The Battle (386 hits)
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Submitted by GreaterThanBest (View user info) at 2009-02-12 14:52:30 EST
The beginning starts better then the end, things are simple when we start, to end is horrid. At first there is no wrong, but in the end all the mistakes have to be corrected, if not, happiness and piece of mind will be....NEVERMORE
We join The Great Floatie on this day, the journey is his, we are but along for the ride. Today he will lead his army, men among boys, into a great battle that will decide the fates of those to come for many years after the passing of The Great Floatie. He shouts encouragement while praising the warriors for their implacable stature.
"Today, for this day we will be remembered as the GREATS, as the ONES, as INVINCIBLE, we will succeed, we will change the world, we will live in infamy!"
The cheers sounded off; there was not a doubt in any mind of the success they would have at the break of dawn, every mind except one.
At this moment we join The Great Floatie alone in his tent, do not speak, one must not disturb the mind of man that rest in turmoil.
"What have I done, why am I here?"
"I know what lies in wait for the poor souls I lead"
"But how can I tell them"
"They must never know"
"But if I dare say nothing, then they will all be cursed"
"No one will be saved, life will end tomorrow. And tomorrow I will rest in HELL"
"I could tell them I'm a fool, but surely I would be slaughter in minutes for the treacherous acts I have forced them to complete"
"But if I keep quite, we will all be slaughter by the break of noon."
"What must I do?"
The chirping birds awake the hideous soul on the eve of the great battle. His soldiers have already begun to rustle about, within moments the columns will be formed and the mighty army will wait for The Great Floatie to lead them to their destiny.
Deathly white he strides to head of this great force, were he must give his last and final speech. The choice of topics are thin, to admit he is a fool and take his punishment accordingly or to go forth and lead the unwittingly force to their doom.
One last swallow before he determines his destiny, the end is here either way, he knows this. The question he must face is to either die by the hands he has created as a truthful and just man or to die with the rest as a fool that will live in the grace of everyone NEVERMORE
With his final command he seals what is left of his life into a never-ending torment of conscious revelations
"CHARGE!!!!!!"
Sometimes it's better to taste the knife of the enemy rather than the distrust of a friend.
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Submitted by TheGoat (user info) at 2009-02-18 18:56:07 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaarggggggggggggggggggggggggggghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
Submitted by Maddog (user info) at 2009-02-13 18:03:08 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Ahhh, the "Great Floatie"
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Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2009-02-13 17:50:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
uh......what?
Submitted by secret_of_nimh (user info) at 2009-02-13 17:33:55 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
No Comment
Submitted by BranDo (user info) at 2009-02-13 09:30:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
have you been in prison for 5 years?
Submitted by SilentRenegade (user info) at 2009-02-12 18:26:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
so so many grammatical and spelling errors... good attempt at a message but there could have been alot more descriptive phrases to make it a little more interesting...
Submitted by SilvrWolf (user info) at 2009-02-12 17:51:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by RoadSong (user info) at 2009-02-12 16:11:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
"The Great Floatie"
This is the silliest shit ..and it made me smile.
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2009-02-12 16:04:52 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
"But if I keep quite, we will all be slaughter by the break of noon."
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This is unreadable and drags the reaminder, however good it might have been, five day's march into the realm of suck.
Submitted by FALLEN (user info) at 2009-02-12 15:51:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I only skimmed.
I hate a void.