a story i wrote part 2 (444 hits)
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Submitted by Mushroom Frazzle (View user info) at 2004-02-11 15:03:15 EST
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I stumbled out of the large wooden door of my humble abode. As soon as I saw the heavy frosting Mother Nature had decided to give the world this morning I immediately doubled back on myself and slammed the door shut behind me. What was I thinking? Wearing a suit in the middle of November. I sighed and trudged up the shiny marble stairs to the bombsite of my room, my girlfriend had long since given up on sleeping in here with me so I had no worries about waking her up.
I changed quickly, but still in a very tired fashion, leaving my carefully pressed suit strewn across the floor. I wandered downstairs, now wearing a pair of tattered (but still strangely warm and snug) jeans, my favourite shirt with the elaborate picture of a dragon in mid flight, a thick and cosy leather jacket and a thick, black woollen hat, the sort you would expect a cat burglar to wear. My advisors positively hated it when I wore casual clothes to work, but I say let them complain, I'm the boss around here and nobodies gonna tell me what to do!
I opened the door to my garage and shed the pure morning light on her, the sun shone off of the waxed, black paintwork, making her look like something descended from the heavens itself (if I ever believed in such a luxurious afterlife). She is my pride and joy, my true love, my '84 Cadillac. I climbed in, taking my time to fully enjoy the feeling of the seats, and the artificial new car smell. Yes, this is truly the highlight of my day, I put the key into the ignition and turned it. She revved up faithfully and sped off in a clichéd cloud of dust. Speeding up as I went down the long straight road, I blatantly broke the speed limit at every possible opportunity until I reached my office building. I was reluctant to leave Her in the car park like that but I knew that I had to ascend to the office.
On my way up the elevator to the top floor of the building, I must have had at least 5 or 6 'neckties' as I like to call them make some wise crack about the weather on the way up, I stopped listening after the second one and just pretended to laugh, God, do they think that chumming up to me is gonna get them a promotion or something? Nuts to that.
When I got to my office I found most of my leading advisors waiting for me. They told me that the police had called and said that I had yet another fine for speeding, they must have put up a hidden camera or something. My main advisor informed me of a part in my contract that said that they could dismiss me if they ever thought that I was unfit for the job, now was such a time. They told me to go home, I was suspended until further notice, without pay. Of course I was furious, I yelled and argued until they threatened to call security to throw me out
They can't do this to me! This is MY company! Yelled an angry voice in my head,
But I guess that they had their reasons, said a reasonable voice inside my head,
No, they don't have any good reasons
They wouldn't just dismiss me unless they thought that the company was in danger because of my current state of mind,
THERE IS NO...
Definitely some good reason
GOOD REASON...
There must be a reason
FOR THIS!!!
I decided to get my head straight over a few drinks at a local bar, "The Red Spot". I went up to the bar with angry voices blaring in my head, the reasonable one had never been very loud but I had never actually heard them before... slapping myself mentally, I ordered three double shots of tequila and downed all three without salt or lime, I regretted that afterwards but it made the voices stop. I reasoned that the voices had just been a product of my anger and I probably wasn't going crazy. I can't really remember anything that happened until the ride home.
I was driving home in my Cadillac when I started thinking about what I should have done and said when my advisors told me to go home, I could feel my temples throbbing with each heartbeat as I got angrier and angrier, the drink didn't help with that either. That's when the voices started again, but this time they were all talking at once and I couldn't hear what they were saying apart from random words,
CbubasbcTHEYsdvqgCANTplysDOdsvhoTHISapklANGERisvasREVENGEbsobosbobsssbasd... kill
The last word got me frightened and paranoid, I started yelling at the voices to go away, to just leave me alone. I closed my eyes and screamed, that's when I felt a sudden jolt coupled with a dull thump.
I inspected the corpse from the bank of the ditch it was lying in, she was laying face down in the mud and I couldn't see who she was, I didn't want to see who she was. I stood still for a minute or two while trying to work out what had just happened and whether I was dreaming. One thing was at the front of my mind,
If anyone finds out about this, I'm ruined.
I was about to accept that I had to take the rap for what I had done when I realised that I was busy burying the body where it lay, using my cars hubcap as a shovel, I tried to stop but I couldn't, my drunken self had taken over, I finished the digging and drove home where I stumbled into my room and fell asleep.
I woke the next morning with a familiar feeling of depressed exhaustion; I didn't think I could stand another monotonous dro...
Remember what you did crooned the voice,
It all came flooding back to me again, I almost screamed. I came to my senses and thought that it must have been just a bad dream, that's all, a nightmare, how silly of me to think that a stupid bad dream was real, tsk!
It was no dream, dummy!
I cursed at myself for thinking such stupid thoughts and got dressed, I went down to the garage to say good morning to my pride and joy, my true love, my blood smeared, dented '84 Cadillac with the ripped piece of cloth in the bonnet.
Then I screamed, I screamed until my girlfriend came running downstairs and saw the car. I screamed until the police arrived, I only stopped screaming when they stuck a needle in my arm and pumped me full of tranquillisers.
You're finished! You're finished! You're finished! Sang the voice over and over and over...
User Reviews
Submitted by cat_head (user info) at 2004-02-12 04:20:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
He has done paragraphs, just no blank line in between, which is not such a crime. I thought it read very well. It had a nice "falling apart" feel to it.
Submitted by TheRef (user info) at 2004-02-11 23:01:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
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