I Burn For You. (1412 hits)
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Submitted by Tuts (View user info) at 2010-01-05 10:59:47 EST
The flowing water always made her feel calm. She put her feet into the fresh river and watched the dirt wash away from her toes. She waded out deeper, where the current was faster. The cold water made her tingle. She reached down and washed the dirt from her fingers, picked it out of her nails. She took clear handfuls and splashed them onto her tear streaked face. Facing upstream she fell back into the water and floated away. Hoping to get to a place where she could breathe or not, maybe she would drown.
When she was 12 she would sneak into her parent’s closet. In her dads big canvas work bag, he had a tin where he kept his tobacco, papers and a lighter. She would steal some tobacco and papers, go into the bush across the road and smoke one half of her stolen cigarette. The other half would be saved for later. After one particularly hard day she smoked the whole one, throwing the butt into the dry grass.
The summer had been dry and hot and the grass began to burn. Little curlicues of smoke warned that flames were to follow. The bright orange heat made her feel excited and all the bad feelings of the day disappeared. She let the grass burn a little, before getting scared and stamping the flames out under her converse sneakers. It became her habit, smoke, burn the grass, get excited and stomp out the flames.
She met Gareth at University. The dated for six months before he took her to a restaurant and got down on one knee, she said yes. That night she burned down a warehouse. She stayed and watched the flames until she heard the siren and drove away. Gareth wanted to have kids. She drove an hour to a nearby town and secretly bought birth control pills. That night she set a park on fire.
Ten years into their marriage Gareth was frustrated about their lack of progeny. When they fought she would take a gas can to an empty parking lot and set the liquid alight. He stopped coming home after work; he would wait until she was asleep before he opened their door. She followed him after work one day and watched him embrace a red lipped blonde. Two days later the blonde’s house burnt to the ground.
Her revenge was still incomplete. “Let’s go camping she suggested”. In the early days of their marriage they would head out bush. Their favourite campground took 5 hours of walking and was near a fresh water creek. They packed their tent, enough water to last the walk, some dehydrated food, matches and sleeping pills.
It was easy enough to mix the pills into his bowl of rehydrated curry before bed. Listening to his snores she arose from her sleeping bag, took her matches from the backpack and unzipped the tent. She shivered in anticipatory pleasure and lit the grass around the tent. Its thin nylon went up in flames quickly. She stood back to watch her handiwork.
High pitched screams came from the tent and a Gareth shaped figure emerged from the flames. His fiery doppelganger ran crazy circles around the campsite. More grass caught on fire and some tree branches. The flames began to turn and the arms of the devil reached out toward her. She ran to the water. The flowing water always made her feel calm.
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Submitted by catscradle (user info) at 2010-01-08 19:39:08 EST (#)
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I thought this would be about herpes
Submitted by erosion_rules (user info) at 2010-01-08 01:17:09 EST (#)
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I thought this would be a herpes joke. It was still good though.
Submitted by BranDo (user info) at 2010-01-07 08:25:35 EST (#)
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awesome post.
I burn for you, Sting from 'Brimstone and Treacle' Dream of the Blue turtles live.
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2010-01-07 02:02:34 EST (#)
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Submitted by cheerios (user info) at 2010-01-06 19:52:41 EST (#)
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i didnt even read it. but it looks like an above average post.
Submitted by Tokerson (user info) at 2010-01-06 19:09:29 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by tiaprae (user info) at 2010-01-06 12:59:03 EST (#)
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Submitted by HellRazer (user info) at 2010-01-06 08:43:00 EST (#)
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This post is Hellrazer approved.
Submitted by Dervel (user info) at 2010-01-06 08:02:58 EST (#)
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Burnt alive for hugging a blonde?!
Bet he's glad he didn't fuck her.
Submitted by root.discussion (user info) at 2010-01-06 06:19:19 EST (#)
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Wow. Great stuff!
Submitted by Cakes (user info) at 2010-01-06 00:48:11 EST (#)
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f82mmlCSQjI&feature=related
This song--well hell they both need more cowbell--- baked 77 cakes today. Somebody kill me, powdered suger up my nose and sprinkles b/t my toes. I'm burnin for a hot bath.
Submitted by Cakes (user info) at 2010-01-06 00:43:28 EST (#)
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http://www.funnyhub.com/videos/pages/snl-more-cowbell.htm
--needs more cowbell
Submitted by netimportant (user info) at 2010-01-05 23:48:43 EST (#)
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Last time I burned for somebody, I had to take antibiotics :(
Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2010-01-05 23:38:40 EST (#)
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muy bueno
Submitted by X54 (user info) at 2010-01-05 23:23:33 EST (#)
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Come on Baby light my fire
Try to set the night on...FIRE
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2010-01-05 21:19:45 EST (#)
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Worst case of gonnorhea EVER.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2010-01-05 15:41:19 EST (#)
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You'd better see a Doctor who specializes in that kind of thing, stat.
Submitted by no1hasdis (user info) at 2010-01-05 14:21:27 EST (#)
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I'm lonely :(
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 14:20:46 EST (#)
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If I want to -2 something I just don't.
Of course I am lonely at 2am Simon, no-one else is awake.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 14:18:57 EST (#)
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for a year i rated every post with a +2, but said incredibly nasty shit to go along with it. now i either don't bother to rate, or try to rate on content, and just smartass along or offer some reason for the comment.
i get more grief for the second.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2010-01-05 14:06:16 EST (#)
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Rating everyone with a +2 doesn't mean your nice. It just means you're lonely :)
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 14:04:40 EST (#)
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I am really nice.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:47:27 EST (#)
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oh, and here Tuts:
http://www.ubersite.com/cgi-bin/users.cgi?sort=reviews&days=ALL
http://www.ubersite.com/cgi-bin/moreinfo.cgi?uber=Tuts&cutoff=1
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:36:09 EST (#)
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good show, sir!
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:34:44 EST (#)
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re: usage of 'your mom,' http://www.ubersite.com/m/124010#2951892
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:34:16 EST (#)
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I can eat a banana in one bite with no hands! Wooot!
I mean, what?!??!
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:33:31 EST (#)
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Submitted by no1hasdis (user info) at 2010-01-06 02:29:16 WST (#)
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Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:24:58 EST (#)
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there's no nastiness in here.
just sharing and honesty and openness and concern for our fellow man.
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Amen to that, Brother. I have no fucking idea what that mentally deficient, droopy titted sow down below is talking about. Get back under your bridge, you hideous wildabeast.
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moo? or is it oink? what fucking animal am I? a sow or a wildebeast? make up your fucking mind.
I notice though that you don't deny the pissing contests.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:31:20 EST (#)
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a gay comment? really?
you should have just gone for the jugular and said 'your mom.'
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:29:28 EST (#)
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67% of Jews hate the song "I'm Burning For You" by Blue Öyster Cult - TRUE FACT
Submitted by no1hasdis (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:29:16 EST (#)
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Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:24:58 EST (#)
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there's no nastiness in here.
just sharing and honesty and openness and concern for our fellow man.
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Amen to that, Brother. I have no fucking idea what that mentally deficient, droopy titted sow down below is talking about. Get back under your bridge, you hideous wildabeast.
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:28:12 EST (#)
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oh jesus, your pseudo-polite quips are so transparent and.....gay.
just be open with your homosexuality already. it's ok. caulaincourt did it and he's still pops up from time to time......in another man's ass.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:28:01 EST (#)
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http://stuff.ubersite.com/115267498383675252/1/Old_fuck.JPG
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:24:58 EST (#)
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there's no nastiness in here.
just sharing and honesty and openness and concern for our fellow man.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:23:01 EST (#)
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See this is what made uber great, all the latent nastiness and pissing competitions.
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:20:11 EST (#)
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Submitted by FALLEN (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:18:12 EST (#)
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delivery for sgthartman.
its the marshmallows you ordered, since you will be camping on this post all day.
just sign here please.....
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HARDEE HAR HAR FALLEN
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:20:11 EST (#)
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i do what i gotta do...and i do it well.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:19:25 EST (#)
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Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:17:34 EST (#)
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Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:14:22 EST (#)
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hahaha
i don't need life advice from someone who has to score ass from an online 'serious writers' forum. thanks anyway.
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i'd take 'serious writer' vagina over porn and a sock any day of the week.
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well i for one am glad for you that you were finally able to take the step up. bravo.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:18:15 EST (#)
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Well I was feeling warm in my foot, but I realised I had been sitting on it.
Submitted by FALLEN (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:18:12 EST (#)
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delivery for sgthartman.
its the marshmallows you ordered, since you will be camping on this post all day.
just sign here please.....
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:17:34 EST (#)
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Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:14:22 EST (#)
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hahaha
i don't need life advice from someone who has to score ass from an online 'serious writers' forum. thanks anyway.
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i'd take 'serious writer' vagina over porn and a sock any day of the week.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:17:28 EST (#)
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buddy.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:17:14 EST (#)
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but since i'm me, i don't care where or if she feels warm at all.
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:14:29 EST (#)
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If you were me, you wouldnt have to tell her where she should feel warm...buddy.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:14:22 EST (#)
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Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:12:19 EST (#)
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Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:05:50 EST (#)
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TuTs (user info) 22 on 37 = 0.59
that is an AWESOME ranking. it means you are more than worth reading to me. i'd take that as the honour it is and bask in the warm glow it created within you.
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so basically you consider yourself to be the gene shalit of ubersite?
aim higher...in life.
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hahaha
i don't need life advice from someone who has to score ass from an online 'serious writers' forum. thanks anyway.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:12:38 EST (#)
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if i was sgthartman, i'd go the perv route and say somewhere in the vicinity of your panties. however, i am a gentleman, and so was simply referencing your heart.
perhaps a slight flush to the cheeks is present as well, but that depends upon how fair skinned you are and whether you are prone to blushing.
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:12:34 EST (#)
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asking for trouble below
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:12:19 EST (#)
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Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:05:50 EST (#)
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TuTs (user info) 22 on 37 = 0.59
that is an AWESOME ranking. it means you are more than worth reading to me. i'd take that as the honour it is and bask in the warm glow it created within you.
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so basically you consider yourself to be the gene shalit of ubersite?
aim higher...in life.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:09:14 EST (#)
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I forget how to do that ranking thing. Where abouts in my body is this warm glow meant to be?
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 13:05:50 EST (#)
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TuTs (user info) 22 on 37 = 0.59
that is an AWESOME ranking. it means you are more than worth reading to me. i'd take that as the honour it is and bask in the warm glow it created within you.
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:57:25 EST (#)
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More burning here http://www.ubersite.com/m/92887
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:55:37 EST (#)
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ok I admit I just wanted to call you a bitch hole.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:51:39 EST (#)
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what are you talking about?
i give out mounds of zeroes. i'd bet i have an overall ranking of over 1 i've given you.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:48:37 EST (#)
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Scourge you bitch hole. A zero from you is like a +10.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:46:45 EST (#)
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i think you inadvertently posted the first rough draft of the story, because this has no meat or substance to it at all.
but i'm looking forward very much to the completed project as this has a lot of promise!
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:43:49 EST (#)
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oh, and revenge as well of course
Submitted by SgtHartman (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:42:55 EST (#)
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Awesome, I love a good camp story
Submitted by no1hasdis (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:29:03 EST (#)
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Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2010-01-05 11:34:20 EST (#)
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well written, but the story flows like every other "decent" story i've read here recently. i.e., start with a mysterious "she," add love interest, sprinkle some heartbreak, a dab of murder here, some daddy issues there, and VOILA, an ubersite story.
would normally warrant a +1, but since you're not posting random drivel, you get a +2 since this site sucks so bad right now.
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I concur on all points.
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:27:19 EST (#)
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i'm american. we call them mom's here. "mum" is what you keep when you just had your third abortion.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:23:56 EST (#)
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I don't have a mom. I have a mum, or formally a mother.
Submitted by RoadSong (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:23:28 EST (#)
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Oh HELL yes!
*reminds self not to camp with TuTs*
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:22:38 EST (#)
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if by 'phase,' you mean 'lifelong obsession,' then yeah....cock phase
i don't even know who you are, fj, but that was too easy.
like tuts' mom.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:20:31 EST (#)
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What can I say. I'm going through a cock phase.
Submitted by Judgement (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:19:49 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:18:59 EST (#)
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You are such a girl.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:11:02 EST (#)
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Vagina? Euw.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:09:25 EST (#)
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and her vagina.....
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:03:27 EST (#)
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I could swim in her cleavage.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:02:48 EST (#)
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Wow, FJ.
You have as bad taste as I do.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:01:52 EST (#)
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google........
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2010-01-05 12:01:00 EST (#)
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Yes.
I fancy Lorraine Kelly.
Submitted by TuTs (user info) at 2010-01-05 11:59:52 EST (#)
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I have a very bad crush on Harvey Levin atm. Sick, right?
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2010-01-05 11:57:26 EST (#)
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Crazy girls are so good in bed.
Submitted by ridiculous (user info) at 2010-01-05 11:43:05 EST (#)
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Note to self: If you ever meet TuT's leave your cigarettes at home and bring a firemarshal.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2010-01-05 11:40:30 EST (#)
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I read it. I agree with cocaine. I'll still give you a rogering for trying.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2010-01-05 11:35:04 EST (#)
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I didn't read this (yet, maybe later) but I'll just thank you for burning for me.
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2010-01-05 11:34:20 EST (#)
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well written, but the story flows like every other "decent" story i've read here recently. i.e., start with a mysterious "she," add love interest, sprinkle some heartbreak, a dab of murder here, some daddy issues there, and VOILA, an ubersite story.
would normally warrant a +1, but since you're not posting random drivel, you get a +2 since this site sucks so bad right now.
Submitted by darpho (user info) at 2010-01-05 11:32:50 EST (#)
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This had all sorts of crazy to it and I like =)
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2010-01-05 11:09:15 EST (#)
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As long as you don't itch.