serial writings BIG WAVE KALAKAUA (1215 hits)
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Submitted by locksly (View user info) at 2009-08-06 07:56:08 EDT
swoosh, the wave swept over Tommy as he dived underneath the powerful and strong Ocean waters.
Paddle, paddle, paddle, Tommy paddled hard as he positioned himself for a big wave, he stroked hard as the wave grew nearer and caught it perfectly.
Tommy always caught waves like that because he was always in the Ocean. He lived in Hawaii with his Grandfather in an old resort. The Resort was run down but Tommy often heard his Grandfather talk about the Good Ol' Days.
"We had movie stars and mob guys from here to here" His Grandfather would point from one side of the resort to the other "Marilyn Monroe blew me and JFK right there on that table you're eating lunch on" He would say.
These days the resort rarely had any guests and it hadn't made money in years, it was surrounded by newer, flashier hotels with toilets and air conditioning. That was just fine by Tommy though, because it gave him more time to surf.
He was entering a competition this weekend for best Junior surfer in the World and he was a hot local favourite to place in the top 10 - if not win!
A local wise man had told him that this weekend was the anniversary of the 100 year big Wave which came about every 100 years. The wise man had said that the legend of the 100 year wave said the wave would crash onto the sacred beach that his Grandfathers resort was built upon - Emerald Cove.
The local wise man was from a lost tribe of villagers that had been pushed off their land by greedy developers, Emerald Cove was literally their last resort and his Grandfather happily let them live in the land.
As Emerald Cove was still undeveloped it was worth much much money and the big Hotel chains were always trying to offer his Grandpops money to sell.
"I'll never sell, this is a sacred Hawaiinee beach and it will remain that way, they allowed me to build a resort here but thats all that will be done to this place - Emerald Cove" His Granpops would say every night.
Tommy was out waiting for the next wave when he noticed a big, black limousine pull up behind the small 8 room resort. A sharply dressed man got out of the limo, followed by a snappy dressing teenager - perhaps his son? Thought Tommy. He caught an awesome wave as his Grandfather went to greet them.
As Tommy cut up and sliced the wave using his special moves he noticed that his Grandfather was in some kind of bother with the man and his younger companion. He was shaking his head and pumping his fist in the air.
"oh this doesn't look good" said Tommy as he caught the next wave in and powered towards the shore.
By the time he ran up the sand the meeting looked like it was going a lot worse, the man in the suit was yelling at his grandfather!
"You listen Hard and Good old Timer" Said the man, sticking a finger in Tommys grandpops chest "I'm getting Emerald Cove whether you like it or not"
"I done told ya once and I done told ya twice" Yelled the older man, dressed in board shorts and a loud Hawaiins shirt "If have to tells ya a third time I'll tell you with my Fist!"
"NOOO!" Yelled Tommy, finally reaching the end of the sand "Your Arthritis and gout Pop! its gonna hurt"
"You are lucky my Grandson who loves surfing is here, other wise I'd have made you my bitch"
"We'll see about that" Said the snappy dressed boy
"Quiet you!" Said the man in the suit who Tommy now recognised as Mr Cunthe, the Islands biggest developer. "Now I'll offer you once more 100 Million dollars or we do it the hardway, I'll let you decide"
"I say No." said Grandpop
"Ok have it your way, see I know you have a bad gambling debt, and it just so happens I own the company you got the debt with. So I'm calling the loan in!" Said Mr Cunthe.
The smaller Cunthe handed Tommy a document which said his grandpa owed 1 Million dollars from betting on Japanese table tennis tournaments. it had a signature at the bottom "Its Official Grandpops" said an astonished Tommy...
"You said you'd stop!" Yelled Tommy. "ooo i'm sorry" Said the dejected old man.
"Well time for a brady bunch moment later, you got until Sunday 5 pm to pay up or else I take the land and you get nothing" snapped Mr Cunthe
"Fuck it I'll take the 100 Million then" said grandpops.
"Too late, 1 Million by 5pm Sunday or else" said the two Cunthes in unison
"LOLZ you fools, we will have a Million on Sunday - thats the day of the surfing championships and I'm a hot young local talent picked to place in the top10 or even win, collecting the prize money of 1 Million dollars!" Tommy was a very quick thinker and had already forumlated an articulates but risky plan - (The plan is to win the championship and get the 1 Million dollars prize money)
"IDIOT" Said the younger Cunthe "I am Sean Cunthe and I'll be winning that Cup and the money, I am the best".
"Yes my Son is the best, so much the best in fact that if you win" Mr Cunthe paused to laugh out loud, "IF you win I will not only let you keep the Emerald Cove but hand over all the other sacred land that I own and you can let all the villagers move back and retun the Islands coast to a natural state. But I only offer this because I know he will Win!"
A few locals had now gathered and the limo driver as well, they formed a group around the two men and two young surfers.
"Do you really mean that?" Said The Grandfather.
"Yes we are that confident and all these people are witnesses" replied Mr Cunthe. "My son wins I get Emerald Cove. Your boy wins you get all my land I bought in shady deals so the villagers can return".
"Can ya do it boy? Can ya do it?" Said the incontinent old man. Tommy looked at the crowd and at some of the villagers faces, I gotta do this , I gotta do this, but can I? Tommy suddenly remembered what the wise old man had told him, if he was correct and not crazy This weekend would be the 100 year Big Wave, which legend dictated that , if rode, would create the most ultimate ride ever and result in a win (if the rider was in a championship).
"I am gonna do it" Said Tommy quietly. The crowd went silent - 'what'd he say' they thought. "I'm gonna fucking do it Cunt"
"Thats Cunthe" Said Sean, "And I'll fucking break you bitch, I'll fucking break you" he spat
The crowd descended into chaos as the two boys went for each other, "Save it for the water" Yelled the limo driver as he pulled the Cunthes away and into the black car "Save it for... the water".
Suddenly Sunday came the day of the Big Championship and hopefully, thought a smiling Tommy the day of the great legendary 100 year Big Wave, he has spent time with the Wise man and the Village Chief who read the ancient Banana leaf texts. "Legend has it that the wave came in at 4.45pm each 100 years so all you have to do is make sure you're in the last heat of the day." they said while smoking the special banana and marijuana leaf blend needed to help decipher the ancient texts. And bring back a giant , like fuck off size bag of cheetos, and some coconut drinks with the umbrellas". The chief had said.
FAST FORWARD TO THE LAST TWO HEATS
"Well Ladies and Gentleman this has been a fantastic day to the Junior World Championships" said the announcer "As you all know there are only two surfers left in this knockout competition and they are on equal points!"
YAY the crowd screamed for the two boys - Tommy Kalakaua and Sean Cunthe.
The Ocean was choppy and the swell built up, the waves were getting bigger and Tommy wondered if the Big Wave was coming soon, the time was 4.30 and the competition was to finish at 5 - conveniently the same time the deal between Cunthe and his granpops would end also.
The rules were simple - each boy could ride one wave each, and could go at anytime, Tommy needed Sean Cunthe to catch a wave and then he would catch the 4.45 Big Wave and win!, as the minutes ticked by Sean did not take any waves! It was pissing Tommy off hard.
Sean wanted to wait and see what trick Tommy did and then he would catch the next wave and do it better - that was his strategy, sneaky just like his dad.
Tommy decided not to care what that Sean what going to do and simply set his sights on his wristwatch, at 4.45 he was going to take a gamble and ride the first wave that came in - He assumed that would be his best chance to catch the Big Wave.
Suddenly it was 4.45! A perfect wave rose up - a bit higher than usual but Tommy knew it would grow bigger! He paddled and stroked and caught it, he triumphantly surfed and the crowd went wild but it wasn't big! Something was wrong, he surfed all the way into shore - his championship had ended and he got a 9 out of ten but where was the Big Wave? And where was Sean Cunthe?
He looked to see the crowd mesmerised, the Big Wave was coming and Sean was on it, it was the best wave ever and he surfed it perfectly even Tommy was impressed. Mr Cunthe was also equally impressed and mesmerised, the wave was magical and it was letting Sean perform any move! He was doing handstands and even the old 'pretend to hump the surfboard' trick.
It looked so much fun that Mr Cunthe remembered when he was surfer "Man I want to feel that again", he ran into the water - "hey son come pick me up and take me for a ride too!"
"Ok Dad" said Sean who kept riding the board as he got his father and they did awesome tricks together.
Suddenly the Wise man and the Chief ran up to Tommy , "Your alive!" they cried ignoring the correct use of your.
"IT appears the wave came late due to glabal warming reasons" said Professor Williams who appeared from nowhere!
"Yes, and also when we read the ancient banana texts it said that whoever rode the wave would be killed but we forget to tell you , such is the effects of the banana and marijuana leaf mix" said the Wise man.
BEEP BEEP Tommys watched beeped. "5PM ?" he said out loud
"5 PM?" said the judges "the Championship has ended you win Tommy because Sean is still riding the wave and technically has to finish the wave before 5 PM"
"DAMN YOU !" cried the Cunthes as they rode the killer wave to their deaths on the rocks, but not before everyone acknowledged that all the lands shall return to the righful Hawaiin villagers and that Tommy had saved the day, also that he got 1 Million dollars.
The crowd cheered and the day was etched into history.
Tommy had done it. He had saved the tribes and villagers and his grandfathers resort.
As he grew older he had to move to the big city to live and work.
Often in life when Tommy was up against hard times at work or with life in general, and after his Granpaps had long since passed, he remembered a simpler time, growing up on the peaceful shores of Emerald Cove, not a care in the world. A perfect life that was now a lifetime away.
At night he remembered back to that day...
"I did it" Said Tommy quietly everynight from the rooftop of his multimillion dollar apartment. a tear rolling down his cheek. "I Totally Fucking did it".
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Submitted by LoooseSprocket (user info) at 2009-08-12 12:21:45 EDT (#)
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Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-11 04:56:20 EDT (#)
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Submitted by odin (user info) at 2009-08-09 18:04:43 EDT (#)
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nope
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Thanks Sico!
Submitted by odin (user info) at 2009-08-09 18:04:25 EDT (#)
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nope
Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-08 06:08:19 EDT (#)
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did you whack some balls today stok?
Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-08 02:58:13 EDT (#)
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Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-07 10:08:50 EDT (#)
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Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2009-08-07 09:58:50 EDT (#)
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These keep getting better, I swear!
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You shouldn't swear.
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Swear jar please siocsemen
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2009-08-07 15:51:57 EDT (#)
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You did it!
YOU TOTALLY FUCKING DID IT.
Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-07 10:08:50 EDT (#)
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Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2009-08-07 09:58:50 EDT (#)
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These keep getting better, I swear!
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You shouldn't swear.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2009-08-07 09:58:50 EDT (#)
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These keep getting better, I swear!
Submitted by locksly (user info) at 2009-08-07 08:27:06 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2009-08-06 09:37:08 EDT (#)
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BEEP BEEP Tommys watched beeped. "5PM ?" he said out loud
"5 PM?" said the judges "the Championship has ended you win Tommy because Sean is still riding the wave and technically has to finish the wave before 5 PM"
"DAMN YOU !" cried the Cunthes as they rode the killer wave to their deaths on the rocks, but not before everyone acknowledged that all the lands shall return to the righful Hawaiin villagers and that Tommy had saved the day, also that he got 1 Million dollars.
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Why no posts doodles?
Submitted by cheerios (user info) at 2009-08-06 22:32:11 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Liquidice281 (user info) at 2009-08-06 15:57:55 EDT (#)
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Jesus, what is that? One thought per line?
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2009-08-06 11:44:51 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Ballare (user info) at 2009-08-06 11:37:46 EDT (#)
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ssssssssuper!
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2009-08-06 11:13:25 EDT (#)
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If 8track likes this, it must be totally retarded.
AND I WAS PREPARED TO RATE THE POST FAIRLY.
Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-06 10:05:13 EDT (#)
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"Save it for... the water"
Submitted by firefly (user info) at 2009-08-06 10:02:20 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2009-08-06 09:37:08 EDT (#)
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BEEP BEEP Tommys watched beeped. "5PM ?" he said out loud
"5 PM?" said the judges "the Championship has ended you win Tommy because Sean is still riding the wave and technically has to finish the wave before 5 PM"
"DAMN YOU !" cried the Cunthes as they rode the killer wave to their deaths on the rocks, but not before everyone acknowledged that all the lands shall return to the righful Hawaiin villagers and that Tommy had saved the day, also that he got 1 Million dollars.
Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-06 09:31:10 EDT (#)
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okay can i be serious? when i realised tommy had missed the big wave i was worried. these stories should not be so engrossing.
Submitted by 8track (user info) at 2009-08-06 09:30:30 EDT (#)
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"IDIOT" Said the younger Cunthe "I am Sean Cunthe
Submitted by august_sobriquet (user info) at 2009-08-06 09:21:52 EDT (#)
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call me a sentimental fool, but I'm a sucker for a good story with a happy ending. He won by default! Whoooo!
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-08-06 08:36:31 EDT (#)
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Japanese table tennis tournaments are risky business.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-08-06 08:30:53 EDT (#)
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brilliant, simply amazing, anyone who doesnt plus 2 this is a retarded virgin.
Submitted by Foolproof (user info) at 2009-08-06 08:13:33 EDT (#)
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"Paddle, paddle, paddle, Tommy paddled hard"