Ninja (1000 hits)
Category: Quotes & StoriesRating: -0.81 on 13 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Andras (View user info) at 2004-02-11 19:20:59 EST
Ok, here it is, some story I just started working on. Hope you like it.
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My name is Tatsumaru. I am an Aika ninja.
At this moment I do not know where I am or what day it is.
All I can remember is the last few days...
It all started on a Saturday morning. As I meditated alone on the garden of my house I suddenly heard a sound. Quickly I drew my sword and was prepared to defend myself, until I saw who it was.
-"Rikimaru! Long time, no see, how has your family been?"- I asked.
All I got for a response was silence. After a few awkward seconds, Rikimaru spoke:
-"I have orders to tell you to report to the empress as soon as possible for an assignment".
With these few words, Rikimaru disappeared as fast as he had come, a strange behavior indeed.
I prepared all my gear and headed out towards the mansion were the empress resided.
As I walked, I started to wonder what could've happened, because for most of the time my services are required only in times of great strife and turmoil.
My mind wandered for a while, sunk in pessimist thoughts, and before I knew it I was at the front entrance of the mansion.
After realizing my mistake, I started slowly walking towards the back, simulating to be drunk, stumbling around so that people wouldn't notice the mistake I had just made. Even if I was allowed to see the empress, the public was not to know about it.
As I got to the back of the outer wall surrounding the mansion, I kept thinking about what was wrong. After I got in, I headed directly for the empress' quarters to receive my instructions.
"Tatsumaru"- she said with a vague coldness that reminded me of Rikimaru's strange behavior in the morning-" you are to immediately go to the Asuka family's mansion, and kill every last person that is on that property. Do not ask why."- She said, just before I could ask.
It was no use to remain in the empress' room anymore, as any arguing would've gotten me killed in a matter of minutes, so I went out of the castle and started heading towards the Asuka estate. I calculated that if I walked I could be able to get there by midnight, perfect for the complicated mission handed to me. As I walked I still wondered what could have happened to make such a numerous, ancient and prestigious family deserve such a fate.
After much walking I finally got to the mansion. A truly beautiful place, big and spacious. The outer wall was decorated with ancient drawings depicting dragons gently gliding on top of lakes, spreading good luck and happiness wherever they went. After escalating the wall, I was amazed to discover that the inside was even more beautiful than the outside. The immense garden was full of life, swans swam peacefully in the lakes that surrounded the yard and doves were sleeping all over the hundreds of trees of different colors and shapes, some evidently hundreds, maybe even thousands of years old. I was so taken by the garden's beauty that for a moment I thought about turning back and leaving everything the way it was, untainted by blood and disgrace.
But my mission was clear, and I could not disobey the orders given to me.
Slowly, I crept along the wall; until I found a spot I could where I could get down.
Silently, I started walking towards the house, my sword unsheathed, my senses fully awake, and the feeling of doubt I had experienced moments before completely forgotten.
It was time to kill.
To be continued.
User Reviews
Submitted by andras (user info) at 2004-02-12 18:56:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Fleadh (user info) at 2004-02-12 07:17:50 (#)
Ranking: 2
-2 for being completly unorigional with the names and Just stealing them from the tenchu game,
The story so far is boring, any real ninja would flip out and decapitate you for making out ninjas are boring.
Always remember insite-san, "all ninjas are mammels but not all mammels are ninjas" oooooooooohhhhhhh ahhhhhhhhhhhhh
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tenchu? those are just some names I found interesting, and I can't remember where I saw them...
and this is just great, I'm getting reviewed by fans of some retard and his webpage... realultimatepower.net is one of the stupidest websites I've ever seen...
Submitted by Fleadh (user info) at 2004-02-12 07:18:32 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
really thick
Submitted by Fleadh (user info) at 2004-02-12 07:18:17 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Im thick
Submitted by Fleadh (user info) at 2004-02-12 07:17:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
-2 for being completly unorigional with the names and Just stealing them from the tenchu game,
The story so far is boring, any real ninja would flip out and decapitate you for making out ninjas are boring.
Always remember insite-san, "all ninjas are mammels but not all mammels are ninjas" oooooooooohhhhhhh ahhhhhhhhhhhhh
Submitted by KoolMang (user info) at 2004-02-12 02:10:30 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Useful fact: Ninjas were assassins for the Japanese Feudal Times.
Submitted by Ninjaburger (user info) at 2004-02-11 23:37:27 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
http://www.realultimatepower.net/ Totally kickass ninja website.. Read it, love it!
Submitted by andras (user info) at 2004-02-11 22:20:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by fingerbang (user info) at 2004-02-11 19:26:28 (#)
Ranking: -1
I thought to myself "ninjas rock this is going to be an awesome story!" but as I started reading about it it didn't have any ninjas wailing on the guitar or porking hot chicks so i quit reading. +1 for the title -2 for the story.
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what the fuck are you babbling about?
And I'd like to thank yes and stressedjester for the commentaries, I will try to develop the characters more for the next one (I actually didn't try to do it with this one because I thought it would end up being too long).
Submitted by fingerbang (user info) at 2004-02-11 20:22:09 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
no, there definitely needs mention of huge boners being popped.
Submitted by distressedjester (user info) at 2004-02-11 20:20:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Yes is right
Submitted by Yes (user info) at 2004-02-11 20:07:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
interesting but at the same time very dry and boring... doesn't have to be filled with blood and gore and boners and assholes getting ripped, but it needs depth, character development, something to make it not feel like an essay.
Submitted by Freight_Train (user info) at 2004-02-11 19:39:47 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
boring
Submitted by Ninjaburger (user info) at 2004-02-11 19:32:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
also there was no mention of huge boners being popped!
Submitted by fingerbang (user info) at 2004-02-11 19:26:28 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
I thought to myself "ninjas rock this is going to be an awesome story!" but as I started reading about it it didn't have any ninjas wailing on the guitar or porking hot chicks so i quit reading. +1 for the title -2 for the story.