If you only read on Grueberfest 09 Rd 1entry this year.......... (451 hits)
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Submitted by TuTs (View user info) at 2009-10-07 11:31:02 EDT
It should be this one.http://www.ubersite.com/m/123403
But if you have time, maybe read this one. http://www.ubersite.com/m/123401
Then if you still have time read mine!
Alex ran away from home that night. She packed her bags and walked out determined not to come back again. What her father had done no man should do to his daughter. When she walked out she headed south, that first night. After walking for hours she found an abandoned old house sitting sedately behind some pine trees, a bit back from the street. Using a rock Alex smashed a window.
Inside it was dark. Alex walked out of the front room into a hallway, then down the back of the house where moonlight gave some illumination. She rolled out her sleeping bag and fell asleep. Strange dreams went though her head that night and after a few hours of this she awoke with a start. Alex was thirsty; she sat up and rubbed her eyes. With a shock she realised that in the corner of the room sat a man, dressed all in black.
He looked tall, well muscled and powerful. What seemed odd to Alex was that even though it was night the man wore dark shades. Alex watched him, he was sitting up, yet after what seemed like an age he hadn't moved a muscle. She assumed from where he was facing that he was also watching her.
"Who are you?" she said. "What are you doing here?"
In reaction to her questions he was on her, unzipping her sleeping bag, reaching in and fumbling with her pants. Alex in shock at first froze, gradually though she realised what he was trying to do and she flipped her body around, tearing at the carpet, pulling her body out from under his. Again at lightning speed he was up, this time though he tore her pants off her and stayed on behind her.
She could feel his erection on her, rather than being hot and throbbing though, it was cold. With another flush of strength Alex flipped her body over, trying to get up. Again he grabbed her, opening her legs and violating her. Alex punched his face, scratched him, bit and kicked, knocking his glasses off. With no more passion then he would give to an insect, he lifted his hand and hit her so hard that Alex began to pass out. Just as she drifted off, she noticed his eyes and knew that she would remember them in her nightmares.
Alex awoke, her insides were throbbing, the bright sunlight was burning her eyes and her abdomen was aching. In fact it felt as though it was bursting. Touching herself down there she gasped in shock and pain. Her stomach was swollen, hard and red. Groaning she got up, packed her things together and left the house. She began walking, her plan was to get into town and catch a bus to the city. She was starving though, before she did anything she would need something to eat.
Her favourite place in town before her mum left had been the German bakery and pie shop. They would go there every Sunday for hot rolls, her mum would have coffee Alex would drink juice. With a little bit of her precious money Alex would buy some food, then go and wait for the bus. Stepping up to the counter her vision swam, her head began to pound and with a crash she fell to the floor.
Going in and out of consciousness Alex heard snippets of conversation, "......Finally getting away from that father", ".........Trash like her mother, should leave her here", before she drifted fully away. In her mind Alex was in a cold place, it smelt like matches, there was a shivering crawling going up her back. Then he was there and his eyes were piercing her, transfixing her like a spider to its prey.
The eyes were hell, they were all pupil, yet they weren't pupil. They were Black like death, black like eternity, black like the night sky without the stars. She had to get away, she couldn't let his touch her with his ice again she needed to run. Screaming, Alex began to thrash.
"Alex, Alex? Can you hear me? Alex I need you to stop." Alex came to, she was lying in a bed and the antiseptic smell combined with the stiff sheets convinced her she was in a hospital bed. Her left arm was stinging, she was still starving and the pressure in her abdomen had gotten worse. She turned her head to the left of the bed and retched. A woman held her hair back and when Alex looked up she saw she was a doctor.
"Alex, you were brought in about an hour ago. My name is Dr Johns. I am new in town so you don't know me, but Dr Francis is on holiday, so I am taking his patients", she said. "Alex did you know you were pregnant? You are about five months along. You are also suffering from severe malnutrition, so I have you on a drip, with some sedative. I'm going to keep you here for observation for a while and then you can go home. Do you have any questions?"
Pregnant? How could she be pregnant?
"I only had my period two weeks ago, I hate be pregnant." Alex croaked.
"Well sometimes when you are young, you can have some bleeding. I can see you need to digest all this. I am going to leave you alone for a while Alex, you get some sleep. If you need anything there is a call button there and the orderlies will bring you some lunch soon." With that Dr Johns walked out of the room. The sedative took hold and Alex drifted off again.
In the dream he was there again. There was a baby crying and he was licking her with his ice tongue, rough like a cats. Then there was pain, in her abdomen, radiating wildly through her back. Blood clouded her vision and ice ran through her veins. Alex woke, screaming in agony, the room was dark, so she placed her hands on her stomach to feel the source of her pain. With shock and disgust she pulled her hands away.
Her stomach was distended, worse though there was something in it. Crawling around in there, it felt like fingernails shredding her from the inside out. She realised with growing horror what had happened, the man with eternity in her eyes had made her pregnant. She needed to get rid of it, get it out of her. Racked with pain she stood up and walked out of the room. Wandering the halls of the hospital she tried to find someone to help her, they needed to help her get this thing out of her.
Trying doors, she came to a room she recognised as the surgery room. There were medical tools arranged on a tray. Finding the one she needed she stripped herself naked, dropping her hospital gown on the floor. Holding the scalpel firmly in her hand she began to slice her stomach open, right above the pubic bone.
Screaming in agony the pain inside her got worse, the nails began to shred her insides with more viciousness then before. With renewed determination she began cutting again, determined to get this thing out of her. In her head she could hear baby's cries, screams of terror and a raspy voice telling her to stop, Stop, STOP. Ignoring the voice Alex cut and cut, until she felt the pressure inside her release and something drop to the floor and then she passed out.
Dr Johns heard screams coming from the surgical ward, running she followed the sound until she found where it was coming from. She walked in to surgical room 1, in front of her an orderly was screaming at what was on the floor. It was Alex, she was naked, her stomach a gaping hole, with an umbilicus trailing from the wound onto the floor.
"Where is the baby?" she asked the orderly.
"I don't know, there was no baby", the orderly sobbed.
Dr Johns eyes followed the bloody floor and umbilical cord, there were men's footprints walking from the mess to the doorway, where they disappeared.
User Reviews
Submitted by forensicgirl3 (user info) at 2009-10-09 18:00:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Weird childbirth...brrr!
Submitted by august_sobriquet (user info) at 2009-10-09 13:34:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2009-10-09 06:56:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Bring it on Tuts. Managed to pull something out of my ass, just so you didnt feel completely cheated sailing through to the next round on a forfeit.
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2009-10-08 15:14:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
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Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2009-10-08 15:13:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This needs lots of cleanup - its quite a rough read. And why did you direct us to other posts at the BEGINNING of yours?
Submitted by RoadSong (user info) at 2009-10-08 14:05:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"Alex ran away from home that night. She packed her bags and walked out determined not to come back again. What her father had done no man should do to his daughter. When she walked out she headed south, that first night. After walking for hours she found an abandoned old house sitting sedately behind some pine trees, a bit back from the street. Using a rock Alex smashed a window.
Inside it was dark. Alex walked out of the front room into a hallway, then down the back of the house where moonlight gave some illumination. She rolled out her sleeping bag and fell asleep. Strange dreams went though her head that night and after a few hours of this she awoke with a start. Alex was thirsty; she sat up and rubbed her eyes. With a shock she realised that in the corner of the room sat a man, dressed all in black."
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I hate it when this happens! Those people dressed in black sitting in the corners....
heh
{Great story!}
Submitted by spuj (user info) at 2009-10-08 04:59:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
slightly confusing in places, but overall was very very good :)
Submitted by Cakes (user info) at 2009-10-08 04:14:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-08 00:35:17 EDT (#)
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Yeah it's about the fourth or fifth title I have fucked. I'm thinking of making it my thing.
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2009-10-07 21:59:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2009-10-07 18:06:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
By the way, you fucked up your title, I am sure not for the first time either.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2009-10-07 17:12:27 EDT (#)
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i just read that first one you linked. you were right!
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-10-07 15:22:43 EDT (#)
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hurty do you remeber the bart/captain thorns mail?
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Yes.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2009-10-07 15:08:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
They had this episode on American telly called Fringe, from last year...same story.
Still good, though
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2009-10-07 13:54:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Medical setting give great psychological backdrops for horror stories.
Submitted by willartstorg (user info) at 2009-10-07 13:15:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:24:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
smoking weed does that to you. and age
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Wrong on both accounts.
Submitted by Erakith (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:58:17 EDT (#)
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A minger is someone who is minging.
But minging can apply to other things than people, like a meal you found fucking disgusting, for example.
"Fuck me that haggis was minging." Which is also a true statement. Haggis is filth.
I liked the story. It did remind me of the Twilight novels though.
.. Yeah, I read them. 4shame.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:25:03 EDT (#)
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All the English men have lisps in my head.
Anyway, I have a life tomorrow. :(
Night Uber.
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:24:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
smoking weed does that to you. and age
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:23:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
a limp cock maybe
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:23:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
ei has a limp never mind a lisp
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:21:17 EDT (#)
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I thought that was a minger. "like, she waz a righ' minger".
Out of curiosity do you have a lisp EI?
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:19:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I had to explain minging to some yanks the other day
and they were offended at being called cunts
oh just the usual tuts
a fair bit of penis, not including sico who was ok to send penis, hell i expected it
hurty do you remeber the bart/captain thorns mail?
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:17:29 EDT (#)
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you know...minging...like hurtys face?
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:15:14 EDT (#)
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Minging = disgusting, gross.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:09:17 EDT (#)
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Wtf is minging you scottish prick?
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:06:29 EDT (#)
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Good, but not very scary, or particularly minging.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-07 12:03:03 EDT (#)
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Ohh what did you get?
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2009-10-07 11:49:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-07 10:37:08 EDT (#)
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Ophelia, publish the weird emails from her then and you do to talk about her heaps. You accused me of being her once.
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I am considering this plus all the other freak stuff i have ever got.
ha i never said you were here i said you reminded me of her - it's my new insult, 'she's a right mystia'
:)
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-07 11:49:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I've heard that it is relatively common for womens teeth to fall out after childbirth. I know two women who this has happened to. It scares me. I liked this.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-07 11:47:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
This didn't even take a stretch of the imagination, when I was pregnant I would dream that I gave birth to a demon baby. I also dreamt all my teeth fell out and that I was having sex with strange men.
Submitted by RoadSong (user info) at 2009-10-07 11:42:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2009-10-07 11:38:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I always enjoy your posts.
that picture is fucking gross.