A Girl Called Andrea Part five: Jones (633 hits)
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Submitted by Sam (View user info) at 2003-12-09 10:25:30 EST
Part one: http://www.ubersite.com/m/19821
Part two: http://www.ubersite.com/m/19900
Part three: http://www.ubersite.com/m/19978
Part four: http://www.ubersite.com/m/20151
I wasn't alone in the room. A slim, middle-aged man with glasses was with me. He was wearing a shirt, slacks, and a tie that had been nice before the man was roughed up.
"I'm Edward Jones," he informed me.
"You created Leg—Andrea, didn't you?"
"That's right. Have you seen her? How is she?"
I lowered my voice in case someone outside was listening. "She's fine. But scared. I told Petrovich she was disabled, so don't let on that things are okay."
"Okay," he answered.
"Have you tried to escape?" I asked.
Jones nodded. "With no luck."
I checked my gun. Somehow, either Dmitri or Yuri had lifted it from me when they escorted me in.
Jones and I got the pleasantries out of the way and we spent the rest of the day trying to think of a way out and talking about Legs. The talks of finding a way out were in vain. But I enjoyed talking about Legs.
I found out how Petrovich knew I would have her, too. Jones had explained Legs's thought process to the man and knew should would choose the most successful detective.
During what talk, Jones pulled out his wallet and looked at a picture. He smiled. "She's gorgeous. You seem to be as attached to her as I am. I have an extra picture of her. Would you like it?" he asked.
It's funny the way love makes you ignore the less appealing characteristics of the one you love. Still, I had no illusions about Legs's beauty. I preferred to hold onto the image in my head. But I was polite and I agreed to take it.
I glanced at the picture, but had to do a double take. The woman in the picture was a knock-out. Aside from general characteristics, she didn't look like the Legs I knew at all. I didn't even believe it was her. Until I saw her eyes.
"Oh my God!" I said.
"I know. She's more beautiful in person, but this is still a good photo," Jones said.
"No, she doesn't look anything like this. What happened?"
"What do you mean? She's always looked like this."
"No," I said. "She looks nothing like this. She looks like what this woman would look like if her face melted."
"Melted? Hmm," Jones said. And then his countenanced blanked itself and he was deep in thought.
Finally, he said, "Aha! Of course she's hideous. The rain must have melted her face! Her P.O.M. would be able to allow the face to hold its form, but her backup doesn't offer enough power! She's still thinking okay, right?"
"Aside from her face, she's fine. Wonderful, in fact."
"We have to get her P.O.M. back in her. If it's trying to rebuild her face, she has less power than I feared. Frank, we have to get out of here."
"If you have any ideas," I said, "I would love to hear them."
We then spent the next several hours deep in thought, trying to think of a way out.
To be concluded . . .
User Reviews
Submitted by drky (user info) at 2003-12-09 12:51:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Aha, i see. Keep it up in that case, i like ...
Submitted by Tak at 2003-12-09 12:29:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I love this, man.
I've always been a fan of serials, and noire,
so these are perfect to me.
You've inspired me to post my own story that I've
been afraid to submit for fear of the flames.
Submitted by Lord_Of_The_Strings (user info) at 2003-12-09 12:18:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm with the Phinch on the full length, if I was any good with photoshop I'd submit a post "The Phinch who stole Christmas" with Phinch's face in place of Jim Carey's.
Submitted by Lord_Of_The_Strings (user info) at 2003-12-09 12:16:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
In that case man a BIG +2 sorry bout that I thought you were writing them as you go, I like the story a lot just pissed that I cant have more of it to keep me entertained.
Submitted by loki (user info) at 2003-12-09 12:01:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I like it broken up into ADD bits.
Submitted by Phinch (user info) at 2003-12-09 11:55:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i vote for the full length directors cut. with extra scenes.
Submitted by sam_el (user info) at 2003-12-09 11:46:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Don't think that I'm ignoring your complaints about the length. It's just that I wrote this all last week in one day. I would be happy to flesh this story out, but I'm afraid that they are keeping me extremely busy at work for a change. So I have to choose between giving you the Cliff's Notes version or making you wait for the next installment. I have obviously chosen the latter. I apologize. So I'll leave it up to you. Would you like to see the already written final installment tomorrow or would you like to wait a while for a longer version? Keep in mind that if I really get carried away with the longer version, I may have to make even more installments.
Oh, and thank you very much for reading and for your kind words.
Submitted by Phinch (user info) at 2003-12-09 11:43:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
brevity is the soul of wit.
Submitted by drky (user info) at 2003-12-09 11:31:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I am still liking this...
Still a little short though also
Submitted by celeste (user info) at 2003-12-09 11:24:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i bet this was as fun to write as it is to read
Submitted by Lord_Of_The_Strings (user info) at 2003-12-09 10:43:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Once again very very good but too short hence the +1