Grueberfest 09 Rd. 2. So very tired. (516 hits)
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Submitted by TuTs (View user info) at 2009-10-13 12:36:09 EDT
Day One without sleep.
I stopped smoking yesterday, unfortunately it has made me really tense and I can't sleep. It doesn't matter though those things are going to kill me. My doctor hates the idea, but I am going to make my body a temple. You know get fit, eat better.
Day Two without sleep.
I stopped taking my Resperidone and Haloperidol. It didn't matter how hard I tried I couldn't get it up last night. I watched porn, first the normal stuff, then some anal, I watched some really sick shit. Still after two hours of manipulation I couldn't get it up. I know if I come, I'll be able to sleep. So I am going off the drugs.
Day Three without sleep.
A Jehovah's Witness knocked at my door today. Trying to save my soul or something, I can't remember what I said to her, she was crying though. When I was shaving today, I had long fingernail marks raked down my face; red nail polish flakes were stuck in my scabs. Whatever I said, scratching my face wasn't very Christian of her.
Day Four without sleep.
I think my fish are trying to kill me. They are staring at me through the glass; I found a human finger in the aquarium last night. I don't know whose it is. It had a long red fingernail though so it must be a woman's or some fags. So I got the little bastards and flushed them down the toilet one by one. They won't be hurting anyone else again.
Day Five without sleep.
I can't use the toilet now, the fish are in there. They are still planning to kill me. I can hear them whispering to me. They say if I find someone else who can die in my place then I can live for another day. I have a community provided cleaner coming over soon. It is perfect, maybe then the fish will leave me alone. I should never have bought them.
Day Six without sleep.
My eye won't stop twitching and my head is killing me. It stopped briefly though when I killed the cleaner. She was doing the dishes when I came up behind her and pushed her face into the dishwater. I let her up before she drowned though. The fish told me they wanted to watch. So I took her into the Bathroom.
There wasn't much room in there, but I finished her off. I keep a switchblade in my pocket, you know "just in case". First I jammed her against the wall; she was half drowned and weak. Then I pried open her mouth and cut out her tongue. I threw that in the toilet, it is a delicacy for the fish. I held her face over the bowl and let the blood drip.
She started struggling pretty bad then, I think she woke up. Fish don't like loud noises, so I slit her throat. I don't know what made the fish bad, but I really don't want to be next. I don't know what to do with the home help lady. I am leaving her in thebathroom for now.
Day Seven without sleep.
Everything has a halo today. The throbbing pain is back again. If I hit my head against the wall hard enough it goes away, plus I can't hear the fish whispering. The woman in the toilet smells, so I pooped in a bag. There are security agencies that will be interested in the contents of my bowel, so I hid the poop.
I have stopped being hungry, finally I think my body is becoming a temple. I like to admire myself in the mirror. The parts of me that are bad I use the switchblade to cut away. The imperfect spot on my hip today was deep and it wouldn't stop bleeding so I heated a knife and cauterised it.
Day Eight without sleep.
Google says the human record for going without sleep is eleven days. I suppose they were mortal, I wouldn't be surprised if I never need sleep or food again. I am becoming a god. The fish are still hungry though. So today when the organiser of home help came over I took her to the bathroom.
She was pretty shocked about the lady already in there; she said she had to call the police. So I slammed her head into the toilet bowl. This time the fish wanted me to do some pretty twisted shit to her, but it is her or me right? You understand, you would do the same.
So I carried her to the kitchen, tied her up to a chair and got out my switchblade. I had to protect myself. The fish wanted her to be smooth. So when she woke up I cut off her hair, she started screaming, so I gagged her. Then I sliced off her ears, her nose and her lips. She was almost smooth. Her tits were lumpy though.
She wouldn't stop struggling but finally passed out when I got to her shirt and bra. I got rid of those boobs and then she was almost perfect like me. Those fucking fish were angry though. They said I had cut her wrong and that she needed to die now. So into the bathroom her and her bits went, with the other woman.
Day Nine without sleep.
The ringing in my ears has stopped and today the smell of dead lady is worse. Oh shit no, that isn't dirty dead lady stink; it is my imperfect hip spot. It is infected I think, there is pus oozing from the scab. The fish, they are laughing at me and I know they are. It doesn't matter though I am leaving soon.
Shit the police are at my door.
"Mr Grey are you in there?" they pound and knock and yell. I want them to go away; I am going to hit my head against the wall. Sometimes that helps the noise go away.
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Sgt. Nick Baker and Sgt. Alison Told continued to knock at Davis Greys door. They had a warrant to get into the house, but it was always better to be let in first, especially when dealing with someone like Mr Grey. When they walked in there was a man slumped against the wall, he had a contusion on his temple.
"Shit," Baker swore, this was going to mean a lot of paperwork. He ran into the house and crouched by Mr Grey. He checked his breathing, he wasn't. He checked his pulse, he didn't have one.
"Fuck, Fuck, Fuck," Baker swore under his breath. Laying Mr Grey down, preparing to give him mouth to mouth, Baker retched at the smell of mortifying flesh coming from Mr Grey. Meanwhile Alison was investigating the other smell wafting through the house. She followed her nose to a door in the hall.
She opened the door; there the smell hit her full force. She glimpsed a tangle of bodies cramped into the space, before she had to turn and vomit on the tiled floor. She turned back to the room, turning on the fluorescent light as she did. The bathroom mirror was smashed. On the floor were the bodies of three different women in various stages of mortification.
"Dave," she called. Dave hung up the phone he was calling paramedics with and went to see why Ally was calling him. Going down the hall, the stench got worse and her green face warned him what he was going to see. Dave started breathing through his mouth. He looked through the door.
"Shit," he swore. This was going to mean a lot of paperwork.
User Reviews
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2009-10-15 17:51:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Lib (user info) at 2009-10-15 17:47:04 EDT (#)
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This is exactly why I don't own fish.
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2009-10-15 09:10:36 EDT (#)
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I read this just never rated.
I loved it! Good work, and mighty descriptive.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-14 22:50:04 EDT (#)
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I actually don't mind. Snark is going to beat me anyway.
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2009-10-14 22:48:02 EDT (#)
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You don't need advice from the King of the Typos.
No more comments from me. I ALWAYS fuck up ratings when I get talking in people's posts.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-14 21:23:41 EDT (#)
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Go on Jack I can take it......
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2009-10-14 18:05:36 EDT (#)
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This had flaws (DON'T HATE ME!!!) but the whole bit with the fish, that made this work. Good story.
Submitted by spuj (user info) at 2009-10-14 09:55:12 EDT (#)
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wow tuts this was absolutely brilliant.
Submitted by monkeyswithguns (user info) at 2009-10-14 08:44:14 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Bushy (user info) at 2009-10-14 08:28:56 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:42:56 EDT (#)
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You make me smile and shake my head ei.
Sweet dreams uber.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:31:39 EDT (#)
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he wasn't invited of course, but we were in the park.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:30:25 EDT (#)
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i once had sexual intercourse with a girl with a dirty bum
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:17:25 EDT (#)
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dirty bum phobia. i had actually never considered that before.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:15:18 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-14 05:57:49 EDT (#)
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Nerdy? How dare very you?
i'm not writing any more until forensic's goes up. i also have no more ideas.
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What about a man with OCD who is always worried he has a dirty bum and routinly wipes untill there is blood. One day he's walking next to a canal and gets worried, leaps into the bushes and starts wiping his bum with old newspaper. Then he gets attacked by some yobs who smear poo all over him.
Hilarity ensues.
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:10:52 EDT (#)
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:(? don't be sad!
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:09:53 EDT (#)
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:(
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:08:28 EDT (#)
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lol
Submitted by Tarragon (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:07:25 EDT (#)
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Right...i watched it with a friend who called them eelgina's. I remember it now.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:06:13 EDT (#)
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no thanks, im rubbish.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:05:28 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-14 17:39:53 WST (#)
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Is Dreamcatcher the one with that eel like thing?
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Fungus aliens- Mr gray and a down syndrome person.
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:05:16 EDT (#)
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You need to rise up and fight the man...like the dudes in Animal House with the Eat Me cake.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:03:59 EDT (#)
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Yeah EI bugger the "rules" compete anyway.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:03:44 EDT (#)
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my owl story saw me as one of the only people eliminated in the first round of a competition where not many people entered.
hardly an incentive
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-14 06:00:30 EDT (#)
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I think you should take your own advice with the writing...I think your owl story needs a sequel.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-10-14 05:59:55 EDT (#)
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it's how very dare you! exclamation point, not question mark. when will you learn *sigh*
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-14 05:57:49 EDT (#)
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Nerdy? How dare very you?
i'm not writing any more until forensic's goes up. i also have no more ideas.
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-10-14 05:55:59 EDT (#)
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go write some more nerdy stories mrs kaos king
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-14 05:53:56 EDT (#)
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shut what?
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-10-14 05:40:55 EDT (#)
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shut it ducky
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-14 05:39:53 EDT (#)
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Is Dreamcatcher the one with that eel like thing?
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-14 02:12:37 EDT (#)
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Mr Grey- Dreamcatcher. The other one I haven't read though.
Submitted by shitfuck (user info) at 2009-10-13 22:04:52 EDT (#)
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+2 EFFORT
Submitted by Ducky (user info) at 2009-10-13 19:10:48 EDT (#)
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Very nice TuTs.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2009-10-13 17:49:26 EDT (#)
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Nice!
Submitted by EmissionImpossible (user info) at 2009-10-13 15:47:24 EDT (#)
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ive been waiting for 5 minutes for that photo to load properly
stupid cropping
Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2009-10-13 14:52:17 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2009-10-13 14:36:00 EDT (#)
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Nice.
Was it deliberate to reference Stephen King's "Insomnia" (with the halos, kinda like the auras) and "Dreamcatcher" (Watch out from Mister Grey)?
I hope so coz they are 2 of his finer works, and that would cap it off for me.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-13 12:53:38 EDT (#)
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Yeah I have a pretty big aquarium in my lounge room, there are six bright yellow comets and six black comets in there atm. When I forget to feed them (which is often), they stare at me through the glass. Fucking things give me the heeby jeebies. When I had tropicals in a smaller tank I had a red fighter in with a few neons, gouramis and some different varieties of tetras. Goldfish are heaps easier to look after though and because the water is cold it doesn't get as dirty.
Wow look at me go on. That must be my hobby! I always wanted a hobby.
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2009-10-13 12:49:43 EDT (#)
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MLW has two 'fighting fishes'. One is at her office. It's red. The other is at home. It's blue. They are named "One" and "Two". They are evil, like the fish in your story.
Submitted by ridiculous (user info) at 2009-10-13 12:49:37 EDT (#)
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Wow - nice work, twisted as all hell and in that light perfect. Maybe I am just being a douche but I can't help but hate the bit with the fish though, I guess a little too reminiscent of Son of Sam but hey I couldn't have written that. Good work man.
Submitted by GroundHorse (user info) at 2009-10-13 12:48:19 EDT (#)
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uberboard
TELL ONE OF THE COPS ABOUT THEIR FAGWEAR-CHICKEN SHIT!
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2009-10-13 12:36:53 EDT (#)
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Hey, if you want wild bears eatin' your children and scarin' your
salmon, that's your business. But I'm not gonna take it! Who's with
me?
-- Homer Simpson
Much Apu About Nothing