Serious writings HIGH SCHOOL REVENGE (1176 hits)
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Submitted by locksly (View user info) at 2009-08-05 08:09:39 EDT
Harry Foreman strole down the street with not a care in the world
"phee phee phee" he whistled as he walked to the local jewelery store in the small mountain town he had lived in his whole life. Today was not like a normal day for Harry as he was picking out an engagement ring.
RING
The door to the jewelery store had an old fashioned bell on it like in days gone by. Chuck was behind the counter.
"Hi Harry" Said Chuck who had gone to High School and played football with Harry "How goes it?"
"Swell, just swell Chuck" Said Harry, beaming from ear to ear. "I need an engagement ring!"
"An engagement ring... but" Stammered Chuck as he stared at his old friend with a puzzled look on his face. The puzzled look you see was because he too was going to buy an enegement ring today....
FLASHBACK TO HIGH SCHOOL
Harry and Chuck are in the lockeroom after practice, they are teasing another boy, who is smaller than them.
"YOU BLEW THE GAME DWEEB" Yelled Harry at Wendell.
"Don't say that leave me alone" The small boy replied weakly.
"We were about to win, we had a Special Move the 'DOUBLE 2 - 69' and you scored an own goal" said Chuck in a low monotone voice. "And today there was scouts from the big university here to watch me play".
"I'm SORRY" Cried Wendell or lil faggot, as the other boys on the team liked to call him. "I tried my best"
"Yeah, well we're gonna try our best too" Said Harry, picking up a crowbar "Our best to beat you up" said Chuck as he picked up a metal chain that was lying on the lockeroom floor.
The two boys had been working on a signature move called the 'DOUBLE 2 - 69' which, if they had pulled it off in the dying minutes of the big game , would have scored them both scholarships. Now Wendell had blown their chances so they were going to blow him.
They menacingly walked up to Wendell, BANG "take that" Harry started beating the small skinny boy.
"AHHHH you're hurting me stop it its just a game" screamed the girlish Wendell in pain,
"JUST A GAME? JUST A GAME? I MISSED OUT ON MY SCHOLARSHIP FAGGOT IMA KEEL YOU" an enraged Chuck swung the metal chain over his head and into Wendells body over and over again.
The beating lasted for 10 minutes , to add final insult to poor Wendell they each kicked him once really really hard in the Weiner and nads.
When the ambulance arrived little Wendell claimed he had been hurt in the game. The coach never questioned it because he wanted to protect his good players and besides, 'that kid is a dirty fag' the coach reasoned to himself. Wendell was hospitalised for months, he never finished school and his parents moved away soon after. He spent years undergoing various operations to repair his face and body. Sometimes he looked in the mirror and didn't even recognise himself. His weiner could never be fixed. "I seek revenge on those Jocks, they'll pay" Wendell would repeat over and over as he learnt to walk again.
FAST FORWARD BACK TO THE JEWELERRY STORE
"I just met my dreamgirl she is perfect and we are to be engaged" Boasted Harry.
"But Dude, so am I! I met the best girl in the whole world and I also am going to marry her" Said an astonished Chuck.
"Hey lets have a double wedding" they both said at the same time. Man, they both thought, life is perfect.
Neither of them could beleive their luck or the coincedence. As they chatted they realised that they had both only met their girls the day before, and as they described her it was as if they were talking about twins.
'MEET ME AT THE FOOTBALL BLEACHES' read the text message that Harry received. He quickly picked his ring and told Chcuk he had to go. Chuck said nothing as he rung up the purchase, he just had a funny look on his face. For he had received the same text message but he didn't tell Harry that. He was starting to think that something funny was going on... He closed the store and played with his ring that he had been up on all night pounding and pounding to make perfect for his new bride. In the ring he had inscribed her name. Wendy.
FOOTBALL BLEACHERS
"Oh Harry I missed you" Grinned Wendy with a smile on her face "Where have you been?"
"Oh Wendy relax I'll tell you soon, what are we doing here? Why did you tell me to come?" Asked Harry.
"I thought it was romantic thats all" Wendy looked around nervously "Are you here alone? I am scared, a weird guy is after me and you must protect me his name is Chuck"
"Ok I will" Said Harry who wondered if Chuck was perhaps his friend Chuck - that'd be strange but I'll protect my Wendy no matter what he thought.
"Good, you wait here and I'll be right back" Wendy had spotted Chuck walking nearby, for her plan to work she needed to tell Chuck the same thing about Harry.
"Chuck" Whispered Wendy as she ran up to him while Harry was out of sight near the bleachers. "Some weird guy is after me called Harry he is at the bleachers go get him".
Chuck had known something was up, Harry and his story had been too similar, Harry must have met Wendy last night and got the wrong impression. Now Chuck was gonna take him. All the way down. right down. Down.
Harry turned to see Chuck just metres away, by the look in his eyes he was crazy, he looked to his right and found a metal crow bar, he didn't have time to realise he had held this very same crow bar before.
"AHHH take that bitch take it all" screamed Chuck as he landed a blow on Harrys Jaw. "Shes mine Harry Wendy is mine"
Harry hit Chuck hard and Chuck fell to the ground, on the ground he found a metal chain. Aha he thought I've used one of these before...
As the men fought on they both remembered playing their final football game in high school and the beating they gave Wendell all those years ago.
"Hey" said Harry as they traded blows "What ever happened to that Wendell kid?"
"I don't know" said Chuck as he wound the chain up for a headshot "He moved away and we NEVER saw him again"
"OH DIDN'T YOU?" Yelled Wendy from the bleachers.
Both men stopped, they panted heavily and blood flowed freely from their many multiple wounds. Without urgent treatment they had just minutes to live. For Harry it was slowly falling into place, Somehow Wendy had set them both up to meet here and fight, thats why the crowbar felt familiar. It was the same weapon he had USED ON WENDELL! all those years ago. Was Wendy really Wendell?
"You two jocks picked on me for years, I was ridiculed and laughed at" Said Wendy. "You two were the reason I never got laid in school or had any friends, I even joined the team to be friends with you, but when I lost the big game you beat me mercilessly and never thought about me again"
Harry and Chuck nodded.
"But I thought about YOU!" Wendy the Wendell pulled out a gun and shot them both in the knee.
"Ouch" they cried in unison.
"The day I woke from my coma I thought about you!" listed Wendy "When they said I had to learn to walk again, when they said my weiner had to go, when there was no green grapes but only the red ones with seeds in it, when they told me I needed plastic surgery on my face - I THOUGHT OF YOU".
"Thats why I got my plastic surgery to look like a girl and had my weiner removed" continued Wendy "And I when I learnt to walk again, I learnt in Jimmy Choos Motherfucker!"
BANG BANG BANG Wendy pumped shots into their legs.
"Ah this hurts a lote more now, you set us up to bash eath other like we bashed you and now you're getting revenge by shooting us!" Said Harry as the pain gripped his body.
"Yes you taught us a lesson, but call an ambulance please!" Said Chuck desperately.
"Never, destiny has been fulfilled lolz" Said Wendy laughing crazily.
Suddenly Harry noticed a football lying near Chuck, he had a plan!
"Chuck, CHUUUUCKKKK!" Yelled Harry.
"What Harry? I am sorry this happened at least we will die together" said Chuck
"Not today Chuck, NOT TODAY" Harry pointed at the football, he nodded at Chuck "DOUBLE 2 69 Chuck, DOUBLE 2 69"
Of course! thought Chuck - their old playing trick, they never got a chance to use it in the final game, now if Chuck could... just... There! got it.
"I got the ball!"
"That ball won't save you now" Said Wendy as the enraged he she loaded a new clip.
Chuck threw the ball, knocking the gun from Wendys hands, the gun fell to the ground and Harry caught it on the bounce, he pointed it at Wendys head and looked at Chuck.
"Yo, you forgot your boarding pass" said Chuck as he nodded to Harry as Harry unloaded into her upper body. POP POP POP the gun blasted again and again. knocking her back and onto the bleachers.
"Ah you got me" Said Wendy with her last breathe and she died on the spot.
Chuck and Harry looked at each other and smiled. Suddenly the area packed with people, they were running from the highschool.
"Gosh damn darnit what happened here, what happened darnit?" Said the boys old coach as the school principal and all the football players appeared. They were all getting warmed up on the other side of the school for the big football game, and had run when they heard the noise. This was the final game for the high school year and there were scouts from all the big universities there.
"Get an ambulance we're hurt pretty bad but we'll be okay" said Harry, "We killed Wendy in self defence"
"You two look guilty" said the crowd "you killed an innocent girl?"
The two men pleaded their innocence until three men spoke up.
"We saw what happened, she was going to shoot them until this man right here" one of the men pointed to Chuck "Threw a darn fine ball and knocked it out of her hands"
"thankyou sir" said Chuck
"And then this man here" said one of the men pointing at Harry "Caught the best darn catch I ever seen and shot her cold in self defence. I tell you what with accuracy like that and catching skills you'd be a darn fine footballer"
"Thankyou sir - we would have been pro's but years ago this crazy chick was a boy and he lost the game that some big scouts were gonna watch and we missed out". said a disappointed Harry.
"Well" the three men quickly huddled together and nodded "Based on the courage and skills we just saw we are prepared to offer you a second chance and you can play pro straight away"
"What how?!?" The two men were overjoyed - they had killed off Wendell and had been able to use their secret weapon the DOUBLE 2 69, now they were getting pro contracts?!
"But how? who ARE you three men?" chuck said
"You darn fools!" said their old Coach "This is thems TALENT SCOUTS!"
The two men laughed and slowly the crowd joined in, everyone clapped and cheered as the ambulance came, and when they got out of hospital they played for many years and had success with many loose women.
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Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-11 04:55:33 EDT (#)
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Submitted by odin (user info) at 2009-08-09 18:04:43 EDT (#)
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Thanks Sico!
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Submitted by test (user info) at 2009-08-08 20:41:20 EDT (#)
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Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-06 08:04:27 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2009-08-06 06:03:53 EDT (#)
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Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:23:16 EDT (#)
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Compared to the last one, this kind of sucked.
Sorry dude.
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He's right you know.
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The sequel always bombs, lets hope the third one doesn't go all Godfather 3 on me
Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-06 07:40:23 EDT (#)
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yeah but what about THIS IS THEMS TALENT SCOUT
plus 2 for ever there
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2009-08-06 06:03:53 EDT (#)
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Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:23:16 EDT (#)
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Compared to the last one, this kind of sucked.
Sorry dude.
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He's right you know.
Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-06 05:24:11 EDT (#)
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Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:59:52 EDT (#)
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Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:35:27 EDT (#)
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brilliant, simply amazing, anyone who doesnt plus 2 this is a retarded virgin.
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why bring doodles into this?
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:'(
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oh don't be like that doodlesys,
we have that back and forth realtionship.
oops not THAT kind back and forth
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2009-08-05 16:45:04 EDT (#)
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Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:59:52 EDT (#)
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Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:35:27 EDT (#)
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brilliant, simply amazing, anyone who doesnt plus 2 this is a retarded virgin.
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why bring doodles into this?
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:'(
Submitted by sage104 (user info) at 2009-08-05 15:38:47 EDT (#)
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For teh serious writings.
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2009-08-05 15:22:19 EDT (#)
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*reluctantly nods*
It's infectious.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2009-08-05 14:58:08 EDT (#)
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"The two men laughed and slowly the crowd joined in, everyone clapped and cheered as the ambulance came, and when they got out of hospital they played for many years and had success with many loose women."
You win again!
Well done, sir.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2009-08-05 14:54:57 EDT (#)
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HAHAHA!!!
Submitted by PlatinumScarecrow (user info) at 2009-08-05 14:32:49 EDT (#)
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I bow to you, sir.
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2009-08-05 13:16:46 EDT (#)
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BUT WHOM KILLED THEM AND WHY?
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2009-08-05 12:55:03 EDT (#)
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haha. what delighful trash!
Submitted by cheerios (user info) at 2009-08-05 12:31:58 EDT (#)
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excellent story....compared to the other posts on here.
Submitted by beer-turtle (user info) at 2009-08-05 09:38:16 EDT (#)
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I am having trouble believing you spent time to write this...on purpose
Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2009-08-05 09:27:34 EDT (#)
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Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2009-08-05 09:11:56 EDT (#)
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what the fuck does PLANET PISS mean?
explain?
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That's Murderface's side project. When he's not playing inaudible bass for DETHKLOK, he's jamming with PLANET PISS. I hope that clears it up for you.
Also great story. I'm glad this is turning into a writers forum again.
Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2009-08-05 09:15:15 EDT (#)
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I liked this.
It was very american.
This b grade movie called 'Bonjour Timothy' was filmed at my high school, they put 'lockers' in the corridors to make it seem more 'american'.
That was a random memory.
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2009-08-05 09:11:56 EDT (#)
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what the fuck does PLANET PISS mean?
explain?
Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:59:52 EDT (#)
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Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:35:27 EDT (#)
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brilliant, simply amazing, anyone who doesnt plus 2 this is a retarded virgin.
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why bring doodles into this?
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:50:49 EDT (#)
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This was the best writing since Shakespeare. I love you.
Submitted by firefly (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:44:17 EDT (#)
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Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:35:27 EDT (#)
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brilliant, simply amazing, anyone who doesnt plus 2 this is a retarded virgin.
Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:33:36 EDT (#)
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"This is thems TALENT SCOUTS!"
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I thought you'd like harry picking his ring
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Yeah the double entendres don't really do it for me...I just love the "darn tootins" and the "this is thems".
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You're a double entendres
Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:32:17 EDT (#)
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he is joking oh man i can't belive you thought he was serious zomg
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:27:40 EDT (#)
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Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-05 13:26:22 BST (#)
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Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:23:16 EDT (#)
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Compared to the last one, this kind of sucked.
Sorry dude.
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First one got picked up by fox for a pilot and/or possible miniseries. now i'm just trying to branch out and use the same story but with football and a transvestite
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Fair play. Good luck to you sir.
Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:26:22 EDT (#)
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Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:23:16 EDT (#)
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Compared to the last one, this kind of sucked.
Sorry dude.
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First one got picked up by fox for a pilot and/or possible miniseries. now i'm just trying to branch out and use the same story but with football and a transvestite
Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:25:02 EDT (#)
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"This is thems TALENT SCOUTS!"
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I thought you'd like harry picking his ring
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Yeah the double entendres don't really do it for me...I just love the "darn tootins" and the "this is thems".
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:23:16 EDT (#)
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Compared to the last one, this kind of sucked.
Sorry dude.
Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:22:57 EDT (#)
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Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:21:52 EDT (#)
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"This is thems TALENT SCOUTS!"
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I thought you'd like harry picking his ring
Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:21:52 EDT (#)
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"This is thems TALENT SCOUTS!"
Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:21:08 EDT (#)
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Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:12:52 EDT (#)
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Did you even read it?
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Wanted first review
Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:20:36 EDT (#)
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"We saw what happened, she was going to shoot them until this man right here" one of the men pointed to Chuck "Threw a darn fine ball and knocked it out of her hands"
"thankyou sir" said Chuck
"And then this man here" said one of the men pointing at Harry "Caught the best darn catch I ever seen and shot her cold in self defence. I tell you what with accuracy like that and catching skills you'd be a darn fine footballer"
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:16:03 EDT (#)
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to add final insult to poor Wendell they each kicked him once really really hard in the Weiner and nads.
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HAH, another gem dude
Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:12:52 EDT (#)
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Did you even read it?
Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-05 08:10:56 EDT (#)
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