Poem for Val (910 hits)
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Submitted by Stan<juggalo44.at.mad.scientist.com> (View user info) at 2004-01-22 10:05:17 EST
"Breach in Fate"
Ms. Vulnerable, I made her feel jaded
and then I just faded, out of sight, out of mind.
More than ever, I wish I could change it.
I wish I could rearrange it, but I can not this time.
Mr. Self destruct, don't get too close to him,
don't fall in love with him, he will just kick up dirt.
He doesn't mean too, but that's how it always goes.
It's the traits he always shows, and someone always gets hurt.
I tried to put back the pieces,
I tried to put back the pieces,
I tried to put back the pieces,
but there was no glue.
Now Ms. Vulnerable, changed her name to Ms. Powerful
Her heart is a tower full, she has found a new love.
Mr. Self destruct has been put in his place,
dismay is the only taste, of what he calls love.
I tried to put back the pieces,
I tried to put back the pieces,
I tried to put back the pieces,
but there was no glue.
I guess this is all my fault
I can't be happy, I can't be happy
I won't let myself win.
I'm sorry, I know not what I do sometimes.
All is lost in this meaningless rhyme.
And now you won't let me in.
Please put back the pieces,
please put back the pieces,
please put back the pieces,
please put back the pieces.
I'm sorry, I'm sorry, I'm sorry
User Reviews
Submitted by youarsoghey (user info) at 2004-06-05 13:02:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Uh huh.
Submitted by Val (user info) at 2004-05-18 21:41:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
my name's Val. I know this isn't about me. I am sorry for what you are going through. But it was sappy. You sound like me 2 years ago (not a good place to be). But +2 for your effort, pain, and for using my name. Damit. I really want to -2 myself for rhyming. I shall spare you.
Submitted by Tom (user info) at 2004-01-22 15:17:35 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
All you need to do is stop talking about it, or at least stop talking about it publically! Imagine how embarassing this must be to her.
Submitted by Tom (user info) at 2004-01-22 15:04:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Tom:
dude, what do you want from me? I fucked up. I know you are only 15 and the world is still black and white but once you realize how gray it can actually be, then you will see that people do things to protect themselves. I hurt Val to protect myself. Regardless of if I needed to be protected or not, I thought I did and I was pre-emptive. Now, Val has turned it around and hurt me to protect herself, whether she needs to or not. I gave her an apology and closure. That's what she needed to keep herself from hurting for the next year and a half, and believe me, I have been through the same thing before, that's why I broke down and called her. I let my pride, fears, shame, and confusion step in the way of my happiness. I am sorry for that but still very much in love with Val. I am taking on her pain with hopes that she will be happy.
Stanton, I don't see the world as "Black and white" "Good and bad" "Wrong and right". At any point, people can stop thinking that I do. Dude, you're not the victim, stop making it seem like you are. Any normal loving person would have stood by her in that time. If you were ready to be her HUSBAND than you would NOT have done what you did! You don't get it. You are not mature enough to take on the sort of responsibility. After what you've done....I just don't know what you were thinking. You can't ever be 'in love' with her ever again. As far as any of this is concerned, it's a show. I don't understand how she, or anyone, could ever trust you. Yeah, it might have all been a "Mess up" but for someone who wanted to get married, that's one terminal 'mess up'.
Submitted by AlwaysAnEagle (user info) at 2004-01-22 13:24:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
It's a nice sentiment and all, and clearly there's a lot to be worked out with you guys, but to be honest, I'm sort of sick of seeing it.
Hope it all works out, and that everyone is recovering.
Submitted by UrbaneMischief (user info) at 2004-01-22 12:58:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
my only response:
say you care? respect that I do not want anymore personal stuff of mine blowing around on uber
stop this
Submitted by streetpunk (user info) at 2004-01-22 12:37:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
God Chicken:
Thanks, I just feel like I am about to crumble right now. It's amazing how you can act so strong one minute and the next, you are falling apart and being told you are strong. I just need to learn to stop shooting myself in the foot when it comes to relationships. I need to learn how to trust people. I used to be told that I am too trusting, then I got hurt and lied to so many times that I just stopped trusting people and now, that's causing me to get hurt. It's a vicious cycle and I can't seem to win either way.
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2004-01-22 12:09:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Maybe not during, but you're owning up. You did right there.
Sometimes we have to punish ourselves in order to stand up. Trust me, I've done it too.
Submitted by streetpunk (user info) at 2004-01-22 12:02:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
God Chicken: Thanks, but I don't think I have really been much of a man during this whole thing. I was more along the lines of a piece of shit. We have to live and learn during these times
Submitted by streetpunk (user info) at 2004-01-22 12:02:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
God Chicken: Tell God Chicken I said:
Thanks, but I don't think I have really been much of a man during this whole thing. I was more along the lines of a piece of shit. We have to live and learn during these times
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2004-01-22 11:45:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by streetpunk (user info) at 2004-01-22 11:36:27 (#)
Ranking: 2
Tom:
dude, what do you want from me? I fucked up. I know you are only 15 and the world is still black and white but once you realize how gray it can actually be, then you will see that people do things to protect themselves. I hurt Val to protect myself. Regardless of if I needed to be protected or not, I thought I did and I was pre-emptive. Now, Val has turned it around and hurt me to protect herself, whether she needs to or not. I gave her an apology and closure. That's what she needed to keep herself from hurting for the next year and a half, and believe me, I have been through the same thing before, that's why I broke down and called her. I let my pride, fears, shame, and confusion step in the way of my happiness. I am sorry for that but still very much in love with Val. I am taking on her pain with hopes that she will be happy.
Peace,
STREETPUNK
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Goddamn dude. That's my definition of being a man about things.
There is nothing more kicker of all ass than that response.
+2.
Submitted by streetpunk (user info) at 2004-01-22 11:36:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Tom:
dude, what do you want from me? I fucked up. I know you are only 15 and the world is still black and white but once you realize how gray it can actually be, then you will see that people do things to protect themselves. I hurt Val to protect myself. Regardless of if I needed to be protected or not, I thought I did and I was pre-emptive. Now, Val has turned it around and hurt me to protect herself, whether she needs to or not. I gave her an apology and closure. That's what she needed to keep herself from hurting for the next year and a half, and believe me, I have been through the same thing before, that's why I broke down and called her. I let my pride, fears, shame, and confusion step in the way of my happiness. I am sorry for that but still very much in love with Val. I am taking on her pain with hopes that she will be happy.
Peace,
STREETPUNK
Submitted by Herpes (user info) at 2004-01-22 11:02:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Tom, be a bit more lenient. All men make mistakes. Some of us (namely me) will never admit it.
Submitted by Tom (user info) at 2004-01-22 10:41:37 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by Milkman (user info) at 2004-01-22 10:24:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
eh