thinks on one website out of a billion others on the internet?
Submitted by cheerios (user info) at 2009-01-08 00:26:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by YourNameHere (user info) at 2009-01-08 00:18:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Jesus Christ, what a stupid twat.
Who the fuck cares who wrote it you dumb bitch?
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2009-01-07 23:34:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
well hang on, it's SilentRenegade.
I'll offset myself since I like you and had no idea this wasn't some wank alter noob.
learn to format though, ffs.
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2009-01-07 23:28:16 EST (#)
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oh brother, bubba
it's a rite of passage.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2009-01-07 23:25:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2009-01-07 23:23:00 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
OMG MY EYES
HOLY BIG BLOCK OF TEXT BATMAN
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Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2009-01-07 22:34:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
After 58 posts I'd think you knew how to transfer from Word to the submit box without losing paragraphs. This +2 is for the story, misspellings and all. Get your shit together.
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I fucking give up. I try to be nice and am offset. Fuck this place.
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2009-01-07 23:23:00 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
OMG MY EYES
HOLY BIG BLOCK OF TEXT BATMAN
Submitted by Desz (user info) at 2009-01-07 22:53:20 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Canon EOS 400D nice camera.. learn to use it?
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2009-01-07 22:37:36 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
AWESOME PARAGRAPH, DUDE!
(Fucking idiot)
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2009-01-07 22:35:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
All right. Her story checks out.
-- Homer Simpson
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2009-01-07 22:34:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
After 58 posts I'd think you knew how to transfer from Word to the submit box without losing paragraphs. This +2 is for the story, misspellings and all. Get your shit together.